Nominator(s): --Music26/11 15:11, 14 August 2014 (UTC)
This article is about the pilot episode of Seinfeld I've worked on it for some time now and feel it is ready for FAC, and here we are. My only personal concern at this time is the information regarding claire the waitress, which is not so much info about casting for the character, as it is about why she was removed from the show, so perhaps it should be (re)moved. Anyway I'd like to hear your opinion about it. Thanks in advance.--Music26/11 15:11, 14 August 2014 (UTC)
Seinfeld and David wrote a TV pilot as they felt their "show about nothing" concept wouldn't sustain that long.- "sustain" used oddly here - I know what you're getting at but not alternative is jumping out.....
- Better now?--Music26/11 14:35, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
prompted the network executives to decide not to pick up the show for a first season.- could probably reduce three verbs to two here.....
- Better now?--Music26/11 23:47, 17 August 2014 (UTC)
Jep Epstein- I'd use a couple of descriptors to introduce who he is at first mention
- Do you have any suggestions? He's a composer, I think it would be kinda weird for the sentence to read "The music used in the episode was composed by composer Jep Epstein..." as the 'composer' bit would be fairly obvious.--Music26/11 23:47, 17 August 2014 (UTC)
Kenny Kramer initially demanded that he'd play the part of Kessler- don't abbreviate verbs - a bit informal
- Done, I've also removed quite a few more through a control+F search.--Music26/11 23:47, 17 August 2014 (UTC)
However, David did not want this and was able to talk him out of it- be good to add why
- Source doesn't say (you can look it up on youtube for verification btw), it only says Kenny Kramer wanted to play kramer, and then moves on to the casting process of Richards. However, as it isn't explicitly stated that David talked him out of it I've re-written the sentence but I have not been able to find information as to why Kenny Kramer did not put his foot down.--Music26/11 14:35, 18 August 2014 (UTC)
cautious supportOtherwise looking goodish for prose and comprehensiveness I think....Cas Liber (talk·contribs) 13:45, 17 August 2014 (UTC)
Closing comment -- Not sure why there's been so little interest in this FAC but with only one (albeit welcome!) review in almost a month I can't see this gaining consensus to promote any time soon, so I'll be archiving it shortly. Given the lack of reviews, you can re-nominate it before the usual two-week waiting period is up if you so desire. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:33, 10 September 2014 (UTC)