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This review is transcluded from Talk:Frame & Canvas/GA1 . The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review. Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs ) 14:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[ reply ]
I will be sure to keep watch on this next time, so I am aware when you have responded --K. Peake 14:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[ reply ]
[ edit ] Remove flatlist since it should only be bullet points in the infobox
Remove wikilink on studio album
Do not need "independent label" introduction for the lead
"After the release of" → "After the release of the band's second studio album,"
"as he was unable" → "due to him being unable"
"Recording took place" → "Recording sessions took place"
"December 1997 with J. Robbins helping to produce" → "December 1997, with J. Robbins helping with production during"
"Frame & Canvas is an" → "The album is an"
"album with lyrics co-written" → "release, for which the lyrics were co-written"
"or solely from Nanna." → "or solely wrote by Nanna."
"promoted with tours across the US," → "promoted by Braid with tours across the United States,"
"Discount and Burning Airlines ." → "Discount , and Burning Airlines ."
"Frame & Canvas received..." remove this sentence since there are not enough reviews to back it up
"It would go on to sell over" → "It had sold over"
"Frame & Canvas has appeared on best-of album lists" → "The album has appeared on best-of lists"
"in publications such as" → "by multiple publications, such as"
"NME Rolling Stone NME Rolling Stone
Add a final sentence saying something like "The band performed it in full during a tour across the US in 2012." since this belongs away from the other tours due to being a lot later [ edit ] "Following the release of" → "Following the release of their second studio album"
Remove wikilink on Braid since they are the lead artists
"played shows around" → "played shows in"
"Wisconsin and Missouri" → "Wisconsin, and Missouri"
"in February," → "in February 1997,"
"left from the band in March." → "left Braid the following month."
"Atkinson was a fan" → "Atkinson had been a fan"
"Touring continued throughout the year;" → "Braid's touring continued throughout 1997;"
"Tomorrow and Compound Red," → "Tomorrow, and Compound Red,"
"dropped out as the band was" → "dropped out as they were"
""First Day Back" and "Hugs from Boys"" → "The tracks "First Day Back" and "Hugs from Boys""
"the band traveled across the United States with" → "Braid traveled across the US with"
"in October." → "in October of that year."
"on a 7" vinyl record through" → "on a 7" vinyl , through" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
"and co-founder Darcie Knight" → "and fellow co-founder Darcie Knight"
"the band traveled to" → "Braid traveled to"
"in Arlington, Virginia ," → "in Arlington County, Virginia ," with the wikilink
"The band had met" → "Braid had met"
"work on Frame & Canvas ." → "working on the album with him."
"served as the engineer" → "served as the engineer for Frame & Canvas "
Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music) [ edit ] "acts such as" → "acts, such as"
"Jawbox (of which Robbins was a member)." → "Jawbox , the latter of which Robbins was a member of."
"the rest with Broach." → "the other five with Broach."
"up with the title" → "up with the title of"
"said it referred to" → "said the title referred to"
"compared to previous releases; he explained it" → "than the band's previous releases; he explained this"
"It features Broach" → "The song features Broach"
"included references to being an" → "includes references to Braid being an"
Wikilink airplay
"and settling in after" → "and is about settling in after"
"talks about a breakdown" → "talks about breakdowns"
""this cool beat ... immediately once he started playing. 'This is different'."" → ""this cool beat". Nanna stated that "immediately once he started playing", he thought: "This is different.""
Wikilink Urbana, Illinois
Target Champaign to Champaign, Illinois
"street lights in the town" → "street lights in Urbana"
"was written with" → "was written along with"
"they were making in the basement was happening upstairs." → "Braid were making in the basement was being made upstairs."
"According to him," → "According to Broach,"
"himself on tour he would compose" → "himself on tour, he would write" [ edit ] Retitle to Release and promotion
"and March 1998," → "and March of 1998,"
"on April 7 through" → "on April 7 of that year, through"
"with a stint across the United State" → "by performing across the US"
"until early May." → "until early May 1998."
"The band immediately went" → "Braid immediately went"
"throughout May, and various acts in June." → "throughout that month, while they were accompanied various acts in June 1998."
"In August, they played" → "In August of that year, the band played"
"October and early November." → "October and early November of 1998."
"of November and December, the band" → "of November and the following month, Braid"
"After a handful of" → "After a number of"
"went on a west coast tour" → "embarked on a west coast tour"
"throughout April with" → "throughout the following month with"
"with Eversor in May." → "with Eversor in May 1999."
"In June, the band announced" → "In June of that year, Braid announced"
"playing a friend's wedding," → "performing at a friend's wedding,"
"shows in August," → "shows in August 1999,"
"a hometown performance[2]" → "a hometown performance,[2]"
"as the Lucky to Be Alive (2000) live album." → "as their live album Lucky to Be Alive (2000)."
"from the band's last five days" → "from Braid's last five days as a band"
"included in the band's" → "included in their" [ edit ] "pop melodies"," → "pop melodies" on Frame & Canvas ," with the target
"which were" → "which he wrote were"
"The record cemented itself as one of the band's" → "In the opinion of Blake, the album cemented itself as one of Braid's"
"as to say by the end" → "as to say that by the end"
"said it was" → "said the album was"
"in Atkinson, a" → "in Atkinson, alongside a"
"over 16,000 copies." → "over 16,000 copies worldwide."
"emo album lists by" → "emo album lists, being named to lists by"
Target Vulture to Vulture.com per MOS:LINK2SECT
"said the album establish" → "said the album established"
"The album was an" → "Frame & Canvas was an"
"scene that was based" → "scene, the latter of which was based"
"favorite Braid album: "You" → "favorite Braid album, saying: "You"
"US tour where they performed" → "US tour, during which they performed" [ edit ] All music by Braid, lyricist noted below in brackets.[11] All songs produced by J. Robbins and Braid.[10] → All music by Braid.[11] All songs produced by J. Robbins and Braid.[10]
I have suggested the above change, since you should use the track listing template to lay the tracks out since the writers are known for all of them and see MOS:TABLECAPTION [ edit ] Use div col to place Additional musicians and Production on the right from Braid [ edit ] [ edit ] Yeepsi (talk ) 16:31, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[ reply ]
