Talk:Grassroots lobbying

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Origins[edit]

I would like to add an "origins" type section of Grassroots lobbying, any good resource ideas to start off that research? Nageljac09 (talk) 23:42, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

Excellent work so far[edit]

Been looking through the new additions ... great job so far! Jaobar (talk) 00:22, 5 April 2011 (UTC)

Political campaigns[edit]

I would like to make a section regarding political campaigns and grassroots electoral connection. Is this okay for a section, and if so do you have any suggestions on resources to start the research for this topic? --Courthoulds (talk) 17:42, 5 April 2011 (UTC)

Sources used for Regulation section[edit]

I'm not sure if the sources I used for the Regulation section are okay to use or not, are they? --Courthoulds (talk) 15:48, 6 April 2011 (UTC)

Hello[edit]

Hello there :) This is your online mentor; Looks like you have done a good job of the article. Yes Michael?Talk 15:56, 13 April 2011 (UTC)

Mentor comments[edit]

Hey there, Laura had contacted me on my talk page, so here I am Face-smile.svg. I have some comments on the article; before I make them, I would like to say that, overall, you guys have done a great job; especially with the content. The article on the whole is well referenced. I will make a list of what could possibly be improved. If any of these seems too tedious to perform, then you might as well leave it; I feel that my criteria are quite harsh sometimes. Anyway, here's the deal.

  • Some minor copyediting. See WP:COPYEDIT for more on this; The first sentence has to be modified so that only "Grassroots lobbying" is in bold. Also be wary of use of italics. Words defined, described, or referenced as words should be italicized. Nothing else.
  • Some sentences are not clear. For example:

"This type of lobbying is different from the usual type as it is naturally brought upon by the organization unlike the structural lobbying seen elsewhere."

What is the usual type?

  • "The latest trend of the past decade has been the use of social media outlets to reach people across the globe. " I think you should use some other term in place of "latest trend"; trends keep changing don't they.
  • "Large companies take advantage of grassroots lobbying as a means of impacting change in legislation." This implies that all Large companies take advantage of it; maybe that is not the case.
  • Avoid using terms like "Not surprisingly", because it probably reflects your opinion.
  • You could add more to the section on the IRS; if that is all the info available, no issues.
  • The article could be brightened up with images Face-smile.svg. Perhaps you could upload some clicked ones, or you could search Wikimedia Commons for it!

And again, as I mentioned, the article is good, and is able to stand on its own now; some changes like the ones suggested would be good. Great work! Yes Michael?Talk 20:02, 2 May 2011 (UTC)

Nominate for DYK?[edit]

Can we nominate this article? I'll leave it to the online mentor to decide. Jaobar (talk) 06:32, 4 May 2011 (UTC)