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Chandralekha (1948 film)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I can't find anymore ways of improving the article, although there are thousands of ways which are impossible by me, but possible by everyone else.

Thanks, Kailash29792 (talk) 13:20, 8 July 2013 (UTC)

  • For a start, I see multiple tags at the beginning of the article (clean up, copy edit, and so on). Any plans to address those?--Dwaipayan (talk) 22:42, 9 July 2013 (UTC)
I tagged the article with those tags to make people work more, while I search for content to add. However, instead of just directly copy pasting, I had also rewritten sentences minorly to avoid copyvio. U can also suggest me improvements. Kailash29792 (talk) 04:25, 10 July 2013 (UTC)

Comments by Vivvt[edit]

  • There are many long quotes in the article, which could come under copyvio, so either remove them or reduce them with no close paraphrasing.
  • Use template:tracklisting for Tamil tracklisting, similar to Hindi. Also, I am sure you can get more info on singers, song duration etc.

- Vivvt (Talk) 02:52, 21 July 2013 (UTC)

Reply: Thanks Vivvt, I'm trying very hard to change the quotes, which I believe any veteran editor can easily do. As for the tracklisting, I can't find any additional info on the Tamil songs (despite the film being primarily Tamil), and I wish someone could help me find. Kailash29792 (talk) 06:12, 21 July 2013 (UTC)

From August onwards[edit]

There have been major changes now. Pls review them. Kailash29792 (talk) 15:45, 4 August 2013 (UTC)

Comments from Vensatry
  • What was the budget of the film?
Reply:Yes check.svg Done. the budget is INR3 million, added to the infobox ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 05:55, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Outside the lead no text should be in bold per MOS:BOLD with a few exceptions.
Reply:The film's international titles Miss Chandra, Shakunetsu-no ketto and Indiens hersker are alone bold, can those be exceptions? ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 05:55, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • I gave the link just for you to read it and understand when to use it. Film titles should be italicised. Vensatry (Ping me) 16:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Why is the Tamil tracklisting embedded in a table where as the Hindi is not. Maintain uniformity.
Reply:Till I find more information on the Tamil songs (not so easy as it seems), the table form will stay. Kailash29792 (talk) 07:48, 7 August 2013 (UTC)
Yes check.svg Done... or maybe 50%, because I'm still searching for info on the singers ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 05:55, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "Chandralekha was also selected to be screened at the 10th Chennai International Film Festival in December 2012". Since the date has passed I suggest you to change the tense accordingly.
Reply:Yes check.svg Done. Made as past tense ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 05:55, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • What makes "Raaga.com", "Kalyanamalai Magazine" and behindwoods a RS
Reply: Raaga.com is the most accurate source for the tracklisting (it even has an iOS app [1]), KM and Behindwoods are also reliable, being used in GA's like Karnan. Kailash29792 (talk) 07:48, 7 August 2013 (UTC)
  • I don't think sources are needed for soundtrack. We don't cite them even in FAs. Indiaglitz and BW are not considered reliable as they don't have articles in WP. There have been many debates regarding the credibility of these sources in the past. It's upto you to convince the GA reviewer. KM is definitely not a reliable source. Vensatry (Ping me) 16:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Sourcing is inconsistent throughout the article with many of them missing vital parameters such as "work", "publisher", etc.,
Reply: Yes check.svg Done. I've used the parameter "Work" for all the online ref's, for the italic effect ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 05:55, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
To conclude, now newspapers alone are italicised. Kailash29792 (talk) 05:52, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
  • Try to reduce the amount of quoted material.

Vensatry (Ping me) 06:30, 7 August 2013 (UTC)

Reply: Only one quoted material, is as good as it is supposed to be. Kailash29792 (talk) 07:48, 7 August 2013 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure if you understood the meaning of "quoted material". Vensatry (Ping me) 16:13, 8 August 2013 (UTC)
To be precise, I don't know if u mean the quote box in the casting section or the quote in the development section ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 05:52, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

Soundtrack[edit]

Among the many issues that editors have noted, the soundtrack may be the most notable. That is because I can find little to no information on the Tamil songs (Hindi is already complete). I however have the DVD of Chandralekha at home, can I use that as a source for the songs? BTW, soundtrack section now uses the proper tracklisting template. Kailash29792 (talk) 05:52, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

Comments by Dr. Blofeld[edit]

Lead
  • "went through repeated changing of story, casting and shooting" = numerous changes to the script, cast and production?
  • What is a "all-India hit"?
Plot
  • "Seeking revenge on his father, Sasankan leaves the palace, forms a gang of thieves and creates confusion in the country by robbing and killing people. In one such incident, C" Comma needed after thieves
Filming
  • "The highlight of the film was the drum dance " -seems subjective, can you reword "highlight"
Music
  • "Chandralekha is believed to have "created an atmosphere" of music directors inspired by Western music in Tamil cinema." who believed it? Needs rewording.
Marketing
  • "Vasan spend nearly INR5,00,000 on publicity alone, which was one of the highest of the times. " Spend= Spent, highest=most expensive times=period
  • " Because this exchange method was prevalent when India was short of foreign currency, it might have been the case with Chandralekha. " seems OR
Release
  • "the film was a trend setter for the making, production cost incurred, publicity and the hype it created before and during the making and after its release. Most producers delayed the release of their films fearing competition and released after Chandralekha's release." repetition of release.
Legacy
  • " Chandralekha was the costliest Tamil film made at that time, yet it achieved huge box office success and opened the market for Tamil films across South India." citation needed
  • Delink The Hindu, already linked.
  • "The film elevated the careers of Rajakumari and Ranjan, both became popular all over India with the film." add "who" before both and change with to "following the release"

Overall looks fine for GA, but I think it lacks the polish in the quality of prose to be FA worthy at the moment.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:38, 19 September 2013 (UTC)

Conclusion[edit]

Thank u everyone for ur suggestions. Now the PR will be closed, and I'll nominate the article for GA (nearly all the issues in this article have been settled) ---- Kailash29792 (talk) 04:57, 21 September 2013 (UTC)