Talk:Admiral Lazarev-class monitor

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Admiral Lazarev-class monitor/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:08, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Will be happy to offer a review. I suspect this review will be somewhat short given how well written the article appears to be JAGUAR  22:08, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Perhaps, but be sure to ask for clarifications if there are bit that need further/better explanations.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:22, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments[edit]

  • "Four ships were ordered, but the last two were significantly modified and became the separate Admiral Spiridov class" - were they modified during construction? If so might be worth mentioning in the lead
  • "The Admiral Lazarevs were stricken from the Navy List in 1907 and 1909" - needs a "respectively" on the end
    • I didn't actually name each ship, so respectively isn't needed.
  • "In November the committee decided" - November 1863?
  • "the two designs, whileAdmiral Chicagov and Admiral Spiridov" - space needed
  • "The monitors were ultimately designed to be armed with six 20-caliberObukhov 9-inch rifled guns" - another space needed here?
  • "The deck armor was in two layers with a total thickness of 1 inch" - I think "1 inch" could do with a conversion
    • Converted on first use in the first section of the armor paragraph
  • There's no mention on their scraping in the Construction and service (feel free to ignore this)
    • Covered, with a cite, in the table.

Thanks for looking at this.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:22, 3 November 2015 (UTC)

On hold[edit]

A very solid article. I could only find a handful of minor prose issues but once they're all addressed then this should be good to go. I hope I haven't made any "newbie" misunderstandings! Good article on hold JAGUAR  13:11, 31 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! This is good to go now. Good article JAGUAR  22:09, 3 November 2015 (UTC)