Talk:Jacob Aaron Westervelt

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Non-encyclopedic format[edit]

Much of this article is written in a very bouncy voice and quite the non-neutral tone. Just look at the police section: "A law-abiding and determined Mayor against a frequently undisciplined lot of rather obstinate policemen...conflicts were bound to occur." I wouldn't be surprised if this were lifted from a book or website on the man. Original content would be welcome. Or a box at the top that identifies the hideous errors within the article (I don't know how to code). J1.grammar natz (talk) 03:18, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

Hi. The article is in the view of some editors that will continue to make a clean-up soon (for example User:Ukexpat). --Rectilinium'♥' 04:13, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
e.g. Im sorry if my english sometimes is strange, but Im actually Swiss. By the way: the above mentioned sentence was not lifted from a book or website. --Rectilinium'♥' 04:23, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
I do think someone needs to go through the article and de-italicize all the references to Jacob Aaron Westervelt. It is not a convention on Wikipedia to italicize the subject of articles like this. Gatoclass (talk) 05:18, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
Never mind, done it myself. Gatoclass (talk) 05:26, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
Nicely researched article. I moved citations to after the punctuation per MOS:PUNCT. I'm afraid I did not see the League of Copyeditors notice on the article until after submitting the change. -- Brianhe (talk) 18:37, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

Outstanding article[edit]

This is a fine job of research, documentation and writing, your mother tongue (not English) notwithstanding. I saw your posts on ukexpat's page, and checked out the article to see if I could help. Sorry, it's too well done; there are so many poorly written entries that I just can't take the time to critique this superb piece of work (which, like all significant undertakings, could be improved; but when an article is as good as this one, what's the point?). Thanks for your wonderful article. If I knew how to nominate you for some prize, I would. Amccray (talk) 00:35, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

Thank you very much Amccray! I actually invested 150 hours researching and writing this article, yet I know that it still can be improved. But honestly I was delighted to read your message, after all the criticism :)... With kind regards --Rectilinium'♥' 04:38, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

Copy edit[edit]

First of all, I must congratulate Rectilinium on this article, an outstanding job. I urge you to keep contributing as you are a great asset to this project. I saved my copy edit in two diffs, please see this diff and this one. I have attempted to make the tone a little more encyclopedic without destroying the narrative, added a few relevant links, and attempted to use the {{Ship}} and {{USS}} template where possible, ref punctuation fixes, removed some unnecessary commas etc. It is possible that I missed some things, but I will revisit the article again soon to check. Happy to deal with any comments here (preferably) or on my talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 20:28, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

Geocities-hosted references[edit]

Some of the references used in this article are sites hosted on Yahoo's Geocities free web service. Yahoo has announced that it is closing this service down, so, unless owners of those sites move them elsewhere, a valuable source of references (and not just for this article) will be lost. I urge all editors who are interested in doing so to archive relevant Geocities-hosted pages using WebCite - it's very straightforward and better than losing the reference completely. Thanks. – ukexpat (talk) 20:42, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

Okay, ref #13 is on the archiving queue... --The New Mikemoral ♪♫ 00:07, 29 April 2009 (UTC)
Hmm.... done twice, I also made an archiving request. --Rectilinium'♥' 00:31, 29 April 2009 (UTC)

Very good article![edit]

I agree that this is a very good article. My primary problem is the longish quote in the section on his term as mayor. It is a useful quote, but it could be broken out into subsections that indicate his political positions on the problems he's faced. I found this article on the peer review request section, but it apparently is already peer reviewed. However, I suggest that this hideously long quote be pared down, and made into sections, with some indication of what he did based on his political position. Fernando Wood, his mayoral successor, was a notable Copperhead. Where did Westervelt stand on this problem? --Auntieruth55 (talk) 16:39, 22 May 2009 (UTC)

Hi Auntieruth. At the moment Im in bad health. As soon as I feel a bit better, I will try to make what you suggested. With kind regards, --Rectilinium'♥' 03:40, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

Assessment comment[edit]

To try for a higher assessment and to further improve the article you should nominate it for GA review. Hekerui (talk) 09:47, 30 October 2009 (UTC)