Talk:Independence Day (Pakistan)

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Good article Independence Day (Pakistan) has been listed as one of the History good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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August 25, 2012 Good article nominee Listed
September 11, 2012 Peer review Reviewed
Current status: Good article

We should rename the article[edit]

Yaum-e-Azadi should be the name. Noobeditor (talk) 21:56, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

The most common usage is Youm-e-Azadi, however, I added redirects to the other variations. --lTopGunl (talk) 23:58, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

Nice Work[edit]

It seems much better now then what I did with it. :)
--Inlandmamba (talk) 18:07, 1 March 2012 (UTC)

Thanks. You can add a summary to the lead about the event maybe? --lTopGunl (talk) 18:13, 1 March 2012 (UTC)

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Independence Day (Pakistan)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Titodutta (talk · contribs) 05:44, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

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Section 01[edit]

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The external link section is currently blank! Per Template:Commons_category#Location! We can not create a section with only Commons template! --Tito Dutta 05:50, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

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The article has more information on the history of independence than history of independence day! --Tito Dutta 05:52, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Trimmed down. Actually, it is too tough to get more info as there doesn't exist any nor is anything special for choosing 14th of August. TheSpecialUser TSU 06:37, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Added why 14 August was selected. TheSpecialUser TSU 06:55, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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3 dablinks added in the article– I have tagged! --Tito Dutta 05:55, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Pakistani MovementYes check.svg Done

Put the template at the bottom of the page (below External links) section! --Tito Dutta 05:57, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

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Add one or two external links (Government documents will be preferred) and move the Commons template there! --Tito Dutta 06:43, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

I have added on EL from website, you can replace it and add one more. When we'll have 2 ELs in that section, move the Commons template there! --Tito Dutta 07:18, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Section 02[edit]

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  • Islamabad --Tito Dutta 05:58, 13 August 2012 (UTC) Yes check.svg Done
  • Muhammad Ali Jinnah --Tito Dutta 05:59, 13 August 2012 (UTC) Yes check.svg Done
  • Flag of Pakistan --Tito Dutta 07:59, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done
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  • e day celebration including establishing security, and to see that no terrorist activity occurs– explain which portion of this article discusses about it! --Tito Dutta 06:03, 13 August 2012 (UTC) Yes check.svg Done
What's done? It was a question! --Tito Dutta 06:42, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Removed the extra addition. TheSpecialUser TSU 07:21, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • First paragraph of "Celebration" sections need detailed inline citations. Currently all citations are grouped. --Tito Dutta 06:06, 13 August 2012 (UTC) Yes check.svg Done
Checking... --Tito Dutta 06:42, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Popular Culture/Inspiration Doing...

Add inspiration of the day on popular culture (if any) --Tito Dutta 06:06, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Section 03[edit]


History section needs rewriting, it is more background of independence than of independence day. The article needs more additional citations (for example "Pre-celebration" section has only one source). Copyedit/rewording needed in the lead section and some other sections– (eg. Before the day arrives, a patriotic atmosphere...) --Tito Dutta 07:14, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Trimmed further. Now it is merely a reflection of what is in Independence Day (India). On the other hand "Pre-celebration" with one source has no issue as everything is covered with (though I'll add more sources). Lead re-worded. Also, if possible give me the points that need re-wording. TheSpecialUser TSU 07:20, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • As August begins, various shops start..– now that's need a source! Will make a list quickly which need rewording/clarification/copyedit --Tito Dutta 07:26, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done
It has ref (15). TheSpecialUser TSU 07:29, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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All are images are related to Celebrations, but, History section etc does not have any image. If you don't add any image in other sections in "celebration" section we are facing an "excess image" issue. --Tito Dutta 07:26, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Removed one Image and on hunt to see if I can get any Image for history. TheSpecialUser TSU 07:32, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Ya, images related to history/background will be excellent! --Tito Dutta 07:36, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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If you are using first letter small for the word "national" then you can change for the word "National Monument" too! Is not it? Or do you thing it is needed? --Tito Dutta 07:28, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Change is made! TheSpecialUser TSU 07:32, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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Add the Commons cat --Tito Dutta 07:34, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Like it is at the Indian version! TheSpecialUser TSU 07:38, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Section 04[edit]

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For pre celebration the article is largely depending on this article. Add 1 or 2 more (ref)s! --Tito Dutta 07:36, 13 August 2012 (UTC) Doing...

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Okay, I understand but how "The Indian Independence Act's salient provisions" are applicable for Pakistan's Independence day? --Tito Dutta 07:44, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

They are. The act is actually meant for partition. This means it is for both. The name "Indian" means "British India" (India+Pakistan) TheSpecialUser TSU 07:57, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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This paragraph is too small to create an h2 section! --Tito Dutta 07:48, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

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Are you using British English or American English? --Tito Dutta 07:53, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Pakistani_English but where are conflicts occurring between words? TheSpecialUser TSU 07:59, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
I don't know what is Pakistani English, but if Pakistani English follows British spelling, few corrections are to be made! --Tito Dutta 08:02, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Ah..sorry, Pakistani English follows British English :) TheSpecialUser TSU 08:05, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Section 05[edit]

  • with the raising of the national flag on the President and Prime Minister Presidential and Parliament buildings. --Tito Dutta 07:57, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes check.svg Done I believe the sentence is referring to the Aiwan-e-Sadr (the President's residence). Anyhow, someone has fixed up the sentence so I'll mark this as done. Mar4d (talk) 14:09, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Funny moment of the review[edit]

Crap! How did I miss it =P Sorry sorry. TheSpecialUser TSU 08:09, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Comments from WikHead[edit]

Some of these points may have already been addressed since my review, but my notes are as follows
  1. Grammar smoothing is required in the last two sentences of the lead section.Yes check.svg Done
  2. Found awkward grammar in the sentence; "Everyone rejoiced due to independence, but the atmosphere remained heated up which followed many riots as a part of partition of India into two states."Yes check.svg Done
  3. The "Pre-celebration" section requires copy-editing for better grammar and WP:ENGVAR spellingYes check.svg Done
  4. Could use better descriptive wording for; "government high-ups"Yes check.svg Done
  5. Awkward grammar in sentence; "Later, it is followed by the leaders deliver speeches that are televised live."Yes check.svg Done
  6. "Homepage is paid to the people who lost their lives while struggling for independence..." - That is in need of correction.Yes check.svg Done
  7. I'm seeing British date styles, but a mix of both British and American spelling throughout.Yes check.svg Done
  8. Additional comments - Though most of the major points of the article are indeed sourced, it would be nice to see an article of this importance with a reference-count higher than 19.  -- WikHead (talk) 08:12, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • I think I've already fixed #1, #2, #4 and #6. Bgwhite (talk) 08:15, 13 August 2012 (UTC) -6 UTC
  • Thanks for additional comments WikiHead and thanks for helping out BGwhite! I'm confused here. It is not my strong point to differentiate between both languages, perhaps, can you point them out? TheSpecialUser TSU 08:23, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • I'm an American, so my British English is limited. I've changed a few I knew about, but I don't know about the rest. Why couldn't the British learn to spell? :) Bgwhite (talk) 08:26, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
I have changed few more --Tito Dutta 08:30, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
So, which are left now? TheSpecialUser TSU 08:31, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • You're most certainly welcome TheSpecialUser! At last glance it would appear that all my notes have been addressed, except for the addition of more references. I'll return in a short while to see how things are progressing.  -- WikHead (talk) 08:33, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
I second the request to add additional references. Also image for history/background section! See the comment related to El sections and Commonscat above too--Tito Dutta 08:36, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Ah I see, you have done EL and Commonscat tasks already! --Tito Dutta 08:38, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
I'm struggling a bit here. I don't live in Pakistan nor do I've ever witnessed what happens on 14 August, so have trouble fixing section 5 (I've asked a friend). Also, I'm doing a bit search to see if I can get clarified. Thanks! Also.. will add section about culture and additional sources (can try till 30-40) by today eve. TheSpecialUser TSU 08:42, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Section 08[edit]

Republic Day

In "See also" better name it "Pakistan Day" or mention it is Pakistan's republic day? --Tito Dutta 08:40, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

RedlinkYes check.svg Done

Redlink is not a big issue for GA criteria. But I am curious to learn– is there any chances that the article "Allama Iqbal Park" will be created soon? --Tito Dutta 08:53, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

It already exists - see Iqbal Park. I'll turn the red link into a redirect. Cheers, Mar4d (talk) 08:55, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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Homage is paid to the people who lost their lives while struggling for independence in the freedom movement – What's about using the word "martyr"? --Tito Dutta 09:12, 13 August 2012 (UTC)


You can use this and this --Tito Dutta 10:04, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Google doodle

This is an excellent information. But, "in the past" is unclear. I have added a "When" tag! --Tito Dutta 14:39, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Yes check.svg Done Right, fixed. Mar4d (talk) 14:43, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Image check[edit]

  • Version: This version of article!
Image License/Copyright/Permission Alt Caption Relevant
File:Flag of Pakistan on National Monument.JPG Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY
File:Minar-e-Pakistan at night Taken on July 20 2005.jpg Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY
File:Pakisan First.jpg Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY

--Tito Dutta 08:48, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

  • Version This version
  • Changes: 1 image added!
Image License/Copyright/Permission Alt Caption Relevant
File:Chaudhry Khaliquzzaman.jpg Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY Green tickY

-- Tito Dutta 16:42, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Comments from Dwaipayan[edit]

  • "The day begins with special prayers for integrity, solidarity, and development of Pakistan" Where do these happen? I mean prayers are held in schools, government offices etc? Or the citizens just pray in their homes after getting up in the morning (since it says "the day begins with"?)
Yes check.svg Done - Start off with morning prayers in mosques.
  • "The official festivities usually take place in Islamabad ..". Why usually? Is there some unusual exception to this?
Yes check.svg Done - Yes, in 2010 and 2011 due to floods there were no official festivities, only the main ceremonies. Will need to add that.
  • "followed by a 31-gun salute in the capital" Is it 31 or 21? Also, the reference following this sentence links to a Dawn article that does not mention the gun salute (unless I missed it). Yes check.svg Done
  • "It is followed by various leaders delivering speeches highlighting achievements of the government, goals set for the future, and praising the sacrifices and efforts of national heroes" Various leaders give speech? So there is no "main event" where PM or President give speech? Also, does various leader include opposition leaders (they may not highlight government achievement)?
  • Don't believe that there is a"main event or special event". Have Yes check.svg Done regarding opposition. TheSpecialUser TSU 15:58, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
This is not done yet. The "various leaders" can deliver speeches, but all of them praise government achievements? If the leaders are from opposition, they are more likely not to highlight government achievements. The government leaders and officials may do so. --Dwaipayan (talk) 17:47, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Address from the PM and president to the nation + separate speeches of political leaders mentioned. Samar Talk 17:59, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Nice work, just playing with the words, and bingo :) Yes, now it is acceptable.--Dwaipayan (talk) 18:05, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • " In Karachi, drives are initiated to clean and prepare the Mazar-e-Quaid (Jinnah Mausoleum) for the celebration.". I guess this happens before the I day, right?Yes check.svg Done
Yes. The paragraph is about preparations leading up to the day, it starts from As the month of August begins....
  • "In Peshawar, the main function of national flag hoisting ceremony is presided over by the Chief Minister of Khyber Pakthunkhwa. Various other flag hoisting ceremonies are held in the main buildings of the city including Governor House, High Court, and DCO Office". Why are you specifically mentioning Peshawar and not mentioning other cities? (the preceding sentences on Lahore and Karachi are actually on the Minar-e-Pakistan and Jinnah's mausoleum, not on the cities per se.)Yes check.svg Done
  • "Along with flag hoisting, the national anthem is also sung at various government places, schools, residences, and monuments at the eve of Independence Day".. Only on the eve of I-day? Not on the I-day?--Dwaipayan (talk) 15:24, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done
  • "National flags are displayed on Shahrah-e-Faisal, Shahara-e-Quaideen, and Mazar-e-Quaid Road leading up to the mausoleum.". Which mausoleum. No mausoleum is mentioned in the preceding sentences.--Dwaipayan (talk) 15:50, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes check.svg Done - Quaid's mausoleum. Missed during restructuring.
  • "Various other flag hoisting ceremonies are held in the main buildings of the city including Governor House, High Court, and DCO Office" Which city are you referring to? Lahore? The reference tells about Peshawar. Also, what is DCO?
Added DCO link. This was referring to activities in Peshawar, KP capital which I see is now removed. Can the editor who removed it comment on it. Samar Talk 16:53, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • "National flags are displayed on Shahrah-e-Faisal, Shahara-e-Quaideen, and Mazar-e-Quaid Road leading up to the Quaid's mausoleum" Replace with "Jinnah's mausoleum", Quaid is a local word, not generally known to the rest of the world. Also, add "in Karachi" at the end of the sentence.Yes check.svg Done
  • "Along with flag hoisting, the national anthem is also sung at various government places, schools, residences..." Also is not needed. Yes check.svg Done
  • "Homage is paid to the martyrs who lost their lives while struggling for independence in the freedom movement.". Hmmm... You mean martyrs of Indian independence movement? Or do you mean Pakistan Movement's martyrs?Yes check.svg Done I am interested to know a few names of the latter, just to be sure we are on the same page. Names may or may not be needed to be added to the article though. The editors living in Pakistan can throw some light on this, which personalities are actually remembered and paid homage to? Jinnah, Iqbal, Rahamat Ali, and who else? I may be ill-informed, but Gandhi is unlikely to be remembered.--Dwaipayan (talk) 16:29, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
The martyrs awarded Nishan-e-Haider, past political leaders, major figures in Pakistan freedom movement, senior artisits. But I don't know why only martyrs of freedom movement are mentioned.Samar Talk 16:53, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Current version "Homage is paid to the martyrs who lost their lives while struggling for creation of a separate state in the freedom movement...". Completely vague. I read Pakistan movement article, no martyrs as such are mentioned. Did a quick google search, did not find names. As Samar is telling, the award of Nishan-e-Haider may be awarded on I-day, but in that article, none of the recipient of the awards actually dies during Pakistan movement.
So, you have to substantiate who are the people who died? Please provide reference. You need not name the people in the article, but specify. Even if we remove the term died or lost life, and replace with "sacrifice", some more concrete wordings and evidence is needed. The language is quite flowery here.
Past political leaders, major figures in Pakistan Movement, senior artists -- all are ok, and non-contentious. However, this "lost their life" is debatable. One hypothesis could be this is referring to the lives lost in the partition or pre-partition riot; if that is the case, that should be mentioned.--Dwaipayan (talk) 17:08, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Can you please point the header where this statement is, I can't find it. Samar Talk 17:30, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
The sentence is in the last paragraph of "Celebration" section.--Dwaipayan (talk) 17:36, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
I have edited for clarification. It will be hard to provide a reference for this, these events just takes place, I can't find an online source. Samar Talk 17:49, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Now the sentence reads good:"Homage is paid to the people who lost their lives in migration and riots during the partition, martyrs of Pakistan Army and recipients of Nishan-e-Haider, political figures, and famous artists and scientists". That's nice work. Yes, I know retrieving online (or offline) references for these things is extremely difficult, and I am not going to press for reference (as the sentence reads non-contentious as of now). I asked for reference earlier as the content was doubtful (martyrs of Pakistan movement). Great work.--Dwaipayan (talk) 17:57, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
All concerns raised above have been appropriately addressed.--Dwaipayan (talk) 18:05, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Status update needed[edit]

  • Image in history section Yes check.svg Done
What has Lahore Resolution to do with this Independence day article? You have not mentioned anything about Chaudhry Khaliquzzaman in the article! --Tito Dutta 16:14, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Its one of the three major jumps; 1930 conception, 1940 resolution and 1947 foundation, leading up to the Independence. Changed the caption of image. Samar Talk 16:36, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Independence day in popular culture yellow tickY Half done
Just duplicate of celebrations. I mean adoptions in films, books! See if Samar and Mrt can help! --Tito Dutta 16:17, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Stress on History of independence day and not history of independence. Yes check.svg Done

--Tito Dutta 15:44, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

To stress on the history of the day, and not the independence, I guess the quote of Rahamat Ali needs to be removed. If we remove the quote, the "background" section would be succinct enough. Yes check.svg Done
Please mention why the date of 14-15 August were chosen (both Maountabatten's wish to coincide this with Japan's surrender as told in an interview, and Pakistan getting 14 August as he had to attend both ceremonies need to be mentioned). This would add to the history of the day itself.--Dwaipayan (talk) 15:53, 13 August 2012 (UTC) Yes check.svg Done

Security threats and security measures! --Tito Dutta 15:48, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Boycotting in Baloch province need to be mentioned. You may search for boycotting in any other geographical area as well (NWFP? The tribal areas?).--Dwaipayan (talk) 17:12, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Let's address other issues and then will get on the 'issues' issue. Samar Talk 18:15, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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Trim partition section (optional) you can also link main article! --Tito Dutta 16:19, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Do we require the Act's salient provisions? I think it should be removed, doesn't add much context to the topic.Samar Talk 16:38, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes, that can be removed or (better) summarized! --Tito Dutta 17:26, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Summarized, I still don't see the relevance. Samar Talk 18:15, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
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Thanks a lot a for starting this section. But, could you please modify it too? The way it is started it seems duplication of what we have already told in "Celebration"! If independence day has been main theme of any film, book, play, song you can mention that too! Some relevant/similar comments can be found in "Section improvement" topic here --Tito Dutta 17:50, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Added a couple of things. Do you think philately can be added here, each year Pakistan Post issues a new stamp on the day commemorating something. I am not in tune with the film and music industry, that will be hard to add. Samar Talk 18:21, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Now that I have read the concerned section in India's Independence Day, is see we can copy paste from there, not literally but take content from there. Train to Pakistan, Toba Tek Singh, Faiz Ahmad Faiz works, Midnight's Children all relate. I haven't read Freedom at Midnight but sounds relating. Samar Talk 18:40, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes, philately will be a great addition here. And yes, many books will be common (obviously). Train to Pakistan, Toba Tek Singh, Faiz Ahmed Faiz -- all are relevant. I am not sure about Midnight's Children, I read that many years ago. The book largely deals with India (mostly post-independence, although the night of independence play an overarching role), although brief mention of Pakistan may be there. You will need reference to support that. For Freedom at Midnight, yes, several chapters of the book deals overall with the event of the independence from the British Raj, and obviously incorporates creation of Pakistan. Indeed while researching those books, I came across some papers specifically mentioning Pakistani creations. Unfortunately I can not remember which sources. You can try to look at the different sources mentioned in the popular culture section of Indian Independence Day article.--Dwaipayan (talk) 18:48, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Looks like everyone is asleep. I have added some details, the literary work needs formatting and references, added an image but can remove it if you think it is un-necessary. Samar Talk 20:38, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes, I was sleeping. 1) Replace IMDb reference with a better source 2) This ref is not the best citation there! --Tito Dutta 00:52, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
I have replaced IMDb citation. 1 citation needed for "Dastaan Pakistan TV serial". I have tagged! --Tito Dutta 01:59, 14 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done

Additional comments from WikHead[edit]

I might be wrong, but I believe if we say "the prime minister" or "the president", it should appear in lower-case text. On the other hand, if we say "Prime Minister of Pakistan" it's a proper title that should appear with capital letters. Would anyone like to comment further on this?  -- WikHead (talk) 16:00, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

I agree there. Also should I and D in Independence Day be capital? Samar Talk 16:07, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes, thank you for this. WP:JOBTITLES says so. Regarding I and D, there is probably no guideline, but the use should be consistent throughout the article.--Dwaipayan (talk) 16:11, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
I also spotted a capital A in the stand-alone word "Act", which I believe should be lowered.  -- WikHead (talk) 16:12, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes check.svg Done every thing here :) TheSpecialUser TSU 16:19, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
In the lead section,
  1. The first paragraph says; "...celebrated on 14 August, is the main national holiday".
  2. The second paragraph says; "The day is one of the national holidays in Pakistan".

Does this need to be said twice? Can it be merged as one?  -- WikHead (talk) 00:58, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

Yes check.svg Done Removed the sentence from the second paragraph! --Tito Dutta 01:33, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

Things to do[edit]

  • In popular culture - Needs formatting and structuring to make it coherent. But there is plenty of details there at least for a GA.Yes check.svg Done
  • Security issues - If there is an online source categorically mentioning security issues then add it, otherwise leave it for now. Issues in KPK and Baluchistan, again with reliable references. There are a few incidences there, they must be mentioned in news sources. Otherwise there are other issues on 14 August such as single wheeling by youth causing accidents and concerns of traffic police, incessant use of fire crackers disturbing peace, no celebrations in 2010 and 2011 due to floods, scuffles of youth with the police etc. Samar Talk 21:24, 13 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done
  • Made some minor formatting changes. IMDb and Goodreads reference (also the blogspot reference) should be replaced! Yes check.svg Done
  • If security measures in the country are greatly intensified during independence day or if there is any record of terrorist (or any kind of) attack those need to be mentioned! --Tito Dutta 00:59, 14 August 2012 (UTC)Yes check.svg Done
The security does get more intensified. Random incidents do take place, and Baloch boycott is there, although not much covered in the media.--Dwaipayan (talk) 05:52, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Pakistani currency: File:Pakistan commemorative banknote.png I know Indian currency, per Commons:Currency#India and The Indian Copyright Act, 1957 (Chapter V Section 25), government works, (including banknotes and coins) from India enter the public domain 60 years after the date on which they were first published. So banknotes and coins created after December, 31 1951 are copyrighted and can not be uploaded. Can someone tell me about Pakistan's copyright? This image derivative work, but both the source images are in bad condition (source not clear "Own work"– Pakistani currency is their own work?", uncategorised etc). --Tito Dutta 00:28, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

Comments by Omer123hussain[edit]

  • The section In popular culture currently source no [32] is a blog source, it looks okay but try to replace it with Reliable source.Yes check.svg Done
  • Same section contains text; Rs. 5, i think Rs should be replaced with Pakistani rupee or at least Rupee.Yes check.svg Done
  • Made this expression edit hope it is correct.
As per my opinion, overall the current status deserves a GA. Best wishes and Happy I-Day for both Indo-Pak, Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 23:08, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
Reliable source– yes, it is needed. I can not help here. In addition clarification needed when/in which year Pakistan post issued those stamps?
  • Do you mean template, what is the template? I tried to see PKR, but it does not exist! Can you give details!
  • Expression is this.
  • Please don't forecast (even if it is your opinion) on GA review result in review page. --Tito Dutta 00:42, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
  • @Tito Dutta; Apology for that, It was unintentional and actually there I mean; It was good reviewed and constructive contribution from all. Regards :)--Omer123hussain (talk) 09:28, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
  • I've added the section on security (it was easy). TheSpecialUser TSU 08:01, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

Time to finish[edit]

We have done lots of works in last 24 hours and I feel we should approach the end now! Don't worry, I'll not finish the review right after submitting this post. I'll wait for few hours to get response! --Tito Dutta 08:13, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

  • As we approach towards the end, I'd like to thank editors; Titodutta (especially for doing this in limited span of time, guiding, and addressing some issues yourself), WikiHead (for giving those issues which were ignored but count a lot), Bgwhite (for staring c/e on the article when I was all alon and I'd reached my limit), Dwaipayanc (for bringing up those concerns and guiding us when needed. Much appreciated) and last but not the least, Omer123hussain whose review at the end and his edits were useful - thanks guys for reviewing this :) Also, not to forget Samar (who really made this article look better then what I came up with it. Thanks for expanding the "celebration" and other sections significantly), Mar4d (for addressing the issues and providing refs and expanding the article when needed), SE (thanks buddy for coming handy when I needed and 2 invisible editors who kept this article in a normal state by removing vandalism before I came here, TopGun and SMS. It has been one of my better experiences on wiki TheSpecialUser TSU 08:22, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
I second that and would also like to thank you for starting this initiative. It was great to work constructively and collaboratively on this article and it is even more great to see how it has been improved from its original state just a couple of days ago :) The main issues seem fixed, so I guess we're close to wrapping it up. Any comments by others are welcome here. Mar4d (talk) 08:52, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
Yes, it was nice to witness such a prolific collaboration. Just to help the main reviewer, the prose of the article is of acceptable standard for GA. While some improvement in reference standards and reference formatting will be useful, those are not really GA criteria. Coverage seems exhaustive, barring one or two issues that will continue to arise despite our best effort!
How dearly I wish we could see more of such collaborations among the editors of the two nations! It is nice that the collaboration coincided with the anniversary of the momentous occassion. Azadi Mubarak to everyone. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 12:08, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
Well Pakistan's I-Day has passed [and India's is here (Azadi Mubarak)]. So why not steadily work on the remaining issues and look it with an eye of FA review. We can nominate it later for FA but while we are at it why not fix the issues now. Samar Talk 21:19, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

14 August vs. 15 August[edit]

Shouldn't this be merged into the history section, since it is talking about the 1947-1948 era? Regardless of that, the day has been 14 August ever since. I do not think this is WP:DUE enough (or significant for that matter) to get a separate section, it can be better discussed in the history. Mar4d (talk) 10:11, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

I was going to add it in the history section anyways. Just adding material and fixing for now, will include after done. Samar Talk 10:19, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

Comments by Vibhijain[edit]

I can't see even a single mention of Balochistan. Many protests take place there on this day (the latest if you want). This is a important issue which needs to be addressed. Another point is joint celebration by India-Pak, and its criticism. Please work on this issues. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ Talk Email 10:53, 14 August 2012 (UTC) Yes check.svg Done - Added the issue of Baloch separatist movement, threats from Al Qaeda and Taliban. Any more details in here is unnecessary.

Join celebration is not off-topic. Also MOS suggests that links should not be bolded, also Youm-e-Azadi is not the translation, and indeed the transliteration. Also there is no ref which says that 27 Ramadan is a sacred night for Muslims. Also "by Vital Signs" and "by the rock band Junoon" is irrelevant, as the songs are wikilinked. Good work overall. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ Talk Email 11:13, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
Eh, didn't see the joint celebration comment, will stuff it somewhere. But I don't see how or why this is a controversy, probably should be in celebrations section. Will add a ref to 27 Ramadan and remove bands. Samar Talk 11:20, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
The joint celebrations took place in India? Any source of celebrations taking place in Pakistan. I think this reference is more suited for India ID article.
I would tend to agree with that, I can not see anything indicating where in Pakistan joint celebrations are happening. A source is needed to verify that. Mar4d (talk) 11:32, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
Is this article about Pak ID in Pak? A celebration is a celebration. Also another ref is [1]. Although its my personal experience, a special ceremony also takes place in Wagah Border, you may get some sources for that. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ Talk Email 11:56, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
Regarding your first question, yes, the article is about independence day celebrations in Pakistan. As for the ref, it is talking about joint celebrations in Hyderabad, India. As for your other point, I'll try to look for a source related to the Wagah border ceremony, that is definitely notable. Mar4d (talk) 12:05, 14 August 2012 (UTC)
No! Its about Pak ID celebrations. That also covers joint celebrations and celebrations by Pak immigrant groups. ♛♚★Vaibhav Jain★♚♛ Talk Email 07:09, 15 August 2012 (UTC)
Sorry but I disagree. This doesn't happen particularly on I-D and if included it clearly goes off-topic. Yes, this can be added to the partition article but not this. There is no mention of I-D in the article whatsoever. TheSpecialUser TSU 11:22, 15 August 2012 (UTC)
Graphic template in header

I have removed graphic templates from section headers. Please don't add again. --Tito Dutta 01:39, 15 August 2012 (UTC)

Additional comments from WikHead (part-2)[edit]

  1. In the sentence; "Like Iqbal, Bengal was left out of the proposal made by Choudhary."' - Choudhary appears to be referred to by his first name. This needs to be addressed.Yes check.svg Done
  2. The last sentence in the lead section (about security) does not flow well, and appears to have been randomly duct-taped to the article. I would suggest removing it, or editing for smoother flow of readability.Yes check.svg Done

That's all for now.  -- WikHead (talk) 14:21, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

  • Any update? Is anyone going to add more point? --Tito Dutta 04:04, 18 August 2012 (UTC)
  • I have just completed running several scripts as well a full review and very intense proof read from top to bottom. I'm pleased to say that everything appears to be in good order. Unless the current version drastically changes, I'm unlikely to have any further comments. I think the article looks and feels fantastic. Good work!  -- WikHead (talk) 12:02, 18 August 2012 (UTC)

Final assessment[edit]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:

--Tito Dutta 23:51, 25 August 2012 (UTC)


Regarding the question on currency image by Dutta, I searched through Pakistan copyright lays but could not find required details. Somewhere I read TSU is planning for FA therefore copyright issues with images need to be addressed. So I am putting up a list of images (present and potential) and we can request a senior editor from Commons to review them in detail. I prefer alternate 5 or 6 in place of current image in history section. Please put up if you have better options. Also any experienced admin in sight who can thoroughly work with images? Samar Talk 21:07, 14 August 2012 (UTC)

Name Image Section
File:Flag of Pakistan on National Monument.JPG Flag of Pakistan on National Monument.JPG Infobox
File:Chaudhry Khaliquzzaman.jpg Chaudhry Khaliquzzaman.jpg History
File:Pakistan_PID_Release_for_Independence_Series_1948.jpg Pakistan PID Release for Independence Series 1948.jpg History
File:Pakisan First.jpg Pakisan First.jpg Celebration
File:Minar-e-Pakistan at night Taken on July 20 2005.jpg Minar-e-Pakistan at night Taken on July 20 2005.jpg Celebration
File:Pakistan_commemorative_banknote.png 100px In popular culture
File:Parallel steps.jpg Parallel steps.jpg Alternate 1 (Celebration)
File:Long Live Pakistan.jpg Long Live Pakistan.jpg Alternate 2 (Celebration)
File:Indep-pak.jpg Indep-pak.jpg Alternate 3 (Celebration)
File:Working Committee.jpg Working Committee.jpg Alternate 4 (History)
File:GGJinnah.jpg GGJinnah.jpg Alternate 5 (History)
File:Jinnah oath ceremony.jpg Alternate 6 (History)

I'd support replacement of the image with alternate 5 in history as stated by Samar. Any thoughts fellows? TheSpecialUser TSU 01:58, 21 September 2012 (UTC)