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I want this article to be peer reviewed, because I want to see if the article follows the MOS/prose guidelines for FA. Any help/critique is appreciative. Thanks. miranda 21:18, 21 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- While this probably isn't a totally unreliable source http://www.haverford.edu/publications/Fall%2006/Timbuctoo.htm for the information its sourcing, wouldn't it be more normal to reference a geographical work for this information?

Not done The person who is a medical student who went to the region for a goodwill trip. The account is published by a university. Probably other sources relating to this, but when searching I can't find. miranda 23:09, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Per WP:Footnotes#Style recommendations, we don't use op. cit. or similar abbreviations.

Done miranda 00:54, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

- Need last access dates on the website references.

Done miranda 06:21, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 23:45, 21 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Sillyfolkboy (talk · contribs)

Just a little comparison with Chad - time zone/info in the infobox?

- did the time zone. miranda 23:31, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Economy section should summarise the main Economy of Mali article as best it can.

problem with that is the Economy of Mali is unreferenced. I did the best I could do with the overview. miranda 23:31, 24 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Economy - "cotton and Côte d’Ivoire crises" elaboration or a decent wikilink is needed to say exactly what these crises are. 20:11, 23 June 2008 (UTC)

(Copying relevant comment) suggestion: Pronunciation Guide For "Mali" 199.80.66.119 (talk) 17:52, 20 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from llywrch (talk · contribs) Some ideas off the top of my head. FWIW, Chad is currently a FA -- you may want to study that article for ideas.

The second paragraph needs a lot of help. as you may have noticed, I changed "stretch straightly into the center" to "reach deep into the middle", but this description still needs a lot of wordsmithing.
The "Economics of Mali" does not mention that it is one of the Heavily Indebted Poor Countries as defined by the IMF. Is the government of Mali working with the IMF to qualify for this program?
This section also mentions that it privatized a railroad. Which one is this? 21:03, Monday 23 June 2008 (UTC)