Talk:Arthur W. Radford
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- Nice article - minor points below, will put on hold. Hchc2009 (talk) 09:52, 30 December 2012 (UTC)
(a) the prose is clear and concise, respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct;
- "**** Admiral" (the four star icon) in the infobox on my screen looked rather like someone had redacted an expletive! Might just be the way my mind works though (if it were admiral, then the stars, it might be clearer though)
- "In this post he saw his first wartime duty during World War I." - this sentence is ambiguous (it could mean that he saw his first wartime duty, during WWI, or that this was the first of his WWI duties)
- "and tours Stateside" - I'd have gone for "and tours in the U.S." (or similar) as Stateside is a term specific to US English.
- "dawn to dusk six days a week" - are we sure this is what was meant? (dawn to dusk in December being fairly short - 07:30 to 17:00, which aren't outrageous hours, even allowing for modern Beltway traffic!)
- " Radford sought heavily to integrate" - minor, but you could lose the "heavily" here.
- "The first major operations in the Central Pacific would begin soon thereafter." > "The first major operations in the Central Pacific began that November."? (Avoids the reader having to move back a section to establish the chronology)
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- Really minor, but "Radford (right) with Captain Joseph J. Clark aboard Yorktown in October 1943." - is this a full sentence? (I'm not sure its got a verb) Hchc2009 (talk) 09:35, 30 December 2012 (UTC)
Admirals of the World
This source, which is cited in a number of places in the article, cites Wikipedia and risks being a circular reference. Can the statements sourced to it be sourced to other places? –Roscelese (talk ⋅ contribs) 20:33, 20 August 2014 (UTC)