Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Landing at Saidor
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Landing at Saidor[edit]
Another obscure WWII battle. This has already been peer reviewed, so not expecting any major problems. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:25, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
- Support This is a great article which meets the A-class critera. I've also got a few comments which you may wish to consider:
- The lead should probably be expanded a bit, though it's perfectly adequate given that this was a very straightforward operation
Done Expanded it a bit to add more about the Japanese, and air operations from Saidor- The Battle of Sio could be linked in the lead
- Done
- The sentence which reads "Sadly for the men of the 32nd Infantry Division, many of these Japanese would later have to be fought again under less advantageous circumstances" could be tweaked to explicitly state where the 32nd Infantry Division later fought the 18th Army - it's a bit vague at the moment, especially as there's no link to the relevant battle.
- Done Added a link to the Battle of Driniumor River.
Nick-D (talk) 23:55, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
- Support JonCatalán(Talk) 16:12, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
- Support - good article that meets all of the A-Class criteria. My only comment, however, is to be careful with some of the wording as it might be perceived as slightly POV. For example, in the lead: "nightmare", "struggled", "and even exposure", "and above all the resolute and resourceful Japanese", etc (italics added by me). Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 05:08, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
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