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Highest, highly, and rarest[edit]

Before another revert is done to the article... let's talk it out first. I am going to make the assumption that this is the central source we are all referring to. The source itself makes two major distinctions:

  1. "One of the most highly decorated Armenian-Americans to ever serve the United States"
  2. "His decorations are among the highest and most rarely bestowed on US military personnel"

As such it technically does not support the claim that, "He is considered one of the most highly decorated U.S. soldiers". Merely that his awards are amongst some of the highest in the US military, and that he himself is a highly decorated Armenian-American. I am inclined to agree with AzureCitizen's revision. Mkdwtalk 00:39, 24 April 2013 (UTC)

I am fine with AzureCitizen's revision. I hope I am not accused of of WP:Puffery. Since the source stated "highest" decorations, I subsequently understood that he would also be considered one of the highest decorated U.S. soldiers since they go hand in hand. Proudbolsahye (talk) 01:12, 24 April 2013 (UTC)
It was a simple understanding of the source's meaning. I wouldn't worry about puffery in this case. Mkdwtalk 03:19, 24 April 2013 (UTC)


I don't think a local paper is a highly reliable source for the scarcity of military awards. We list the Silver Star (awarded 100-150,000 times), the Legion of Merit (not very rare from my reading of the article), the Bronze Star (254 in the relatively small Kosovo campaign alone), and the Air Medal (not very rare from my reading of the article).

What are the 6 most rarely given awards that the US has to give to its military personnel? How many of those has Juskalian received?

What medals did Juskalian receive that less than 100 people were granted? Less than 1,000? Kevin McE (talk) 05:54, 24 April 2013 (UTC)

It is rare in the sense that the decorations are of a span of three decades and due to the participation of three wars and several other operations. A feat like that is rare in itself and is rarely seen. Proudbolsahye (talk) 06:00, 24 April 2013 (UTC)
In that case the text, and the proposed text for the Main Page, is simply wrong. If the combination is rare, that needs to be sourced. If none of the medals that he has are rare, then we cannot say that he has "decorations among the rarest bestowed on United States service members." That is simply wrong, and is now removed. Kevin McE (talk) 18:08, 24 April 2013 (UTC)

Despite the source citation, it probably is dicey to say "rarest" (emphasis added). I certainly don't think the Bronze Star is rare having received it myself. After 26 yrs of service (USA/USAR), I'd say the LOM is definitely awarded less frequently than the BSM, but it's commonly given as a retirement award for O-6's and higher. The Silver Star, however, is reasonably rare as our nation's third highest combat decoration. As Kevin McE mentioned, our Wikipedia article states somewhere between 100-150,000 Silver Stars have been given. If you check the source citation for that, it says:

We estimate that the number of Silver Stars awarded World War I to present is somewhere between 100,000 and 150,000. While that number seems quite large, when compared to the more than 30 million American men and women who have served in uniform during that time period, it is obvious that the Silver Star is a rare award, bestowed on fewer than 1 in every 250 veterans of military service.

Which means less than half of one percent of service members earn one. So if we said that the Silver Star is "rare" rather than saying "among the rarest", I don't think that's such a stretch. If I had to draw a line for "rarest", I'd probably put it at the next decoration up, the service crosses, which are second only to the Medal of Honor itself. Back to the article at hand, I think we would have been better off swapping out "rarest" with the adjective "highest", e.g., "as well as decorations among the highest bestowed", and returning that phrase to the text. Comments? Regards, AzureCitizen (talk) 20:17, 24 April 2013 (UTC)

Per AzureCitizen. Kevin McE has only provided how many medals have been given in terms of quantity while neglecting to place them under context. 150,000 may sound like a lot of recipients, but when compared to the tens of millions of military servicemen, it would definitely be a rare medal, especially when it is considered the third highest medal in the U.S. Army. Also, the sentence has been removed without proper consensus. I will revert now. If need be, AzureCitizen's proposal of using the term "highest" to describe the medal may also be a better replacement. But as of now, I don't see whats wrong with using both "highest" and "rarest". Proudbolsahye (talk) 21:36, 24 April 2013 (UTC)
The Silver Star alone is obviously a rare award and among the highest. See:

Here are some books that say the same as well:

Theres just so much more. I say we should definitely keep the status quo. Երևանցի talk 22:00, 24 April 2013 (UTC)


So the Silver star may be rare. That does not justify the claim, nor is it sourced in the article. Kevin McE (talk) 06:23, 25 April 2013 (UTC)

I believe you're the only one who believes it is not a reliable source here...

Since its inception in 1941, the Citation has been awarded fewer than 100 times to include the Second World War, the Korean War, the Cold War, the war in Vietnam, Operation Iraqi Freedom and Afghanistan and only five units as small as Mr. Tinney's have received the Citation. To be singled out in this manner is a distinct honor.

  • Army Medal Guide p. 561 - "Only on rare occasions will a unit larger than a battalion qualify for award of the decoration."
I'm not quite sure why we're even dicsussing this. The source is explicit: "His decorations are among the highest and most rarely bestowed on US military personnel." If Kevin McE wants to argue that in this case a newspaper is not a reliable source, WP:RSN is available. But right now this looks like a case of WP:IDONTLIKEIT to me where reliable sources are ignored because an editor's personal opinion contradicts the source. Huon (talk) 16:46, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
I may also want to add that the hook he is complaining about is of his own revision (see: his revision at prep 2) Proudbolsahye (talk) 17:17, 25 April 2013 (UTC)

There has been no proper consensus reached as to whether the source is unreliable. In fact, the source is reliable since the "highest" and "most rarely" decorations are confirmed by other news sources, government agencies and books. Երևանցի talk 20:06, 25 April 2013 (UTC)


The relevant issue in terms of current phrasing is not directly a function of the number of medals issued, nor the percentage of military personnel to have been awarded them. IF the claim made is that these are "among the rarest bestowed on United States service members", then we need to know the list of decorations available, sorted by number issued. If more than one of Juskalian's are in the top 10 or so of that list, the claim could be considered valid, if not, it is not. It the meantime, a throwaway comment in a peacock piece in a local paper is not a reliable source for such a claim. Journalists in such circumstances can claim some leeway and licence: encyclopaedic editors cannot. Kevin McE (talk) 11:11, 27 April 2013 (UTC)

I have taken this to WP:RSN. Let's see what others have to say about the reliability of the source. Huon (talk) 12:56, 27 April 2013 (UTC)

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:George Juskalian/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hchc2009 (talk · contribs) 16:13, 8 June 2013 (UTC)

Looks like an interesting commander. I'll read through properly and start the review in the next few days. Hchc2009 (talk) 16:13, 8 June 2013 (UTC)

Ready when you are :) Proudbolsahye (talk) 21:33, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
Cool. Was waiting for the flurry of copy editing to finish! :) Hchc2009 (talk) 21:38, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
Proudb, may I suggest that we tell Hchc that we will let him know when we're ready for his first review after we've implemented all the suggestions already given? We're not ready yet, Hchc. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 21:50, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
The suggestions are FAC suggestions. It may differ for GA. The criteria is different. But the question is how different? Proudbolsahye (talk) 22:00, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
I honestly don't know how they differ (but I'm sure it's all written down somewhere). I'm assuming that implementing them will move the article in the right direction. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 22:40, 12 June 2013 (UTC)
Okay. That's fine with me. Proudbolsahye (talk) 22:41, 12 June 2013 (UTC)

I'll stand ready to review when you're both content with the quality. Hchc2009 (talk) 19:23, 13 June 2013 (UTC)

Hchc2009, after much review and copyediting. I think were ready to hear your review. Proudbolsahye (talk) 19:26, 13 June 2013 (UTC)
I'm sorry, Proudb, but I have to disagree with you. I don't think we're ready yet. Here's why: the article needs some restructuring to consolidate it into a standard plan. I suggest, after the header paragraphs: 1) Early life 2) Military career 2a) WWII 2b) Korea 2c) Mission to Iran 2d) Missions in New York and France 2e) Vietnam 3) Life after retirement 4) Personal life 5) Recognition 6) Military awards and decorations 7) Refs, etc. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 21:33, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
In other words, current 1.1 becomes 1), current 1.2 moves to 2), current 1.3 becomes 3), current 1.4 becomes part of 3), current 3 becomes part of either 3) or 4), and all the info about wives, children, divorces, etc., moves to 4). --108.45.72.196 (talk) 21:47, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
What to do with active service section? Proudbolsahye (talk) 22:01, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
Further suggestions, Proudb: 1). As wonderful as it is, the photo of GJ with his son should be moved down, even to the Personal life section. 2). Good articles rarely have paragraphs that are only one sentence long. 3). Most of the Other activities in the infobox have to go (if he was a writer, we need a list of his written works). 4). The entire POW section needs to be ruthlessly condensed, and I mean ruthlessly (I know it hurts). You're doing great work here, keep it up. Good catch on the arrowhead device, by the way. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 01:17, 15 June 2013 (UTC)
  • 1) Done. 2) I'll work on that as well. 3) I found a few of his writings online including, "Harput Revisited", "Why Didn't They Shoot More?", "The Life You Save", "A Journey to New Julfa" and I believe there are many others. The question is...where would a list of his writings go? 4) Ah! You killed me with that one! I think a detailed depiction of his POW days is important because he himself was a highly significant POW and spent years in encamped. If you are going to remove some sentences please please let me know before hand so we can discuss together and maybe shorten them up. Proudbolsahye (talk) 03:35, 15 June 2013 (UTC)
I won't be cutting anything more tonight. It's late. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 05:28, 15 June 2013 (UTC)

Ready for review. Proudbolsahye (talk) 16:34, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Is hchc watching? Hchc2009, we're ready for your review for GA. Thanks. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 16:37, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Right, last bits are done, as per below. Then I think we're good for GAR completion. Hchc2009 (talk) 17:46, 27 June 2013 (UTC)

Well-written:

(a) the prose is clear and concise, respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct;

I'm going to divide comments into GA points and minor; treat the latter as recommendations, but they aren't essential for GA status.

GA points:

  • "George's father Kevork was from Kharpert, Ottoman Empire" - "Kharpert, in the Ottoman Empire" - compare to saying "from Adelaide, British Empire" - it wouldn't quite parse correctly.
  • " from Arapkir, Ottoman Empire" - ditto
  • "However, Kevork Juskalian felt that there was no secure future for him in the Ottoman Empire and subsequently fled the Ottoman Empire to United States arriving in Ellis Island on November 15, 1887." - "to the United States". You could safely lose the "However" at the beginning.
  • "in Worcester Massachusetts" > "in Worcester, Massachusetts"
  • "He was also instrumental in the establishment" - you don't need the "also" (which suggests a comparison with the previous sentence)
  • "He earned his commission " - as the first sentence of a section, you'll need to be specific here (e.g. "George Juskalian earned his commission...")
  • "He left active service and intended to study law at the American University in Washington, D.C. when his father died in 1938" - there's a comma missing here; he surely didn't intend to study law when his father died, but was rather intending to study law, and then his father died?
  • "George Juskalian was assigned as first lieutenant " - "given the rank of first lieutenant"?
  • "and his group was put under test in Fort Benning, Georgia" - I wasn't sure what this meant.
  • "The Allies, who have organized three amphibious task forces" - "who had organized"
  • "Juskalian was part of the task force that invaded through the port of Oran with Col. Roosevelt Jr. as brigadier general and assistant 1st Infantry Division commander" - I was confused - is this saying that Roosevelt was a 1*? If so, why is he being titled as colonel?
  • "With helpful fire from British battleships" - "supporting fire"?
  • "Due to his efforts in the campaign, Juskalian distinguished himself in battle and earned the Silver Star." - The "Due to..." and "distinguished himself..." don't quite align here. I don't think you're saying that he distinguished himself in battle because he worked hard in the campaign?
  • " the soldiers that were approaching him from 50 feet away. " - this needs a metric equivalent - you could use the 50 feet (15 m) method if you liked.
  • "The POWs were sent to " - POWs will need expanding out from the acronym
  • "The tunnel was about 3 feet high by 3 feet wide. " - ditto above
  • "Juskalian gave one of his cigars that were gifted from his brother-in-law Hagop Chiknavorian" - would "that had been given to him by his brother-in-law" be simpler?
  • "Eventually, the POWs traveled a 350 miles journey" - you'll need a metric equivalent here.
  • "Secretariat of the War Department General Staff of the Army" - is there a comma or similar missing here?
  • "and preparing briefs for General Eisenhower's perusal and decision" - "and preparing briefs for General Eisenhower." I think the perusal and decision are redundant... having written a few myself! :)
  • " Firse Lieutenant Robert C. Gutner " "First"
  • " On the night of March 26, Juskalian received orders from Colonel Kern for a withdrawal of his forces" - "to withdraw his forces"
  • "In the east of Old Baldy a battle took place at Pork Chop Hill, which was a hill 234 feet high and was made famous by the movie Pork Chop Hill starring Gregory Peck." > "To the east..."; 234 feet will need a metric equivalent; "was later made famous"
  • "The Chinese pushed an offensive" There's a word missing here I think.
  • "and a successful withdrawal of troops" - "the successful withdrawal of his troops"
  • "chief of operations and training at Headquarters, First Army" - I think this should be "at the headquarters of the First Army", but am happy to be corrected.
  • "His duties in New York were cut short due to the Berlin Crisis of 1961 where Juskalian would be sent to France to join the 1st Logistical Command. " - "when Juskalian was sent to France"
  • " to assume duties of G-3, chief of plans, operations and training" - "to assume the duties", or "to assume the role of..."
  • "After his tours of duty in New York and France, Juskalian volunteered to fight in Vietnam in 1962–1963. " - unclear if this meant that we are uncertain when he volunteered (either in 1962 or 1963), or that the process of him volunteering was spread over the two years (which seems odd as first glance)
  • " was assigned to Headquarters, Military Assistance Command Vietnam (MACV)" - again, I'd lowercase Headquarters in this format
  • "which he kept ever since as a souvenir" - I think that "that he kept for the rest of his life as a souvenir" would be more correct
  • "the St. Nerses Shnorhali Award and "Lifetime Achievement and Pastor's Recognition Award" " -unclear why the second is in speech quotes.
  • "74th Anniversary of Washington's Armenian Community" - unclear why anniversary and community are capitalised.

Minor:

  • " Thereafter, he served first as a minor official" - "He served as a minor official..." would be simpler
  • " He was then invited to serve in the Persian consulate in Mezire" - "work in the" would avoid multiple "serves"
  • "George Juskalian was also the cousin of famed Medal of Honor recipient of the U.S. Army, Ernest Dervishian.[7]" - Personally, I wasn't sure this felt relevant to Juskalian's article.
  • "He was also instrumental in the establishment of the Armenian Church of Our Savior on January 18, 1891." - again, it wasn't clear to me how relevant this felt to Juskalian's story.
  • "In August 1942, Juskalian was one of more than 15,000 soldiers of the division who would board the RMS Queen Mary and ship to Europe" - "soldiers of the division who boarded the RMS..."
  • "Juskalian became a POW for 27 months and was sent to locations in Italy, Poland and Germany." - "was held in locations in..."?
  • "The POWs would partake in various activities" - "The POWs partaked in various activities..."
  • "Juskalian became an editor to a monthly newspaper" > "editor of a monthly newspaper"
  • " the German troops moved the POWs westward into Germany in order to be clear of the Soviet advance from the east" - "in order to avoid the Soviet advance"?
  • "Peter and George walked through an opening in the prisoner compound fence and ran towards Frankfurt in the hopes of reaching the American lines." - to check, I read this as they left the compound, (literally) ran towards Frankfurt, and were then (presumably quite quickly) picked up?
  • "After surviving the bombardments in Nuremberg, the POWs were resettled in a camp near Munich. " - You could simplify to "After surviving the bombardment, the POWs..." - the Nuremberg context is established in the previous paragraph.
  • "However, they were given the opportunity to return to Nuremberg as wounded soldiers to obtain treatment.[20] The POWs agreed to return to Nuremberg because it was closer to the American lines." > "They were given the opportunity to return to Nuremberg, however, as wounded soldiers to obtain treatment; the POWs agreed, because it was closer to the American lines." It would avoid repetition and be a little shorter.
  • "Juskalian was flown to Paris, France where he would present himself at the military post and request financial assistance." - "he presented himself" (active, vice conditional)
  • "An officer, who was already acquainted with George's older brother Richard (Dikran)" - "who knew George's older brother"?
  • "When asked if he was related to Richard, George responded by saying Richard was his older brother and upon hearing this, he was given all the provisions he needed." - I thought this seemed overly literal/long. How about "George confirmed that Richard was his brother, and he was then given all the provisions he needed."?
  • "the staff and faculty of The Infantry School" - I don't think the "The" needs a capital here, but happy to be corrected!
  • "While at the School, he availed himself of the opportunity of taking airborne training and qualifying as a parachutist." > "While at the School, he took airborne training and qualified as a parachutist."? (shorter)
  • "on inspection visits to the many military installations present there" - could just be "on inspection visits to many military installations" - shorter, and he couldn't inspect units that weren't there! :)
  • Personal life section. I'd combine the first two paragraphs, and the third and fourth paragraphs.
  • "George Juskalian along with his family moved to Centreville, Virginia in 1989 where he remained the rest of his life." - I'd advise "In 1989, George..."

(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.

Factually accurate and verifiable:

(a) it provides references to all sources of information in the section(s) dedicated to the attribution of these sources according to the guide to layout;

(b) it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;

(c) it contains no original research.

  • None found so far. Hchc2009 (talk) 11:26, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

Broad in its coverage:

(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;

(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias, giving due weight to each.

  • Appears neutral at this stage

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

Illustrated, if possible, by images:

(a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;

  • NB: I've cleaned up the Reserve Office photo. Hchc2009 (talk) 11:26, 22 June 2013 (UTC)

(b) images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

  • "The Oflag 64 where George Juskalian spent 19 1/2 months out of his 27 months as a POW." I'm not convinced that this is a full sentence; if not, it shouldn't end in a period."
  • "George Juskalian and his son Kevork" - v. minor (and thus not a GA review requirement) but I'd give Kevork's surname for completeness in the caption

Awards and decorations (from IP 108 talkpage)[edit]

Two questions. 1) Is it normal for the ribbons to be positioned that way? I mean empty in the top left part? 2) Shouldn't the infobox have small ribbon logos as before? Proudbolsahye (talk) 19:23, 14 June 2013 (UTC)

Hi, Proudb. 1) We're going to need help from someone who has done a few of these before. I'm having trouble centering the second row (three ribbons), so, for the time being it approximates how it looks on his jacket, where the lapel forces the lopsided shape. I expect it to change when we figure out how to do it. 2) The featured articles I looked at did not have small ribbon logos in the infobox. My model was John F. Bolt. Other articles I looked at (not FA) were Elliott C. Cutler, Jr., David Hackworth, George W. Dunaway and Hal Moore. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 20:21, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
Other FA's to use as models are: Kenneth Walker, Kenneth R. Shadrick, George Andrew Davis, Jr., Leslie Groves, Thomas J. Hudner, Jr., Douglas MacArthur, Thomas C. Kinkaid, Fred Moosally, Edwin Taylor Pollock and Arthur W. Radford. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 20:41, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
Alright IP. That's fine with me. The number of awards is an odd number so we need to find a FA to get an idea. Proudbolsahye (talk) 21:02, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
Hi, P. I've copied this to the article talk page in case anyone else wants to contribute. I think I have a solution to the ribbons arrangement problem: I think I'll just award him one more medal so he has an even number! <grin> --108.45.72.196 (talk) 21:13, 14 June 2013 (UTC)
Haha! Make sure it's the Medal of Honor! Proudbolsahye (talk) 21:24, 14 June 2013 (UTC)

Detail questions for Proudb:[edit]

Hi, Proudb. 1) What year did he receive the Shnorali Medal from the Catholicos? That number should be added to the lead. 2) Do we have the citation for his first Silver Star? It also could be put in a boxquote under the ribbons. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 17:06, 17 June 2013 (UTC) (I'm using the John F. Bolt FA as my model for the presentation his ribbons and citations, if you want to look there. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 17:15, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Hello, IP. 1) The year he received the Nerses Shnorali Medal is in the recognition section (1988). 2) I'm going to work on finding his first Silver Star citation. Turns out his second Silver Star citation is a lot longer than two sentences. Proudbolsahye (talk) 17:22, 17 June 2013 (UTC)
Update As of now I cannot find his first Silver Star citation. It is from WW2 and should be about his achievements in Northern Africa. Also, turns out in 1995, Juskalian met Bill Clinton and former President of Armenia Levon Ter-Petrossian at a Whitehouse reception. Should I add that info? Proudbolsahye (talk) 17:38, 17 June 2013 (UTC)
I wouldn't. Thanks for the info. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 17:47, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

New question: why do the journal articles GJ wrote only show a single page number? I would expect to see a pp. type range of page numbers. --108.45.72.196 (talk) 18:04, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Legitimate question IP. I am very limited when it comes to the published articles. At this point, all I know is the start page. But I am going to search and find Ararat quarterly and Armenian Review volumes and see the pp. range when I can. It would have to be at a local University or something. Proudbolsahye (talk) 18:17, 17 June 2013 (UTC)

Copy edit[edit]

Generally, the article is good. The minor edits I've made:

  • Used non-breaking spaces (e.g. 560km560{{nbsp}}km).
  • Take care when using dangling modifiers.
  • Numbers are consistent. Wikipedia gives you the option of writing in either numbers or words (e.g. 27 or twenty-seven).
  • This sentence: "Veterans Administration Advisory Committee for Former Prinosers of War". Is Prinosers meant to be Prisoners?

 Honette 03:16, 17 July 2013 (UTC)

I'm currently going through each sentence. It's advisable to use a topic sentence for each paragraph. A topic sentence tells the reader what the following paragraph will be about. I'll try and sort them out without modifying the content.  Honette 03:46, 17 July 2013 (UTC)

Honette (talk · contribs), first of all I would like to thank you for putting the time and energy into your copy-edits. After all copy-edits are done and after you meticulously checked each sentence, let me know if you need anything or have any questions. Once again, thank you. Proudbolsahye (talk) 04:14, 17 July 2013 (UTC)

v2[edit]

I've done another round of CE. Please check my edits in case I incorrectly expressed information; any editor is free to disagree with my edits. My edits are certainly not final. Other editors may spot something I missed or I could detect them later. I understand that obtaining the Featured Article status for this article is desired. The article's tone, content, cohesion, choice of words and sentence structures is a separate task that may need to be examined to meet a certain criterion (I have no idea what it is). Best to ask featured article reviewers for their advice and see what needs to be worked on.

Kevork Juskalian felt that there was no secure future for him in the Ottoman Turkey and subsequently fled to the United States, arriving in Ellis Island on November 15, 1887. Consequently, the Juskalian family became one of the first Armenians to come to the United States.

— A sentence in the Early life section

Did Kevork Juskalian go with his family to the United States or did he go by himself? I ask because the sentence starting with Consequently (meaning as a result of his moving to the United States), the word family is used. Family is a group of people but the previous sentence states one person fled to the U.S. Maybe it's meant to read: ... and subsequently fled to the United States with his family ...

George Juskalian was also the cousin of Medal of Honor recipient of the U.S. Army, Ernest Dervishian.

— A sentence in the Early life section

This sentence appears to be randomly inserted and does not have a relationship with the paragraph. I have no idea what to do with it. Leave it there for now.

Oran fell to the Allies on November 10

— A sentence in the North African Campaign section

Is there a year for this? Other dates provide the year but not this one?

When landing in Oran on November 8, 1942, the 1st Infantry Division's initial objective was to confront the German Afrikan Korps commanded by Erwin Rommel and support Bernard Law Montgomery's advance against the Italian forces.


— A sentence in the North African Campaign section

Initial means "occurring at the beginning". Does this imply the 1st Infantry Division had another objective, I thought? Or maybe the sentence is meant to say: When landing in Oran on November 8, 1942, the 1st Infantry Division's primary objective was to confront the German Afrikan Korps commanded by Erwin Rommel and secondary objective was to support Bernard Law Montgomery's advance against the Italian forces.?

On January 21, 1945, the German troops moved the POWs westward into Germany to avoid the Soviet's advance from the east.

— A sentence in the Oflag XIII B in Hammelburg, Germany section

Who was avoiding the Soviet? I interpret the sentence as: (a) the POWs were moved and the German troops remained—the POWs were keeping away from the Soviet; and (b) once the POWs were moved, the Soviet stopped their advancement. Maybe the sentence is meant to read: ... the German troops moved themselves and the POWs westward into Germany to avoid ... or ... the German troops moved and their POWs moved westward into Germany to avoid ...

On April 17, American troops secured Nuremberg ...

— A sentence in the Liberated as a POW section

Is there a year for this?

Random notes

  • I cannot find the styling rule of bachelor and master (a person who holds a degree from a university) in Wikipedia's style guide so I followed the advice from Oxford and Bachelor of Journalism. For example: master's degree in international transactions or Master of International Transactions, not master's degree in International Transactions. This one is tricky: Bachelor of Science, Journalism or bachelor's degree in science, journalism, not bachelor of science degree in journalism.
  • Multiple-word contractions should not be used: could not, not couldn't, according to MOS:ABBR under "Contractions".
  • Some sentences were shortened.

 Honette 13:48, 17 July 2013 (UTC)

Honette (talk · contribs), thanks for your review once again. Here's what I fixed and what I believe shouldn't be fixed.

  1. Kevork Juskalian felt that there was no secure future for him in the Ottoman Turkey and subsequently fled to the United States, arriving in Ellis Island on November 15, 1887. Consequently, the Juskalian family became one of the first Armenians to come to the United States. FIXED.
  2. On January 21, 1945, the German troops moved the POWs westward into Germany to avoid the Soviet's advance from the east. FIXED.
  3. When landing in Oran on November 8, 1942, the 1st Infantry Division's initial objective was to confront the German Afrikan Korps commanded by Erwin Rommel and support Bernard Law Montgomery's advance against the Italian forces. FIXED.
  4. If the FAC brings up Ernest Dervishian's irrelevance to the article, I will delete it. However, up until that point, I'd like it to stay since it is relevant to his extended family and provides a deeper military background of his family.
  5. On April 17, American troops secured Nuremberg and Oran fell to the Allies on November 10...I didn't provide the year for these dates because I thought it was over repetitive due to the fact that the year was mentioned in previous sentences.

Proudbolsahye (talk) 17:22, 17 July 2013 (UTC)

No worries. While I was reading the dates (without their years), I paused for a moment and figured out their years in the previous sentences, as you already mentioned. So it works! :)  Honette 01:20, 18 July 2013 (UTC)

File:George Juskalian 1.jpg to appear as POTD soon[edit]

Hello! This is a note to let the editors of this article know that File:George Juskalian 1.jpg will be appearing as picture of the day on October 29, 2013. You can view and edit the POTD blurb at Template:POTD/2013-10-29. If this article needs any attention or maintenance, it would be preferable if that could be done before its appearance on the Main Page. Thanks! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:45, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

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George Juskalian

George Juskalian (1914–2010) was an Armenian-American member of the United States Army who served for over three decades, fighting in World War II, the Korean War and the Vietnam War and was awarded multiple decorations, including two Silver Stars and the Legion of Merit. After retiring from the military, he spent eight years working at Washington D.C.'s Southeastern University.

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Close paraphrasing issue[edit]

I was planning on turning to this page after Confiscated Armenian Properties in Turkey to try and get the copyright violations and close paraphrasing removed; however, seeing that the article is going to be highlighted on the main page soon, and since significant close paraphrasing issues remain very dug in (see featured discussion), what is the best way to deal with this? I can add a little help, but nothing close to what I did on Confiscated Armenian property (and there are many more obscure offline sources)--a tag sufficient? Copyvio the page? Other approaches? @Crisco 1492:@Nikkimaria:@BlueMoonset:@Proudbolsahye:. One example of derivative writing:
  • From the Original: "Colonel Juskalian reorganized his forces and sent B Company and A Company, under 1st Lt. Jack L. Conn, in a second attack during the afternoon of the 24th. The two companies reached Lieutenant Patteson's B Company, 31st Regiment, positions and passed through them. By nightfall they had won back one quarter of Old Baldy, but were forced by enemy resistance to dig in and hold....At 0430 hours on 25 March, Colonel Juskalian sent C Company under 1st Lt. Robert C. Gutner, around the right flak to attack up the northeast finger of Old Baldy....C Company was "pretty well shot up" and had to be withdrawn and reorganized. Some members of the company were still pinned down on the right flank of Baldy and could not get out. Colonel Juskalian called for tank support to knock out the Chinese bunkers being used to pin down the 30 to 40 C Company men left on the hill"
  • From the wikipedia page: "When the Chinese offensive came to a halt, Juskalian reorganized the forces under his command and sent both A and B Companies, under First Lieutenant Jack L. Conn, on a second attack. This offensive proved only partially successful as they regained only a quarter of the hill. On March 25, Juskalian ordered C Company, under First Lieutenant Robert C. Gutner, to attack from the northeast. This offensive failed because enemy forces halted their advance. Many members of the C Company were trapped on the right flank of Old Baldy and Juskalian requested tank support to demolish the Chinese bunkers to free 30 to 40 troops of the company." AbstractIllusions (talk) 04:41, 21 October 2013 (UTC)

Comments regarding close paraphrasing[edit]