You've come to the right man—I'm an English teacher (though I suspect you already knew that).
I've read over it, and I'll take a closer look tonight. I'll hide all of my suggestions, so all you have to do is click on "show changes" on the page history. That will highlight them, and you can follow up on anything you think is worthwhile, and disregard anything that doesn't work for you. Prisonermonkeys (talk) 01:45, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
- Okay, I've gone through and added my thoughts, and corrected the odd spelling error. There were no serious grammar issues; just a few things that might warrant expanding upon, but it was a sustained, logical and coherent piece of writing. It might need a little polish (rearranging the word order to better articulate an idea), but I asked my students to write an essay detailing a subject of their choice and one of them chose the CLK, this is probably what I'd expect them to produce. Prisonermonkeys (talk) 05:17, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
Hi The359. I do have a copy, but it's at my parents' house and I'm afraid I won't have access to it until Christmas-time. It does have a Le Mans report but I can't remember any of the details.
However, I do have a copy of Le Mans: 1990-99 by Quentin Spurring with me, so when I've got some time this weekend I can take a look at it for you. Your draft article seems to be very comprehensive already, but I can check the details and see if there's anything else that can be added.—Midgrid(talk) 09:22, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
- OK then, as I've said before, I think you've covered the important areas already, but I'll go through your sandbox now to look for any further details or discrepancies. The citation is:
- Spurring, Quentin (2014). "1999: High fives in Germany". Le Mans 1990-99: The official history of the world's greatest motor race. Sherborne, Dorset: Evro Publishing. p. 384. ISBN 978-0-9928209-1-6.
- Background - all fine.
- It might be worth restating the minimum weight (900 kg) where you mention the reduction. The book emphasises that one of the reasons for building a completely new car was so it could be designed to the new limit (p. 344).
- The engine had 32 valves and produced 600 bhp at 7,000 rpm (p. 344).
- The lower half of the monocoque was unchanged from the CLK GTR, but the top half was redesigned due to a new homologation rule that required a load test to be carried out on the complete cockpit section, not just the rollcage in isolation (p. 344).
- The book also mentions a "flatter nose" as one of the aesthetic changes (p. 344).
- It had a shorter wheelbase then any of its GTP class rivals, with longer front and rear overhangs. It was the same overall length as the CLK GTR (p. 345)
- Aerodynamic testing was carried out in the University of Stuttgart's wind tunnel, with Fondmetal acting as a consultant (p. 345).
- The cars also tested on the road course of the Homestead-Miami Speedway (p. 345).
- 1999 season - all fine.
- Le Mans
- Practice and qualifying
- The cars completed almost 30,000 miles in total testing mileage before Le Mans, the only serious problem occurring when a front suspension link pulled out of the monocoque in Prequalifying for Le Mans (p. 345).
- Contrary to what you have written already (groan), the book states that Webber's monocoque was not damaged in its qualifying crash, and was used again for the warmup (in which it crashed again) and the race. It also gives a different description of the accident: "[...]the CLR lifted clear of the ground. Then it tipped over a right angles to the track surface, landed on its right side, bounced back onto its wheels, and slammed into the barrier." (p. 345)
- Warmup - all fine
- Some more detail - Dumbreck made light contact with Marcel Monteiro's GT2 Porsche at the Virage Ford on his third lap (p. 346).
- The trackside area in which Dumbreck's car landed had been cleared of trees a fortnight before the race (p. 346).
- Again contrary to your existing sources, the book states that "Dumbreck—dazed, bruised, but otherwise undamaged—got himself out of the wreck" (p. 346).
- Lagorce was running in fourth place when he was called in to withdraw at 8:45 am; Schneider had led the race in the early stages after the first fuel stops (p. 346).
- The FIA also instructed its Advisory Expert Group, chaired by Sid Watkins, to devise new technical regulations to prevent cars from becoming airborne under similar circumstances in the future (p. 346).
- Editorial: "The fact remained that only AMG Mercedes had got it wrong. The team itself pulled the flawed CLRs from a planned ALMS campaign." (p. 346)
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I have made a mistake in editing the page Audi R18. I know that I downloaded the picture(that you reverted), and went to the correct selection, but I just was confused and didn't know what to do, so I put it in the incorrect one(I was a new user to Wikipedia that time). I just wanted to update the picture of the racecar I loved. But what you did there was right. I respect you decision to put it in the speedy deletion. I could have got into more trouble if you didn't do that. Thanks to you, I quickly found out how to upload it and do the right thing. If you look at the page again and see the pictures I updated, It was because of my mistake and your move. Thanks to you, ALOT!
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