Talk:HIV/AIDS in China
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This article falls short of the GA criteria. In particular:
- The lede is too short for such a long article
- The criticism section would be better off if it were integrated into the rest of the text—the split into pro-government and anti-government makes some parts non-neutral.
- A lot of the text is unreferenced, even many statistics in the text.
Hi, this chapter contradicted five studies from expert bodies without any evidence: „Predictions of the size of the HIV/AIDS epidemic in China have been substantially overestimated by several expert bodies. Notable examples include:“ Therefore, I changed it into: „Predictions of the size of the HIV/AIDS epidemic in China have been made by several expert bodies. Notable examples include:“
Furthermore, it quoted Hesketh et al. for saying: „These estimates assumed substantial spread of the virus from high-risk groups to the general population, yet the few population studies, and, in particular, trends from sentinel surveillance of pregnant women in high-risk areas show that such spread has not occurred.“ I found this reference in the internet and added the corresponding link. But the quotation was wrong as the tests quoted in the paper found 43 % of HIV infections in low-risk groups.
I did not find the full text of the other two references for the above sentence. Thus, I changed the Notes so that the whole chapter becomes a bit more neutral. Anyway, please check these two references if you have access to the full text as I am not quite sure whether they are correctly quoted.
Furthermore, the rest of the original notes did not seem to have sufficient evidence either: “Therefore, these predictions were made on unfounded assumptions. Some have argued that the effect of these high and inaccurate predictions have drawn attention and resources away from areas of greater need. For example, China's burden of disease from tobacco use is enormous.” I added the link to the summary of the reference. But it only states that there are “300 million men smoke cigarettes and 160 million adults are hypertensive” and that “Much remains to be done, and resources and sustainability are major issues.” There is no evidence, though, that this article asks to take the money from Aids tests. I left it in but neutralized it a bit by adding another (correct) reference to Hesketh et al. The paragraph would still need a proof that somebody argued to take away money from Aids test to areas of greater need.
New Legislation: Linux users?
From "New Legislation" section, "The new legislation resulted from communication and coordination among many agencies, including administrators, service providers, lobbyists, politicians, Linux users, and policymakers."
- The edit that added that bit of information was SultrySuzie (talk) 03:34, 22 February 2009 (UTC) , which seems to be totally vandalism.
The article doesn't make it clear enough that all of the UN and US's predictions have been proven false and the Chinese ones have emerged as far more accurate. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 18.104.22.168 (talk) 10:32, 6 August 2011 (UTC)