Talk:Sorga Ka Toedjoe/GA1
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Reviewer: Drmies (talk · contribs) 03:51, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- Crisco, why'd you trim the second image? Drmies (talk) 03:54, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Focus on Roekiah and Landauw, otherwise it would be unclear at thumbnail size. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:02, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Well, I guess I could stand this (with full image). Looks a little long though. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:06, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Focus on Roekiah and Landauw, otherwise it would be unclear at thumbnail size. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:02, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Can you rephrase "extensively featured"? It sounds like K-pop writing. Moreover, the 30 October 1940 review praises the music and says it was supervised by Kartolo--the latter point is worthwhile mentioning in the lead since he has an article and was a songwriter as well. It notes that several other actors came from the "world of music"--I think that's enough for a sentence or two in the Production section. [Update: wait, you have that covered to some extent with "Roekiah, Kartolo, Landauw, and Titing were experienced kroncong singers." So nevermind, I suppose--"NVM"?] Drmies (talk)
- Done, and expanded anyways. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:57, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Remove your "sic" in note c: is it the spelling of "tafereelen"? That's normal for the time, a double e for an open syllable with a long e. Drmies (talk) 04:22, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Done, and yes that was the issue. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 04:57, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- I am well pleased. Congratulations, good work. Someday the government of Indonesia will give you a medal. Drmies (talk) 05:04, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, good Doctor. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 05:18, 11 June 2013 (UTC)