Talk:Secular Buddhism

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Fourth paragraph, about "Traditional Buddhist ethics", needs rewriting to be understandable[edit]

It's hard to tell if the words at the start of the fourth paragraph are the beginning of a sentence or a title of a section, at least partly because of the confusing use of dashes and commas there; and as a result the paragraph is very confusing.

original fourth paragraph:

Traditional Buddhist ethics—while some schools, especially Western Buddhist ones, take more progressive stances regarding social issues—such as conservative views regarding abortion, homosexuality and human sexuality, may or may not be called into question as well.

I could suggest the following as a possible rewrite, but I have no idea if it's factual, just that it may be more easily understandable:

Traditional Buddhist ethics: while some schools of Buddhism, especially Western Buddhist ones, take more progressive stances regarding social issues (in contrast to conservative views regarding abortion, homosexuality and human sexuality), these issues may or may not be called into question as well by Secular Buddhism.

I won't make the above rewrite myself because I don't know if what it says is true or not.

I suppose it's possible, from looking at the original writing style of the paragraphs preceding the fourth one, that the paragraph might rather mean as follows, rewritten:

While some schools of Buddhism, especially Western Buddhist ones, take more progressive stances regarding social issues, traditional Buddhist ethics (such as conservative views regarding abortion, homosexuality and human sexuality) may or may not be called into question by Secular Buddhism as well.

But I also don't know if that statement as I've rewritten it is actually true or not.