Talk:InStore Broadcasting Network
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This article feels a bit like an ad - lots of client names and sales jargon. Not bad enough to warrant a deletion but could use a little TLC.
I'm happy to provide factual information about this company in order to remove any bias. I see that there are entries for Muzak, DMX, Sirius, PlayNetwork, Truesonic, etc. I am reluctant to make many edits myself since I work for the company. Any advice?
Also, why does the link to Retail Media only work with initial caps?
Also, we are now known by InStore Broadcasting Network and secondarily as In-Store Broadcasting Network. Any way to make the unhyphened version the default? John 05:42, 2 November 2006 (UTC)PsychoSLC
- When I wrote this article, I didn't mean for it to appear as an advertisement. I took information from IBN's website and constructed the bones for this entity. The client list covers some of the bigger clients it has (hence listings such as Kroger and Meijer). A complete list is available on the IBN website. Feel free to do whatever you want (after all, this is a Wiki), but I see no apparent or obvious reason for the NPOV dispute concerning everything is readily available on IBN's website. --Compdude512 23:44, 9 November 2006 (UTC)
- Indeed it is available on IBN's website, which is unarguably an advertisement. I personally think mentioning a FEW (3 or 4 at the max) in the body of text is alright, depending on the context. Adding a bulleted list really hurts the neutrality.
PsychoSLC, I have no problem with you editing the article to add factual information, as long as you're comfortable with people (myself included) going over your edits with a fine-toothed comb afterward. The page can be moved to reflect your dropping the hyphen, but I don't know if I should do that unless a couple more folks concur here. JaedenStormes 13:54, 10 November 2006 (UTC)
- I don't mind this page being moved at all. If you'd like to relocate it, I'm all for it. As for the bulleted list, its original purpose was to keep the article organized. I put together a school publication, and the number one rule I've learned is that if an article looks unorganized or choppily written, people will not read it. Its secondary purpose was to back up the "18,000+ client" claim. I can condense that if you wish, or if you'd like, you could do that. As I have previously mentioned, I'm all for work being the best it can possibly be, so go ahead and do whatever it takes for this article to be at the highest standard possible. --Compdude512 00:29, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
I recommend that you take the 3 or 4 biggest clients and put them into a paragraph form, similar to the way it's done on Applied Media Technologies Corporation. Once that's done, we can take a serious look at removing the NPOV tag. JaedenStormes 13:58, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
- I condensed the bulleted list down to a paragraph. Rather than naming 50 stores, I just named the parent companies of the chain. If someone wants to research which store is owned by which company, it can be found in the link to the appropriate article. Again, you may do whatever you would like to help the NPOV tag disappear. I hope I did all we needed to do to this article! --Compdude512 18:24, 13 November 2006 (UTC)
I've made the last few changes that jumped out at me. I've removed the NPOV tag; I'm comfortable with the article as-is. Psycho, add anything else you feel you need to, just be careful not to get too marketing-ey. :) JaedenStormes 19:02, 13 November 2006 (UTC)