Talk:Anja Breien

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Peer Review by LadyBug0731[edit]

Hi LK2001! I just went through your article and would like to offer my feedback.

First of all, I though your lead was very to-the-point and well written, even though I believe it could be extended a little bit, if possible. I appreciated that you didn’t emphasize on Breien’s works in the lead and left that for the body of the article. Yet, I think you could still mention some of her more important films at the very beginning, just to give readers a quick overview of what’s to come.

Although you only have a few sections in the article, I think they are well-organized overall. However, it might be great to divide the “career” section into sub-sections or to create more distinct paragraphs. That would help, because now the information seems a little too condensed.

Furthermore, I’d suggest you either expend the “style” section or put it before “career”. That way, it would look a little more balanced to the reader’s eye. You could also create a table for the filmography, with a column where we could see if she was director, writer, or both, for the different films.

Finally, I think your writing style is great and it’s not biased, so that’s perfect! For sure, the article could be a little longer, but the present length is completely fine at draft-stage. And it was nice to read about Breien, whom I had never heard of before today!

Good luck!

LadyBug0731 (talk) 00:43, 15 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@LadyBug0731:Thanks for the feedback! These are great suggestions. --LK2001 LK2001 (talk) 06:04, 16 March 2016 (UTC)LK2001[reply]

Editing Suggestions[edit]

I think you’ve written a good article, very clearly structured and it has lots of information!

I have a few quick suggested grammar changes: in your first paragraph, the second sentence you should begin by stating the woman’s last name, for example: "Breien is one of the leading figures…” , also after "as a writer-director in Norway” I would finish the sentence and begin a new one immediately after with “Breien’s body of work “. Additionally, in the career section, you should capitalize all of "L'Institut des hautes études cinématographiques”. “She began work in film” should be “She began working in film” instead ! At the beginning of the second paragraph, I would suggest changing it to “Breien’s first film as a director and screenwriter was a short in 1967 titled Growing Up”

Everything else looks great, the Awards section is extremely clear and well structured ! Great job and i wish you the best of luck ! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bzepp (talk • contribs) 20:34, 17 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Bzepp:Thanks for the feedback! LK2001 (talk) 05:40, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]