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United Nations

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working on it for a while and would like some outside input. Besides the glaringly obvious lack of citations, what else is there that needs to be done before GA/FA status can be achieved?

Thanks, Joowwww (talk) 10:06, 23 September 2008 (UTC)

• No, pretty much the research and citations will cover it. That will tell you if there are any important subtopics that have been missed (if all or most of the high quality sources cover something the article doesn't, it needs to be there) or topics that have been given too much or too little space relative to their importance. Once you have that the lead can be fixed to properly summarize the article. So basically grab some really good sources and have at it. - Taxman ^Talk 20:50, 30 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• The "History" section only has information on the founding on the UN.
• Em dashes should be unspaced.
• "formerly six - the Trusteeship Council suspended operations in 1994" The hyphen should be an unspaced em dash.
• I see "citation needed" tags, make these go away.
• "The Security Council has been criticised for being unable to act in a clear and decisive way when confronted with a crisis." "being unable"-->inability.
• The "Specialized institutions" section has an expansion tag on it; put in more information from the main article.
• "The United Nations Charter stipulates that each primary organ of the UN can establish various specialized agencies to fulfill its duties."
• "there were renewed calls for the UN to become the agency for achieving world peace, as there are several dozen ongoing conflicts that continue to rage around the globe." Need a more neutral phrase than "rage around the globe."
• "The UN is one of the official supporters of the World Security Forum, a major international conference on the effects of global catastrophes and disasters, taking place in the United Arab Emirates, in October 2008."-->The UN is an official supporter...
• "This practice is not specific to the recognition of same-sex marriage but reflects a common practice of the UN for a number of human resources matters." "number of"-->other.
• Basically, the article needs a copy-edit, more citations, and resolutions of disputes.

Dabomb87 (talk) 00:01, 2 October 2008 (UTC)