Talk:Battle of Bailén
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Original Text of 'After the Battle' Section
After the battle rest of french army under command of Marshals Bessieres and Moncey left Madrid. After reaching line of river Ebro they placed there new defence position. Spanish victory in Bailen gave to think the other nations of Europe that french army isn't invincible. It was a matter of austrian decision to begin new war with Napoleon. Dupont after return to Paris was sent to prison. After 1814 he got rank of ministry of army in Louis XVIII goverment. After victory of Bailen spanish junta in Sevilla establish Medalla de Bailen.
Trying to find a bit more info on the Battle of Bailen I came across this page: http://www.explore-dictionary.com/dictionary/B/Battle_of_Bailen.html
This wiki article looks to be quite plagiarized from the above link.
It appears to be the reverse: at the bottom of that page you can see the text This article was derived fully or in part from an article on Wikipedia - the free encyclopedia. All text is available under the terms of the GNU Free Documentation License. Demi T/C 01:27, 2005 Apr 2 (UTC)
Whoops, my mistake! Guess I didn't read the fine print... BDerrly 23:51, 2 Apr 2005 (UTC)
Doesn't make sense
Castaños' army wasn't equal to Dupont's forces. <-- Considering there are no numbers for either general it is hard to say whether Castaño had a larger or smaller force than Dupont. Anyone know? bDerrly talk contr 12:15, 5 May 2005 (UTC)
More work ahead
Well folks, I've put a lot of work editing this page and making it readable but it still needs a lot of work. I'm going to do some more research to make the information more substantiated. Hopefully we can get this thing up to snuff and make it a viable resource for information on the battle. bDerrly talk contr 12:26, 6 May 2005 (UTC)
Dupont and his soldiers were transported on English ships to Rochefort harbour because the Spanish junta in Seville didn't recognise the pact under which they were sent to Cadiz. The part about the junta is correct, bu it lacks inf o that he british admiral collingwood also refused to bing them to france without allowance of his government.--Tresckow 20:27, 29 August 2007 (UTC)
- This review is transcluded from Talk:Battle of Bailén/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Hi, I'll be reviewing this article for Good Article status. At first read, it is quite impressive. I enjoyed your style of writing, and appreciate the effort you went to with detail. There are a few issues that need some attention, but I think these will be easily addressed. At any rate, I'll watchlist the article and as long as progress is made, I'll keep the review open.
- First, citations
- Military History project guidelines require that every paragraph have an ending citation, or at least that is my take on them. You have several statements throughout that are not cited. I don't expect every sentence to be cited. When you've made a generalization, however, there should be some citation on that, according to the WPMH project guidelines. Personally, I have no problems with what you've done, but you do need to cite at least one source where it comes from.
- Second, grammar (etc.)
- Sentences such as this tangle me up with verbs. An uprising by the citizens of Madrid broke out on May 2, slew 150 French soldiers, and was violently stamped out by Marshal Murat's elite Guards and mameluk cavalry. Was this a riot or an uprising? Did it last more than a day?
- The quote about the rheumatic colic and Murat is fantastic, but it needs better context or explanation. Did someone say this at the time, or was this an historian's comment on the event?
- Did Napoleon give priority to operations in the north, or did he prioritize several objectives in the north--if the latter, what were they?
- presumably the 6 guns weren't actually under Valdecanos--consider rewording this sentence for clarity.
- phrases like this: Napoleon wrote lightly... are ambiguous. He didn't press hard with his pen? He took the news lightly? (Unlike later, when he flew into a rage....?) These sorts of statements can be confusing to people who are not native English speakers and although this is an English language wikipedia, we shouldn't assume that all our readers will be English speakers.
- ambiguous, or confusing word choices--for example, while patrols shot west (I suppose you must mean they moved quickly to the west, but you could mean they fired their guns to the west. I'm really not sure.)
- "inspired the Austrians" Inspired them to do what? join the 5th coalition? Pick their noses? Go to church?
- Aware neither that Dupont was preparing to move in his direction, nor that Vedel was now in fact drawing in behind him, Reding, posting a few battalions to hold Bailén from whatever French formations might remain in the east, set off with his two divisions westwards July 18, intending to surround Andújar from the rear and smash Dupont against Castaños. Consider breaking sentences like this into two sentences, for the sake of readability, or of condensing it. Neither aware of Dupont's preparation to move in his direction, nor of Vedel's position behind B.(?) (or behind Vedel?) (or behind Reding?), Reding left a few battalions to hold B. and marched westward on July 18. He intended to surround Andujar from the rear, and smash Dupont...
- miscellaneous MOS stuff
- A precarious position as a sub heading will generate wrath from the MOS gnomes. So and so's precarious position might be a better choice, although it is unclear to me who was in the precarious position, except possibly all the French.
- consistent dates. Either 5 July 1809 or July 5, 1809. Pick a format.
- The right wings disengage
- supporting images.
- these are very good. Please consider giving us a map showing the location, generally, of the battle, not only the close up of of Vedel's activities on one afternoon. We could also use additional maps showing other strategic moves, if available.
- I'm a little concerned that almost half of your sources are memoirs of participants or 19th century national histories. Are these reliable sources of casualties, etc.? From my studies in the German and Swiss campaigns, I've found that the contemporaries tended to overestimate the enemy's casualties and under-estimate their own, or vice versa, depending on what they want to accomplish. Do you have access to Digby Smith's compendium of the orders of battle and the casualties?
- since there has been no action on this in 2 weeks, I'm removing it from GA nominations. Auntieruth55 (talk) 20:23, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.