Talk:Bucky O'Hare (NES video game)

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Reviewer: Artem.G (talk · contribs) 18:21, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]


Will review this one, it can take several days.

Comments:

  • " The game was developed, under the direction of Masato Maegawa, by Konami, which also published it in North America in January 1992 and in Europe on February 18, 1993." - I think this can be divided into two sentences.
    • Are you sure? This would cause the paragraph the sentence in in to be a set of short, similar-length, choppy sentences. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 20:04, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
      • let it be, that's only a matter of style.
  • "Graphics were by Kaname Shindoh, Madonna Taira, and Toshiharu Furukawa," - verb is needed, "graphics were created" or maybe "developed"
  • "Bucky O'Hare stars the titular rabbit as the captain of the Righteous Indignation, which protects the parallel universe of the Aniverse." - maybe "organization that protects the universe" or something similar?
    • Um, it is only known in comics, the TV series, and this game to protect the parallel universe, not the entire universe. What is the issue here? 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 16:12, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "His other crew members" - 'other' seems unnecessary
  • "Green, Red, Blue and Yellow Planets" - serial comma after Blue, though it's for you to decide
  • "and Earth human Willy" - are there non-Earth humans?
    • I removed this to avoid confusion. Willy is a kid that lives in Earth but gets himself into the parallel universe via an accelerator he has at home. This backstory is only explained in the TV series and comics, however, and is not mentioned in the video game. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 19:43, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "of which they are in prison" - awkward, maybe "where they are inprisoned"?
  • "was well received by professional critics." - 'professional' seems unnecessary
  • "Bucky O'Hare is a Mega Man-esque single-player side-scrolling shoot 'em up arcade adventure platform game." - too many links in a single sentence, would be great to somehow mov some of them from here
  • "It orders the Toad Air Marshall " - maybe "He", not "it"?
    • K.O.M.P.L.E.X. is a robot that never had its gender specified in any of the sources I read, so I went with It. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 18:44, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
      • sure, let it be
  • "in whatever order the player chooses." - "in any order"
  • " that can be charged by holding the B button" - some note on controls would be great, I have no idea what that means
    • I have reworded to clarify this. The longer the B button is held down, the more power the special attack will be once the button is released. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 19:59, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • " The Power-Up Meter needs to be filled for these to work," - what is it?
    • It's a visual indicating the amount of power a player currently has for the playable character's special abilities. I've reworded the sentence to make this clearer. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 18:50, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

More to come tomorrow. Artem.G (talk) 18:21, 5 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Some more comments:

  • "The remainder of the gamer takes place in the ship, which its hazards and enemies include beams" - 'which its hazards' seems strange for me, not sure what this means. Is this ship hazarded?
    • This seems pretty obvious to me. Enemies imply sentient creatures of any kind attacking the player character, and beams and anti-gravity fields aren't exactly "creatures", but they are "hazards" because they can harm the player character. So, yes the ship is filled with hazards. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 15:43, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and the ship's toads" - are there toads on the ship?
  • "who also programmed the game alongside H. Awai." - maybe "who programmed the game together with"
  • "Wrote the magazine's Martin Alessi, " - that's probably a matter of taste, but I'd prefer "Martin Alessi of Mag wrote", seems clearer
  • ""Bucky O'Hare proves that Nintendo" - title should be in Italics
  • "More lukewarmly," - should be somehow reworded, reads like OR
  • "Sushi-X of Electronic Gaming Monthly praised" - the page doesn't specify who wrote this, and ref says "Steve; Ed; Martin; Sushi-X". are you sure it was Sushi-X?
  • "Katala" - he's "Kalata"
  • "for only having both extreme ends of difficulty." - maybe simplify to "for having only extreme ends of difficulty."?
  • "Lesser critics" - why they are "lesser"?
  • "Wrote the magazine's Nick Thorpe, the game" - "Nick Thorpe wrote for the magazine", though again, it's a matter of style.
  • not sure why did you remove it, but "Known in Japan as (バッキー オヘア, Bakkī Ohea)" is relevant
    • (1) I could not find a reliable source for the game's Japanese release date. (2) It would be weird if I included this, which implied the game had a Japanese version, yet not give a Japan release date at the same time. The only way I could fix this is if you have a reliable (meaning MobyGames or GameFaqs) source. 👨x🐱 (Nina CortexxCoco Bandicoot) 15:43, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and Earth human Willy DeWitt" - as commented above

Overall, very nice article! Artem.G (talk) 07:22, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Outside comment- checked this out because of the odd disambiguation, and found it very strange that the article never once mentions the arcade game, despite having to avoid being disambiguated as (1992 video game) because of the other 1992 video game... about the same subject... by the same company... with, apparently, the same promotional artwork. It doesn't look like it's the same game, but they should at least mention each other (and Bucky O'Hare (video game) should probably be a disambiguation page that links to both). --PresN 20:24, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

HumanxAnthro thanks for the article and for the changes made! The article is really nice, and it's GA now! Artem.G (talk) 11:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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