Talk:Eugene McCarthy presidential campaign, 1968

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Eugene McCarthy presidential campaign, 1968/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 17:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

(starting review)

Removed. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
Campaign developments
  • This section could be called simply "Campaign".
Section header removed completely. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:35, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
  • I think it is awkward starting this section with a quote. In any case, MoS says that cquote is deprecated for blockquotes.
It's a good eyecatcher, and less than 4 lines so it does not require a blockquote. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:35, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
  • The TOC seems unbalanced, with the first two sections very short and this third section humongous with three subsections that contain most of the article. Perhaps the material could be sectioned in a more balanced way. Yes check.svg Done
  • The section needs more subdivisions, as the reader is faced with long sections with no subheading guidance. Yes check.svg Done
  • All quotes need an immediate citation; this section has a couple in the beginning by McCarthy that are not cited: e.g. 'Upon his entrance, the Senator articulated that he believed there was a "deepening moral crisis" in America with the rejection of the political system by citizens. As president, he hoped to "alleviate...this sense of political helplessness." ' and 'Near the end of January, McCarthy campaigned in St. Louis, where he continued his anti-war rhetoric, describing the conflict in Vietnam as against "American tradition" and commented that "no nation has a right" to "destroy a nation" with the rationale of "nation building." 'Yes check.svg Done
  • Prose. In quick succession in "Challenging the incumbent", second para: "where he stated", "where the he discussed", "where he criticized", "where he continued".Yes check.svg Done
  • "McCarthy started off the new year by making no promises about a potential challenge of the president on the Florida primary ballot" - I assume this means 1968; best to orient the reader by reiterating the year.Yes check.svg Done
Democratic Party nomination campaign
  • Also, there is not supposed to be a space between the punctuation and the reference citation.Yes check.svg Done
  • Perhaps it would help by sectioning by opponent, e.g. Kennedy, Humphrey, McGovern.
Sectioned in a similar manner. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:35, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

Xtzou (Talk) 17:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

Rely

Looks great and I will go through it soon. But you still have the cquote (for the blockquote) which MoS says is deprecated, plus I don't think it is a good way to start the section "Challenging the incumbent". It is clunky and POINTY, not neutral or encyclopedic. Xtzou (Talk) 21:57, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

This is a quotation from the MoS.

Block quotations
Format a long quote (more than four lines, or consisting of more than one paragraph, regardless of number of lines) as a block quotation, which Wikimedia's software will indent from both margins. Do not enclose block quotations in quotation marks (and especially avoid decorative quotation marks in normal use, such as those provided by the {{cquote}} template, which are reserved for pull quotes). Block quotations can be enclosed between a pair of <blockquote>...</blockquote> HTML tags; or use {{quotation}} or {{quote}}.

Although your quote is not more than four lines, you have rendered it as a blockquote and not as a pull quote. Perhaps you can consider putting it in a pullquote.

I want to compliment you on the general neutral tone of the article. I think you have done a very good job. Xtzou (Talk) 22:46, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. I removed the cquote. --William S. Saturn (talk) 00:01, 12 May 2010 (UTC)
Perhaps you want to stick it in as a pullquote.

I run because this country is now involved in a deep crisis of leadership - a crisis of national purpose - and a crisis of American ideals. It is time to substitute a leadership of hope for a leadership of fear. This is not simply what I want, or what most of us want. It is, I believe, the deepest hunger of the American soul.

Eugene McCarthy[1]
  • The MoS says to use percentage rather that % in the body of an article, unless it is a scientific article. Xtzou (Talk) 18:52, 13 May 2010 (UTC)
  • Might be good to add a date to the picture of the senator.
The date is not available at the source. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:32, 13 May 2010 (UTC)
  • However, everything looks great. Very well done! Xtzou (Talk) 19:01, 13 May 2010 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality: Clearly written; grammatically correct
    B. MoS compliance: Complies with basic MoS
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources: Reliable sources
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: Well referenced
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects: Sets the context
    B. Focused: Remains focused on the subject
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail: Pass!

Congratulations! Xtzou (Talk) 19:02, 13 May 2010 (UTC)

Thank you. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:30, 13 May 2010 (UTC)

Book sources to use[edit]

  • Eugene McCarthy: and the rise and fall of postwar American liberalism
  • Almost to the Presidency: a biography of two American politicians
  • Clean for Gene: Eugene McCarthy's 1968 presidential campaign

--William S. Saturn (talk) 07:55, 3 August 2010 (UTC)

  • ^ Cite error: The named reference ten was invoked but never defined (see the help page).