Talk:G. Krugers/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 02:44, 28 August 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   A link to floruit in the "fl" part of "fl. 1926 – 1937" might be a good idea.
   Done.
   "and in 1927 he directed his directorial debut" -> Repetitive. Maybe "released his directorial debut", or "1927 saw the release of his directorial debut"
   Made?
   "The company produced exclusively documentaries until 1926" -> I think this reads a bit oddly, try "exclusively produced documentaries" or "produced documentary exclusively".
   Done.
   "the majority Sundanese audience felt that they were being ridiculed." -> is there an explanation for why this is?
   Done
   Why does the filmography table only translate two titles? I'm not generally a fan of translations in the first place, but I'll not object to them if you either stick with all or none for consistency.
   Njai Dasima and Eulis Atjih are both names (technically, Njai is a title but...).
   Not too sure the sort function in the "role" column of the table is particularly useful, to be honest. Also, looking at it, is there any information on what "sound manager" entailed? I would assume director of audiography would be the relevant role. Might be worth a piped link if that's correct.
   Shoulda been "sound director", changed to that.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

   Not a problem.

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

   Seems as comprehensive as is likely possible. Had a brief search for anything else and turned nothing up.

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

   Yep.

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

   Yep.

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

   Any chance of something being added? There are a few free images in Loetoeng Kasaroeng and Eulis Atjih which would be relevant enough for inclusion.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Not a lot really needing to be looked at here. On hold to sort it out. GRAPPLE X 02:44, 28 August 2012 (UTC)

   Suits me. Passing. You've got mail, by the way. GRAPPLE X 03:22, 28 August 2012 (UTC)