Talk:Plumb (Field Music album)

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Did you know? nomination[edit]

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:28, 25 December 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • ... that the Field Music album Plumb was nominated for the 2012 Mercury Prize, even though the band thought their odds were "minimal to nil"?
    • ALT1:... that the Field Music album Plumb has so many falsetto vocals that a reviewer said it was as if the band "will settle for nothing less than the highest possible notes"?

5x expanded by Hunter Kahn (talk). Self-nominated at 01:29, 19 November 2019 (UTC).[reply]

  • This looks pretty interesting, so I'll grab this for review (will start ASAP, maybe after dinner). mike•owen discuss 18:06, 20 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.

Overall: Both of those hooks are brilliant (clearly sourced in the article), but I'm concerned over the copyvio detector's results. If you can get it under 40% I will be more than happy to approve this. mike•owen discuss 18:48, 20 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks MikeOwen, I will take a look at this when I can (I'm at work, currently). But quick question: could the copyvio detector results simply stem from the fact that the article makes heavy use of quotations, particularly when it comes to review blurbs in the Reception section and, in the 70% example you cite above, direct quotes from Q&A interviews? — Hunter Kahn 20:22, 20 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • That's partly it, but it also has a fair bit to do with large quotations from interviews as well. My advice would be to reword some of the sections where the percentage is quite high or to remove somewhat less important bits. Some sources are only i little bit above 40%, so reducing those won't be too hard. Hope you have a great evening! mike•owen discuss 20:52, 20 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      • MikeOwen I've gone through and reduced the amount of direct quotations in the article, of which there were many. I've gotten all of them down to under 40% in the Copyvio detector, except for three that are just slightly above 40%, but they are only that high because each of those three has a quotation box in the story. I don't think I can get it below 40% without removing the quote boxes altogether, which I'd rather not do because I think it would reduce the quality of the article, so I'm hoping you'll find it acceptable as it currently is? — Hunter Kahn 00:00, 22 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Plumb (Field Music album)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Famous Hobo (talk · contribs) 00:17, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one up. Expect some comments tonight. Famous Hobo (talk) 00:17, 24 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Famous Hobo do you still plan to review this, or should I ask someone else to take it? — Hunter Kahn 20:54, 18 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hunter Kahn, Famous Hobo hasn't edited on Wikipedia for three weeks. Would you like me to try to find another reviewer, or would you prefer to do it yourself? Thanks, and sorry for the delay. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:12, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    • Either is fine with me, BlueMoonset. Thank you for the offer. :) What would be the correct way to go about this? Should I remove the "Review" tag this article's listing on the WP:GAN page? Or should I mark it as seeking a second opinion? Or some other method? — Hunter Kahn 17:50, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hunter Kahn, just leave it as it is, and I'll see if the person I have in mind can take this on. If that doesn't work, then we'll go to plan B (which is the 2ndopinion status). BlueMoonset (talk) 18:18, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lede[edit]

  • "With 15 tracks over just 35 minutes..." Remove the word "just".
  • "Plumb has been described as a 'melting pot of genres, influences, and styles'..." There is a source here – is this definitely mentioned in the body?
    • Yes it is, in the reviews section. The only reason I use the citation here as well is because it's a direct quotation. — Hunter Kahn 21:16, 7 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...incorporating elements from each of the Brewis brothers' earlier side projects, including the funk style of Peter Brewis' The Week That Was, and the new wave and synth rock of David Brewis' School of Language." This is quite a mouthful! I would remove the specific phrase "each of the Brewis brothers' earlier side projects, including" to get "incorporating elements from the funk style of Peter Brewis' The Week That Was, and the new wave and synth rock of David Brewis' School of Language." Or something like that.
    • Good call; reworded along these lines. — Hunter Kahn 21:16, 7 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...and dissatisfaction with consumerism and other aspects of the modern world." Change the second "and" to something like "as well as".

Background[edit]

  • "...the band was attracted to because of the political, economic, environmental implications of such stations." There should be an "and" after the word "economic".

Musical style and composition[edit]

Album structure[edit]

  • "David Brewis said the individual tracks are modular and shift rapidly between sections in a more linear way than normally found on a pop album." The surname can be removed – they have already been introduced as Peter and David. This comes up in a couple of other places too.
    • The way I had been doing it is I referred to them as "David Brewis" or "Peter Brewis" at the beginning of a given section, and then by first name only in each subsequent reference within that section. But if you disagree with that, I can remove the last names but all from the very first references in the body of the article. — Hunter Kahn 21:16, 7 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Mix of genres[edit]

  • "Plumb incorporated elements from the side projects of each of the Brewis brothers' side projects, including the funk style of Peter Brewis' The Week That Was and the new wave and synth rock of David Brewis' School of Language." The side projects of the side projects? Remove the duplicate.
  • Oops, LOL. Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 21:16, 7 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Instrumentation and vocals[edit]

  • "Songs like "A New Town" and "Is This The Picture?" in particular features falsetto vocals..." Remove the 's' from the end of "features".

Lyrics and themes[edit]

  • "Lavery described the album as an 'existential crisis in a post-industrial north-east town', and, likewise..." I would replace the "and" with a semicolon – the sentence will flow better.
  • "Lemmon wrote the album addresses themes of..." Is this meant to be a quote or is it saying that it was the way the album was written (if that makes sense)?
  • "...to mean that to have more money is to have status ... It's become..." I'm not a professional quoter, but I think square brackets need to be used between the "...".
  • "Plumb also included lyrics about everyday life for the British working class. highlighting..." There is a full stop where there should be a comma."
Note to Thatoneweirdwikier, I have to stop here for now but will finish the rest either tonight or early tomorrow. Thank you! — Hunter Kahn 21:16, 7 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Fine by me. Thanks for your work so far! User:Thatoneweirdwikier | Conversations and Contributions 04:53, 8 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Recording and production[edit]

  • "Prior to the recording of Plumb, Field Music had shared studio space for 10 years with the band The Futureheads. It was called 8 Music, part of an arts cooperative. That studio became unavailable after the community building in which it was located was closed down, due to the Recession. So Field Music built their own new studio..." These few sentences feel awkward. I would suggest a rewrite.

Release[edit]

  • "He felt they compliment Field Music well..." Surely this should be in the past tense.

Sales[edit]

  • "This section is too small. I think it should be combined with the critical reception to create a "Reception" section, with "Critical reception" and "Commercial performance".
  • "Received a boost in sales after the album was..." There should be an "It" at the beginning here.
  • "...on 1 November 2012, the Official Charts Company announced Plumb had experienced a 17% increase in sales following the nomination announcement." We already know there was a boost, so I would consider merging this and the previous part of the sentence (before the semicolon) together.

Critical reception[edit]

Reviews[edit]

  • "Tim Cain called Plumb Field Music's best album.,..." What's with the first full stop?
    • Misplaced period, fixed that. — Hunter Kahn 20:56, 8 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...structurally sound creations (that) hide in..." The brackets are not needed – an ellipses is.
  • "Field music [sic] may be Britains [sic] greatest current group." The [sic]s here should be replaced with the sic [sic] template.
  • This section is incredibly long – arguably way longer than need be. I would recommend a trim-down of the reviews.
    • I trimmed it a bit. I realize it's still a bit long and probably wouldn't pass muster at FAC like this, but I think it's sufficient for GA now. But if you think I should trim it further, let me know! 21:06, 8 July 2020 (UTC)

Mercury Prize nomination[edit]

  •  Nothing to comment on here – good job!

Charts[edit]

  • This section is very short. I would combine with the sales section.

Concluding note – placing on hold[edit]

@Hunter Kahn: I have finished my review. Placing this nom  On hold for seven fourteen (long article, lots of stuff) days. User:Thatoneweirdwikier | Conversations and Contributions 08:19, 20 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

...pinging Hunter Kahn again as it has been nearly a week. User:Thatoneweirdwikier | Conversations and Contributions 17:58, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]