Talk:GateKeeper (roller coaster)/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:09, 24 July 2013 (UTC)

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  • "Sandusky, Ohio" why not just leave the pure wikilink to Sandusky, Ohio?
  • Lead para has a few choppy very short sentences, consider merging a couple to improve the flow.
  • Again, as always in these articles, find links for jargon link "inversions".
  • "The new ride replaced" you mean "Gatekeeper replaced...
  • "and raised Cedar Point's quantity of roller coasters to 16." how? They demolished one roller coaster and a gyro tower, and built one roller coaster.
  • Order of lead is odd too, you mention the start of construction 2/3 of the way through the second sentence, surely this should be earlier?
  • "$25,000,000 - $30,000,000[1]" en-dash to separate the numbers, could you use m as million instead of all those zeros?
  • What or who or where is Erie?
    • Which Erie are you talking about? Lake Erie and Erie County are both mentioned in the article.-- Astros4477 (Talk) 18:51, 27 July 2013 (UTC)
  • "US$25 million" compare this to the format in the infobox... Consistency here would be good.
  • Stop saying "the new roller coaster" each para and reiterate "GateKeeper".
  • "The park had to do hundreds" -> "had to do" is yuck prose. Maybe "Hundreds of tests were conducted..."?
  • Image captions which aren't complete sentences don't need a period.
  • "About 12,000,000 pounds" again, why not "12 million"?
    • I'm not sure how to change that when using the convert template.-- Astros4477 (Talk) 19:04, 27 July 2013 (UTC)
      • {{convert}} has instructions on how to use parameters such as e6 to reduce down to "millions" rather than "000,000"... The Rambling Man (talk) 09:03, 28 July 2013 (UTC)
  • Is it GateKeeper or GateKeeper? Be consistent.
  • Check reference titles for compliance with WP:DASH i.e. use en-dash and not spaced hyphens.
  • Seven external links looks a little bit adverty to me.

Some issues, but nothing too major, so I'll put it on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:47, 27 July 2013 (UTC)

I addressed all your comments.-- Astros4477 (Talk) 19:28, 27 July 2013 (UTC)