Talk:Gender inequality in El Salvador
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Overall I really liked your article. I felt that your article covered many aspects of gender inequality. I feel that you included enough links, but you may want to reorganize your sources so that they are all the same format. Some of the citations are straight links, whereas others are mla/apa citations. I would also consider reorganizing your sections so that legal history comes first, followed by health, education, domestic life, employment,political involvement and crimes against women. I feel that this helps to organize household versus public gender inequality. However, as it stands the article's readability and flow are great. You may also want to add some photos of women in El Salvador for your various sections. There are many freely available photos on wikimedia commons I also have a few recommendations for the body of your paper:
The first source in your opening paragraph is listed before the period instead of after it.
You mention a study completed by Lim and Kabeer but do not reference the year the study was completed. You could also include the year for the Edme and Dominguez article.
I would rename this section to "Domestic abuse" since that is the main premise of the section.
You begin the paragraph with "under the law," however you do not specify whether it is a national or local law.
I am not sure whether you have the information, but what is the reason for the discrepancy between differences in attendance for men and women in secondary school. You might want to add more detail here.
You mention how abortion is illegal and that it is highly restrictive, however you do not have a source for the claims.
Response to Jasdeepsgill
Thank you for the suggestions on the article, I tried to implement all of them. As you suggested, I reorganized the order of the sections to better reflect household versus public gender equality. I searched for pictures of Salvadoran women in wikimedia, but unfortunately was unable to find any. I'll keep searching for in other sources. I expanded the section on political involvement by adding women's involvement in municipalities. I also added the years to the Dominguez, Kabeer, and Lim articles. I then made the more minor changes that you suggested to the article, including citations and changes in wording. Finally, I expanded the section on secondary education so that it further explains the disparity between men and women's education levels. Thank you again for your help. --Nelson Gladwell (talk) 04:13, 23 April 2013 (UTC)
Comments and Questions for Peer Review
You need to add first names for Lim and Kabeer when you first mention them.
I agree with Jasdeep in that I think education needs to be expanded in conjunction with a discussion of how gender inequality impacts children and youth and how that impacts their development potential. You can include this under education or in another section of course. Explain the gdol and the time allocation data, if you have access to it, for Salvadorian men vs women and help the reader understand what the general experience of women in El Salvador is like and why there are discrepancies in education, labor force participation etc. What are they doing instead? Alev.bilginsoy (talk
Under the Political involvement section: Are women more involved on the local level. How much say do they have in household decisions and are they encouraged through churches or community organization to participate?
Under Abortion section. I understand that ARENA and FMLN are parties but I believe it needs clarification in writing.
Finally, I am curious what types of efforts are being made to improve the discrepancies between the opportunities and capabilities of Salvadorian women. What are the organizations, if any, that are involved? Most recent progress?
Response to Alev
Alev, thank you for the work you put into reviewing the article. I wish I could've found answers to all of your questions, but I gave it my best shot. Here are the changes I made. Per your question about women's political involvement at the local level, I added content about a 2007 CEDAW report, which found that due to GOES policies, female participation at the municipal level had improved. As far as organizations that work to improve participation, the ASPARLEXSAL is not the only organization, but a good example of one. I also tried to clarify the fact that ARENA and FMLN are the two major political parties in the country. Lastly, throughout the article I tried to show the role that GOES is playing to improve equality, though at times it may be inefficient. Thank you for your comments, I'll continue to research in addressing your other questions. --Nelson Gladwell (talk) 04:24, 23 April 2013 (UTC)
This is a very well-written, informative article. Here are my suggestions for improvement: 1) In order to give a comparative sense of how El Salvador performs on health, education, political participation, and labor force participation, I suggest adding a few sentences on each from the HDR 2011 "medium human development" group averages. This is reported at the end of Table 4. 2) Domestic abuse section could move towards the end and put with the Crimes against women. 3) The economic participation/status of women discussion is rather limited. The employment section is very good, but narrowly focused on maquila employment. The article does not touch on much of the course concerns: Poverty-CCTS, asset ownership, agricultural work, migration north and, ideally, how these are linked to other wellbeing outcomes. If you can add short "placeholder" sections (for others to develop later) on one or more of these issues, giving a brief discussion on the issue (based on a key source each), it would be useful. CCTS, and possibly microcredit, is an obvious connection that is relatively easy to add. A quick search on Google Scholar for 2012 onward shows: Gideon and Molyneux, Social Politics, 19(3), 2012. A one-pager by Fabio Soares on CCTS http://www.ipc-undp.org/pub/IPCOnePager168.pdf might be useful too (The IPC website should have a longer pieces on El Salvador too). 4) The crimes against women section: is it possible to provide more context or comparative sense of why El Salvador is so prominent in this area? 5) I note that the article almost exclusively is based on reports, and does not use the few scholarly journal articles you had compiled originally. Addressing point 3) might help strengthen this aspect. BerikG (talk) 16:47, 27 April 2013 (UTC)