Talk:Hollow Moon/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 08:01, 15 May 2017 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Lead now much improved, thank you.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	I have restored the 'In literature' section which cites at least 4 major authors and is plainly a large part of the justification for the article (Edmond Halley notwithstanding). The section is probably usable as it is, given that the sources are cited, but it would be much improved with a source that discussed the book mentions (i.e. 2ndry wrt the books).
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	No problem.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Both images from Commons correctly licensed. The author of the Halley portrait seems to be unknown, which ought to be stated explicitly on Commons.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	I wikilinked the caption of the schematic.
	7. Overall assessment.	With the improvements made, as recorded both in GA1 and GA2, I'm now satisfied that the article meets the criteria to become a Good Article.

Did the best I could re. reffing the books. Only 2 were available online, and one of those was lacking page numbers; I used the chapter ref for that. Links point to page/chapter. All have secondary: recycled the Nasa cite for Wells & Burroughs (which is the closest I've found to a secondary source covering multiple entries), rest have their own.

Dunno on the Moon was a hard one. It's a Russian (Soviet) book that's not been translated, so it's hard to track down. The WP page on it is quite thorough, and clearly refers to a substantially hollow moon: In a cave Dunno falls into an icy tunnel leading down to the internal cavity of the moon and slides down, apparently sitting down, thereon in the sublunary space. Going down on a parafoil, he finds on the inner core of the moon (which the locals call the Earth, too) with the civilization of the same shorties, but living according to the laws of capitalism. The secondary source talks about a technologically advanced civilisation inside the Moon. Bromley86 (talk) 12:15, 15 May 2017 (UTC)

Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:53, 15 May 2017 (UTC)