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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:GrahamColm 11:30, 30 November 2013 [1].

Australia women's national wheelchair basketball team at the 2012 Summer Paralympics[edit]

Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:40, 30 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

There are many sports articles, but no article on disability sport has even been featured. Let's make history and change that. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:40, 30 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • Question - What makes this suited for FAC and not FLC? There appears to be more list than prose. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:18, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    Articles on sports events normally have a lot of statistics, but it doesn't resemble any list article that I know of. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:05, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    Neither am I, but as it stands at least half of this article is list. Some politician and award FLs are also quite prosy (List of colonial governors of Massachusetts is somewhat comparable, though a bit shorter). — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:25, 1 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose – I'm very surprised to find myself on this side, and am happy to see something sports-related at FAC that is different from the usual articles, but I'm seeing too many glitches in the writing. I'd expect to see some of these typos from a non-native English speaker, not one of FAC's most frequent participants. I can't lower my standards for a veteran or all of the cabal accusations we get would be proved to be true; therefore I must oppose until fixes are made. And there are quite a few that are needed for a modestly sized article.

  • Background: Typo in "but havd never won gold."
  • Group stage: "Australian Gliders Head Coach, John Triscari...". I don't think the comma or the capitalization of "Head Coach" are appropriate.
  • Brazil: En dashes are needed for the score ranges in this section, and the others by the looks of it.
  • The comma after "Triscari" at the start of the section's third paragraph should be taken out.
  • Great Britain: "but the final score was a 51-24." Remove "a" since that is a grammatical flaw.
  • "but the Gliders shared the ball around". In all of the time I've watched sports, I've never heard the phrase "shared the ball around". Did you mean just "shared the ball"?
  • Canada: I see erritt here, which I assume is a name typo.
  • Quarter final - Mexixo: I'd think that the hyphen here and in the next two subsections would be en dashes per the MoS.
  • "a" needed in "and received quarterfinal berth against Mexico".
  • "Australia's first shot at goal was taken by Kean from the free throw line, but she missed both shots." First it's "first shot at both", but then multiple shots are mentioned. Which is accurate?
  • Semi final - United States: "Meanwhile, Team USA was able to get ahead, to 40–39." I'm really confused now, because the summary says Australia won by the same score.
  • "with Team USA's Rose Hollerman missing a one from inside the paint just before the shot clock ran out." Is "missing a one" acceptable phrasing for wheelchair basketball? I'm not familiar with this sport and just wanted this to be clarified.
  • Gold medal match - Germany: "and at that pint had beaten them three of the previous four times they had played." Either "pint" is a typo or a reference to alcohol. One of the two.
  • All caps in reference 8 need fixing.
  • Ref 24 is to Wikinews, which isn't a reliable source.
  • The publisher of ref 46 (The Age) should be italicized as a print publication. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:45, 2 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    • Corrected all the typos. Kean's shots made sense to me; you get two free throws from a foul. Re-worded to make it clearer. Sharing the ball around is a common term in Australian football, and we tend to use football terminology in basketball. Google turns up [2][3][4][5][6] The Wikinews one is interesting. The quote is actually from the Paralympic News Service. After a game they would produce a sheet with the flash quotes from the coaches and players that the media could incorporate into their stories. Laura transcribed it rather than scanning it. After the Paralympics, all the flash quotes disappeared. Anyhow, after the Games I put all the documents in boxes, the Australian Paralympic Committee shipped them back to Australia in a container, and I deposited them in the Sports Information Centre at the Australian Institute of Sport in Canberra. Changed the reference to the original document. Hawkeye7 (talk) 07:36, 2 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      Made a second bot-assisted sweep looking for hyphens. Somebody please raise an RfC to ban endashes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:43, 3 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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