Talk:Andrew Wodrow/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 21:23, 28 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Caponer (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. SFriendly.svg --Seabuckthorn  21:23, 28 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

2: Verifiable with no original research

3: Broad in its coverage

4: Neutral

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images Yes check.svg Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

Caponer, I'm happy and inspired to see your work here. The prose quality in particular has been fantastic in all your articles. As per the above checklist, I do have some insights that I think will be useful in improving the article:

  • I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview and to give relative emphasis.
  • I think the lead can be expanded. It only summarises the Political career at the moment.
  • I’ve one doubt regarding the timeline of the lead. I noticed in a few of your articles that you begin the timeline at a particular date and then go back. Why not keep it simple and linear in progression? For instance in this article, "Wodrow was the first resident Clerk of Court … . Prior to his service as Clerk of Court …". Any particular reason you are choosing this approach?
  • Move all the inline citations towards the end of the sentence to improve the flow.

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Caponer, please feel free to strike out any recommendation you think will not help in improving the article. All the best, SFriendly.svg --Seabuckthorn  20:56, 4 March 2014 (UTC)

Seabuckthorn, thank you for taking the time to conduct this very comprehensive and thoughtful review. I promise to address all the above issues you've listed within the next few days. Thanks again! -- Caponer (talk) 14:25, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
Seabuckthorn, I've completed addressing all your above concerns and suggestions. I tidied up and added to the article's lead, I converted the personal life list into prose, and I consolidated internal citations in the end of sentences rather than in the middle. Please take a look at the article to make sure my edits are in line with your suggestions and let me know if you have any outstanding comments or concerns. Thank you again for taking the time from your schedule to review this article! -- Caponer (talk) 01:43, 11 March 2014 (UTC)