Talk:1981 Pacific hurricane season

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Former good article nominee 1981 Pacific hurricane season was a Natural sciences good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
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Good News[edit]

Ive found a Montly Weather Reiview that has all the 1981 Pacific hurricanes. Storm05 19:29, 17 March 2006 (UTC)

Dead link[edit]

During several automated bot runs the following external link was found to be unavailable. Please check if the link is in fact down and fix or remove it in that case!

--JeffGBot (talk) 02:22, 7 June 2011 (UTC)

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:1981 Pacific hurricane season/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 18:41, 4 December 2011 (UTC)

  • I'll probably review this by tomorrow afternoon. HurricaneFan25 18:41, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
    • I'm putting this on hold for one week. Feel free to let me know if you need more time. Face-smile.svg HurricaneFan25 17:28, 5 December 2011 (UTC)
      • Since I'm busy IRL, I might need more time. YE Pacific Hurricane 05:29, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
        • No worries YE, I can take care of these for you...I have already done half, you know? :P -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 12:45, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
          • 'kay, it's on hold for two weeks now (till December 20). HurricaneFan25 15:01, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
            • It is difficult to edit this page, but I plan on finishing this over the weekend, if not the next week or the weekend after that. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:06, 7 December 2011 (UTC)
              • I have fixed all the comments you brought up, HurricaneFan25. -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (Talk) 16:18, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
                • Thanks, this article is set to pass it appears. YE Pacific Hurricane 16:26, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
                  • Sorry, but the review really was only the immediate concerns. This probably still needs a whole copy-edit/cleanup; I'll do a second review later. You didn't address the "miscellaneous" comments either. HurricaneFan25 21:50, 10 December 2011 (UTC)
                    • Just fail it. If it needs a lot of work, there's no reason to keep it at GAN. It's already been on hold for quite some time now. Auree 00:42, 12 December 2011 (UTC)

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Prose[edit]

  1. The season officially started on May 15 in the eastern Pacific, and on June 1 in the central Pacific, and ended on November 30 This would read better without the first comma, and you should clarify that you are referring to basins. In addition, you should also clarify that the season ends on November 30 in both basins. The season officially started on May 15 in the eastern Pacific basin and June 1 in the central Pacific basin. Both basins' seasons ended on November 30. or something of that sort.
  2. The first tropical cyclone developed on May 30 This should also be clarified, as it seems to imply that the first tropical cyclone in the world developed on May 30. "Developed" is technically incorrect, as the precursor system may have developed on May 26 or something. See also below. The first tropical cyclone of the season was designated on May 30
  3. The storm caused six deaths, five in Texas, and one in Mexico, due to severe flooding. The usage of commas here is incorrect; an em dash should be used to demarcate it. The storm caused six deaths — five in Texas, and one in Mexico, due to severe flooding.
  4. However, the deadliest tropical cyclone of the season was Tropical Storm Lidia made two landfalls one on the southern tip of the Baja California Peninsula and the second on the shores of Sinaloa in early October. Confusing here, and it's grammatically incorrect. However, the deadliest tropical cyclone of the season was Tropical Storm Lidia, which made two landfalls — one on the southern tip of the Baja California Peninsula and the other along the shores of Sinaloa in early October.
  5. Because of the heavy rainfall observed in northwestern Mexico The damage associated with it isn't because people measured the rainfall. As the result of its heavy rainfall in northwestern Mexico
  6. However, two tropical cyclones from the Eastern Pacific, Greg and Jova, entered the Central Pacific, with the latter entering as a hurricane. "Eastern" and "Central" should not be capitalized unless you are referring to the former RSMCs. Also, tighten the prose by removing the "with". However, two tropical cyclones from the eastern Pacific, Greg and Jova, entered the central Pacific, the latter entering as a hurricane.
  7. The season produced fifteen named storms and eight hurricanes, A semicolon should be used instead of a comma here. The season produced fifteen named storms and eight hurricanes;
  8. both of these numbers were equal to the average, I think you meant to put a period here. both of these numbers were equal to the average.
  9. that did not strengthen into storms Technically incorrect; change into that did not strengthen into tropical storms
  10. but no deaths or damage was reported. Space needed after full stop.
  11. and at least seventy three deaths Hyphen needed here. and at least seventy-three deaths
  12. Hurricane Norma, struck as a Category 2 hurricane just northeast of Mazatlan. Remove the comma here. Hurricane Norma struck as a Category 2 hurricane just northeast of Mazatlan.
  13. On May 30, an area of intense shower and thunderstorm activity located 270 mi (430 km) to the south of the Mexican coastline Tighten by removing "to the". On May 30, an area of intense shower and thunderstorm activity located 270 mi (430 km) south of the Mexican coastline
  14. and becoming the first tropical storm of the season Remove the "and". becoming the first tropical storm of the season
  15. Reaching a peak intensity of 45 mph (72 km/h), Adrian began to move over slightly cooler ocean temperatures Use the standard winds, not the {{convert}} template. Also, clarify that it was a TS when it had those winds, although it isn't all that important.
  16. Link Clipperton Island
  17. over warm sea surface temperatures over warm sea-surface temperatures
  18. the depression strengthened and Gradually strengthening Try to find a different word here for the second usage.
  19. to attain its first brief peak at 85 mph (137 km/h) See above.
  20. Hurricane Beatirz Typo! Hurricane Beatriz
  21. sea surface temperatures sea-surface temperatures
  22. Moving towards the west-northwest over warm sea surface temperatures Moving towards the west-northwest over warm sea-surface temperatures
  23. Reaching a peak intensity of 50 mph (80 km/h) later that day See above.
  24. Calvin then began moving over cooler water and weakened to a minimal tropical storm. Sequence of events not exactly stated correctly. Calvin then moved over cooler water and subsequently weakened to a minimal tropical storm.
  25. and became Tropical Storm Dora "Became"? It's still a system. "Designated" is better IMO.
  26. As Dora reached its peak intensity of 90 mph (140 km/h) on June 14 See above.
  27. Cooler ocean temperatures of below Cooler ocean temperatures below
  28. without any effects to land Slightly inclined towards passive voice. without affecting land.
  29. moved towards the west-northwest Tighten by deleting "towards the". moved west-northwest
  30. storm accelerated towards the west-northwest, and Eugene reached a peak intensity of This can be shortened. storm accelerated west-northwest, reaching a peak intensity of
  31. Shortly thereafter, the system began to enter cooler ocean temperatures "Enter" implies that it's in the ocean. :o Shortly thereafter, the system began to meander over cooler ocean temperatures
  32. After holding in intensity for a day "Holding in"?
  33. Eugene dissipated on July 21, while located Remove the unnecessary comma. Eugene dissipated on July 21 while located
  34. There are no reports of any effects There were no reports of any effects for tense consistency.
  35. Fernanda originated from an area of shower and thunderstorms If one is plural, the other should be plural too. Fernanda originated from an area of showers and thunderstorms
  36. that organized to become a tropical depression They can organize, but they have to organize enough in order to be designated. that organized enough to be designated a tropical depression
  37. There's a series of three terse sentences that could be combined into two just after there.
  38. Fernanda had become a tropical depression Weird tense change here. It should be became, not become. Fernanda had became a tropical depression
  39. and dissipated early on August 13, without Remove the unnecessary comma. and dissipated early on August 13 without
  40. the next cyclone of the season Just use "it". it
  41. developed on August 13formed on August 13
  42. Three of the four sentences after the one about curving around the high-pressure area are short; they could be combined into three or just two.
  43. Clarion Island at 2100 UTC August 14 Add an "on" between UTC and the date. Clarion Island at 2100 UTC on August 14
  44. While Greg weakened into a depression The context ahead of that seems to imply that this was unusual, so replace "while" with "although".
  45. 1800 UTC August 22 Same issue here as above.
  46. 2105 UTC August 21 Same here.
  47. There's a few terse sentences in Hilary's section.
  48. There are two periods at the end! Fix these ;)
  49. then weakened as it moved over 83 °F (28 °C) water Use a better word than "water" (you used it twice in this section) like "sea-surface temperatures".
  50. The next day, after moving offshore, Irwin dissipated.After moving offshore the next day, Irwin dissipated.
  51. 1200 UTC September 24 Same issue as above.
  52. You over-use the word "after" in Jova's section.
  53. Dee to its track just north of Hawaii Uh, what does "dee" mean? 20px
  54. its only effect on the Hawaiian Islands was to disrupt the trade winds. This caused an increase in humidity. Shorten by changing to its only effect on the Hawaiian Islands was to disrupt the trade winds, leading to an increase in humidity.
  55. There's another series of terse sentences in Knut's section.
  56. 1330 UTC September 21 See above.
  57. which took place later that seasonwhich took place later during the season
  58. Link Los Mochis
  59. before the system began to move into cooler ocean temperatures and higher wind shear Clarify that wind shear didn't occur under the ocean! :P before the system began to move into an area with cooler ocean temperatures and stronger wind shear
  60. during the afternoon hours of the same day, without any effects to land Remove the unnecessary comma.
  61. it developed on October 8 I'm serious, "Norma" would sound way better than "it" here.
  62. and weakened to a Category 2 Clarify that "Category 2" is a status: and weakened to Category 2 status.
  63. $50 million in damage[3][12] See below.
  64. and caused many Sounds a bit strange given the previous text; change to and many
  65. Turning towards the north, and eventually northeast Remove the unnecessary comma here.
  66. Otis reached a peak intensity of 85 mph (137 km/h) See above.
  67. The next day, Otis made landfall near Mazatlan, before being absorbed by a frontal system. Remove the second comma.

Miscellaneous[edit]

  1. directly affecting land Clarification is needed here. Do you mean they made landfall, or they simply "affected" land?
  2. which was ten days later than the normal start of the season This part is considered trivia within the project and should be removed.
  3. However, the total of eight hurricanes during the season was equal to the average You previously said near normal, so this isn't all that surprising.
  4. which can be contributed to significant crop damage and many tornadoes Makes no sense as the previous context was not associated with it. Remove the "can be" and replace the "contributed" with "is credited". which is credited to significant crop damage and many tornadoes
  5. Lastly, the final storm to make landfall on Mexico during the 1981 season was Hurricane Otis Err, this is a bit redundant — "Lastly" and "final storm".
  6. Otis was the second of two hurricanes to make landfall in the country this season. Above, you said six hurricanes made landfall in Mexico but now you say only two did. Clarification needed.
  7. data from two cargo ships, the Androemda and Santa Maria, were helpful in locating Adrian's center of circulation Not important. You can say that data from that area indicated the location of Adrian's circulation at that time.
  8. Remember in Dora's section that ships aren't all that important.
  9. Probably a typo in the MWR or something: 105 mph (215 km/h) should have 165 km/h per the NOAA.
  10. Remember what I said about the ships above for Greg's section too. ;)
  11. Shortly thereafter, Greg moved into the CPHC's area of responsibility To clarify, you should add a link; if you do, it should be formatted like this (Central Pacific Hurricane Center (CPHC)) per the MoS.
  12. After turning towards the west, Tropical Storm Hillary Typo, and you can just refer to it as "it".
  13. For Jova, where was it when it formed?
  14. Lidia killed at least 73 people[3] Refs should be after punctuation when possible; try to jiggle this around so you can put a comma there.