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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:32, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


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  • "ranking snooker" is a sea of blue.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Infobox header should be 2019 International Championship.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "the television stages" normally referred to as the "televised" stages rather than television.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Tom Ford made the 152nd official maximum break," context for this? And where is it referenced?
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The event was the second ranking event" event event.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Sheffield, England featuring" comma after England.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Matches were played as best of 11 frames matches until the semi-finals and finals. The semi-finals were played as best of 17 frames, whilst the final was played as a best of 19 frames match.[2]" usual comment relating to hyphenation and merge these sentences to avoid the repetition.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • " previous years event," apostrophe.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Does the source say it was more than the previous year?
Nope, added a cite to show last years money. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "last 64" or "round one" or "first round"?
These should be the same now. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Two top 16 ranked players " more hyphenation required!
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "whilst" really this is just "and" in this scenario.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • And don't reverse that scoreline!
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "in the previous season " unnecessary as you've already given the explicit year of the event.
 Not done - The point being made that during the previous season, Murphy had reached just one final. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Well it does look odd to me now, you refer to 2018 and your refer to last season in the same sentence. Perhaps pipe the year out of the event and keep "in the previous season". The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:55, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, that makes sense. I've piped it out. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:07, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Murphy defeated Dott 6–4 to draw Allen in the semi-final." unref.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Three time world ..." -> Three-time.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "played just English players " I'm not sure this raises to the level of note really, probably half the last 64 were English. The Chinese link was okay as it had the consequence of turning off the Chinese audience, but this feels like trivia.
I agree  Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "defeating Shaun Murphy in the final 10–3." -> "defeating Shaun Murphy 10–3 in the final."
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • ", previously held by Ronnie O'Sullivan, having last held the rank in 2013.[21] " too many run-on and "held".
condensed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Selby started off the match quickest, winning three of the first fou..." I think this speaks for itself, so "Selby won three of the first four frames..." would suffice.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Post match" why not just "After the match..."?
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "his form and scoring within" scoring is part of his form...
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "a best of 19 frames match " hyphens.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "including a century break in frame three" -> "making a century break in frame three"
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • " that they had competed in after the event," -> "in which they had competed after..."
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "disapointed" typo.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • " didn't really " avoid contractions.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Where is final referee referenced?
cited in prose. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Formatting of qualifying section is really odd for me, a huge gap between the first column of names and the scoreline...
Sorry, I don't see this on my screen, so I have no idea what the error is. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
How odd. I see it Chrome and Safari. It's not evenly balanced... The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:03, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "A total of 63 century breaks were made during the tournament" -> during the televised stages of the tournament.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Neil Robertson doesn't need to be disambiguated...
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:05, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Once again, take the website names out of the ref titles.
 DoneBest Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:13, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

First pass complete. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:47, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Covered pretty much all of the above TRM Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:13, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, I'm done here and promoting. It's a shame I'm suffering from those off-balance issues, but it's purely aesthetic so shouldn't stand in the way of promotion. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:15, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I did some work, I think it's probably something to do with the width values for the tables, but without being able to see the issue, I can't go about fixing it. I may spend some time changing these to a different format. Thank you for your great review once again. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:17, 24 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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