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I've listed this article for peer review because I wish to know whether the article is ready for being a Featured Article Candidate or not. A lot of work has been done for improvement of this article and it has recently been promoted to a Good Article. I think the article is ready to be a Featured Article, but I would like to know are there any issues which need to be sorted out before submitting the article for Featured Article Candidate.

Thanks, Rahul Jain (talk) 12:22, 11 May 2013 (UTC)

Redtigerxyz's comments

Just read till Decline, - lead

  • WP:JARGON: moksha, samsara. give a short description in brackets. Link to jain specific articles
  • Check all links: Udaygiri is wrong.
  • Link people like Basava, Ghazni kingdoms like Hoysala etc.
  • Jain or Jaina: inconsistent use
  • Naming convention: Some in common English, some in IAST. Adi Shankara vs Kumarila Bhatta.
  • Add dates for kings, people e.g. Vishnuvardhana
  • Suddenly I see Decline, but when it was its helm what was its greatest extent? approx. followers? prominent Jain kings/dynasties (other than the few mentioned)?
  • "Shaivite singers introduced Jains to Shaivism" singers??? Are you sure this the right word?
  • "the Hoysala king Vishnuvardhana, also known as Bittideva," italicized detail is not needed.
  • Reads a copyedit
    • "Shaivite singers introduced Jains to Shaivism" is repetitive
    • "of the Islamic faith" is wordy. of Islam.

Redtigerxyz Talk 13:17, 13 May 2013 (UTC)

I have made certain changes to the article.
  • Linked moksha and samsara to Jain-specific articles and gave a short description of it in the bracket.
  • Corrected links.
  • Added more wikipedia links.
  • Changed Jain to jaina wherever the word is used as an adjective.
  • Changed the names into IAST
  • Still inconsistency Chandragupta, Svetambara, Mallinath, Shaivism, Saivite etc. Redtigerxyz Talk 04:01, 19 May 2013 (UTC)
  • Shaivism and Shaivite are foriegn words, they don't need to be in IAST in my opinion. I will change other words into IAST. Rahul Jain (talk) 04:41, 20 May 2013 (UTC)
  • Added dates to people and dynasties mentioned.
  • I don't know whether the first two questions are answerable or not (when was it at its greatest extent? and approximate followers) I cannot find a reference which can precisely answer that question. I, however, have added more kings/dynasties who have patronized Jainism.
  • I am unable to find the required information in those books. Most of them says that Jainism had many followers without giving any approximate number. Also they do not answer the question as to when was it at its greatest extent. They mention various reasons for decline in different parts of India at different time. Rahul Jain (talk) 04:41, 20 May 2013 (UTC)
  • Singers was the word mentioned in the source, I have changed it to poets.
  • Did minor copyediting
    • The line Shaivite singers introduced Jains to Shaivism now reads Śaivite poets like Sambandar and Appar (c. 7th century CE) introduced Jains to Shaivism
    • Replaced of Islamic faith with of Islam
I have made certain changes only at the history section, please see whether they are OK, so that I can make similar changes to the rest of the article. Thanks Rahul Jain (talk) 19:25, 18 May 2013 (UTC)