Talk:Jonathon Sharkey/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

Reviewer: SOXROX (talk) 16:52, 27 August 2011 (UTC) I hereby resign the reviewership. I can't focus anymore. Feel free to ask for my opinion, but I just can't focus on Wikipedia anymore. Sorry. SOXROX (talk) 15:03, 9 October 2011 (UTC)

Initial Comment[edit]

I'm far from done, but one immediate note:

The references. My, oh my, the references. It has three dead links, one archived page that does not have any benefit and is basically a dead link, and another that is in Romanian, so you can't verify that it connects to the sentence in the article. If the refernces aren't improved, I'm afraid this article would definitely fail. SOXROX (talk) 17:17, 27 August 2011 (UTC)


Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well written:
1a. the prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct.
1b. it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. all in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines.
2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by images:
6a. images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content.
6b. images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
7. Overall assessment.

I'll put in the final grades later. SOXROX (talk) 01:48, 28 August 2011 (UTC)


This section will list things to improve in the article.

1- Well written?[edit]

  • In the Background section, for some reason you have brackets around Vlad Dracul's name.

 Done SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

  • Is it really necessary to say that he announced his gubernatorial campaign in Minnesota on Friday the 13th?
    • Well, Friday the 13th is commonly associated with bad luck among the superstitious, and it seems obvious to me that Sharkey intentionally picked that date to reinforce his "scary" persona. As such it's more important than if he'd chosen, say, Sunday the 21st. Still, if you feel like it should be removed, I'll remove it. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:38, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

I guess its ok then.  Done SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

  • We need more background on his personal life. He has a wife in April 2006 (Julie Crawford), and then another one (Spree) when he was 42. He was 42 in 2006, so I definitely have a question there.
    • I'll need to find more sources. I'll get back to you as soon as I do. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:38, 28 August 2011 (UTC)
      • Look up Paige Brewer. There was a controversy about it. He apparently ran off with her- a 16 year old girl, to "emancipate' her from her mother.
  • At the beginning, he is mentioned as being a professional wrestler. Well, there is nothing about him being a wrestler in the rest of the article other than the photo!
    • Again, I'll try and find more sources detailing his wrestling career. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:38, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

 Done SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

2- Factually accurate and verifiable?[edit]

  • This is the big one. ACTIVE REFERENCES! Three dead links, one useless archive, and another one in Romanian. That is 5/26 useless links, or 19%. Not good.
    • Romanian doesn't mean useless, there's always Google Translate. Should I link to the translated version of the page? Also, please read my comment on the article's talk page. I currently only have access to servers that block the Wayback Machine, making it impossible for me to fix the dead links. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:43, 28 August 2011 (UTC)
      • Translated version of the source added. But I still need someone to help me out with the dead links, because I can't access the Wayback Machine from my server! Difluoroethene (talk) 23:07, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

Romanian link Done, but the wayback machine doesn't go anywhere. Maybe its restricted on my computer but that wouldn't make sense. SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

  • Also, they need to be RELIABLE! The Imdb link, I'm sorry, is not beneficial in any way. It might have even been self made.
    • That's an external link, not used as a reference at any point. Still, I'll remove it if you feel it shouldn't be there. Self-made isn't necessarily a bad thing for EL's, since many articles like to the official website of the subject of the article.
      • Just remove the dead link for the review and leave the the imdb page, in that case. SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)
  • Unsourced material is rampant. The site that shows Sharkey's party is not registered in the UK is dead. The dead link to the review of Sharkey's film leaves the possibly self created Imdb page as the only usable source for his filmography, making it look like a dubious claim. The first sentence in Background is unreferenced for users who don't speak Romanian because, well, these particular users don't speak Romanian! While the archived page doesn't affect anything because his Minnesota run is referenced elsewhere, but wait, no, the ABC link is dead too! The Documentary section is completely unsourced. The sentence about his party's beliefs is too (Second paragraph under VWP). The fact that he is a professional wrestler (at the beginning) is unverified. And the quote under Beliefs and Vampirism should also be referenced.
    • The Beliefs and Vampirism quote is already referenced. The Documentary section was not added by me, but by someone else; I've removed it. Regarding Romanian and archived links, please see my comment above about such things. If you can access the Wayback Machine (I can't, because the server I'm currently using blocks it), fixing the dead links should be easy as pie. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:43, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

 Done, once again, I'm not sure how the wayback machine works, so... SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

Too summarize, the references stink. Its as simple as that.

3- Broad in its coverage?[edit]

  • Not enough background and personal life. Again, the reference for the first sentence in background is unreadable for many.
    • Relatively little has been written in reliable sources about these topics (since most coverage focuses on his presidential campaigns and arrests, and to a lesser extent his wrestling. Still, I was able to dig up some information about his children and his wrestling career, which I've added. Difluoroethene (talk) 23:02, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

 Done SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

  • As I've already said, the Documentary section is unreferenced.

I made those two critiques already, so therefore the article's broadness isn't too bad, actually. But it can stil use work. More background is needed.

 Done, removed. SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

    • Unfortunately, while Sharkey has received a fair amount of coverage, much of the coverage is spotty, since no comprehensive biographies of him (that I'm aware of) have been published. Most of what has been written about him focuses on individual incidents (such as his arrests, his presidential runs and his films). So, there may be a limit to how broad this article could eventually be, due to the fact that we are limited to only using information contained in reliable sources. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:46, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

And thats what really handicaps this GA nom! SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

4- Neutral?[edit]

Reading this article, I feel like you and others are basing the article too much on his claims. Sharkey has basically written the article himself, because he is telling everyone about himself on talk pages. For instance, editors gave in to his complaints when he claimed that he is a Luciferian and not a Satanist. Also, there is no mention of his professional wrestling career. Just saying that in the first sentence without backing it up later makes it seem totally false. This is unverified. Many of his claims are unverified. Some could even be interpreted as sarcasm.

To summarize, while you tried your best to be unbiased, it is still based too much on his claims from talk pages.

His Luciferianism is verified by this source; he also follows the goddess Hecate. I will be updating mentions of his religion accordingly. I also added a section on his wrestling career.Difluoroethene (talk) 22:53, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

 Done SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

5- Stable?[edit]

Ever since Sharkey stopped editing the article, it has been stable. A few vandalism attempts, but other than that, the article is fine there.

6-Appropriately illustrated?[edit]

  • The first picture at the top is fine. It relevant and passes he fair use policy.
  • The second one of him wrestling does as well. However, as I've said, there is barely anything about him wrestling. It still is relevant to the article though.
    • The CANOE article has quite a bit on his wrestling career. I will be adding it shortly. Difluoroethene (talk) 22:54, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

 Done SOXROX (talk) 00:11, 29 August 2011 (UTC)

So, thats my analysis. Before I actually grade it, I would really appreciate if you came and cooperated by making some changes. SOXROX (talk) 14:52, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

Second Opinion[edit]

I think we need a second opinion. A few things need to be resolved, one being the wayback machine which the nominator can't access and I can't figure out. :) But other than that, I want another opinion on whether some the article fallacies in sourcing and the sources' credibility should fail the article. Any other comments would be very much appreciated. SOXROX (talk) 01:34, 31 August 2011 (UTC)

Not done Disregard this entire part. SOXROX (talk) 20:06, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

      • I think you still need to get your facts straight. If you read the last line of the first paragraph about me supposedly brain washing Paige, you will see you are talking about it in the last paragraph. I'm no English writing major, but, you need to write that better.

In a links you have about the Paige incident, Hart Van Denburg addresses that I did contact not only Jeb Bush, but, the MN Division of Family Services for them to help Paige. Why is this incident even on my page, when I wasn't charged with any wrong doing?

You say the page is suppose to be bias. Well, putting stuff in there that makes me look bad, when I did nothing wrong, is NOT bias. It's PREJUDICE!

You have me listed as a Perennial candidate. Yet, Ralph Nader has ran more times than me. I don't see you calling him a Perennial candidate. Another act of PREJUDICE!

I emailed Saturn 2 newspapers out of Jersey. One from Jan 1988 when I turned pro as a boxer (it had my amateur boxing record listed) and an article for 1 Jun 1991 when I wrestled Ivan Koloff in a main event match. Yet, I see no mentioning of this. The articles are actually micro filmed. Someone going to say these articles are not real?

On IMDb, they have listed movie I have done and that are available on Amazon. Why are they not mentioned?

On 9 Sept 11, we go into principle filming of the feature film - The Comeback Fighter. We are having a media event on 10 Sept 11. Who do I send the newspaper article links too?

On a dating scale, I am dating 19 year old Russian actress Rachel Allen. We are happily living together. Her IMDb page will be out soon I was told. She has a fan page on FB.

As far as my religious beliefs, on my left bicep, I have a tattoo of the Triple Moon. A sign of the Goddess Hecate.

Also, why is there no mention that I recorded a CD of Elvis Love Songs. In the TCF short, I did the soundtrack. This is not fair. You need to get a SECOND and if need be, a THIRD opinion on my page.

May everyone have a blessed weekend. Jonathon The Impaler 13:01, 3 Sept 2011 Not done Disregard this entire part. SOXROX (talk) 20:06, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

Aircorns opinion[edit]

Sources (Criteria 2):

  • Reference 1 is to a book and so should be formatted like a book reference. Weird Minnesota: your travel guide to Minnesota's local legends and best kept secrets. Sterling (September 1, 2006). Eric Dregni. ISBN 1-4027-3908-7
  • References 3,4,5,10,11,21,22,23 need more information (publishers, dates, authors etc). They should not be All caps either.
    • All caps fixed. I'm not sure what I should put for the authors, to be honest; these are forms filed with the FEC by Sharkey himself, so should I list Sharkey as the author, or the FEC?Difluoroethene (talk) 19:35, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
      • Author is not really necessary for web sites if it is not made obvious. The publisher is important though so we know where the information is coming from. AIRcorn (talk) 10:20, 5 October 2011 (UTC)
  • Reference 14 is a red linked template
  • Reference 4 is dead. Archive link here [1]
    • For some reason, this link doesn't seem to be working. Difluoroethene (talk) 19:35, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
      • Funny, it works for me. Maybe it is your computer. I can add it to the article. AIRcorn (talk) 10:20, 5 October 2011 (UTC)
  • Reference 6 should not link to Google translation. Instead link to the original Romanian version and attach a note translating the relative section. I don't think Google translate is reliable enough for a good article, although I could be wrong.
    • Earlier during this GA review, Soxrox advised me not to link to a Romanian source, which is why I added the Google Translate link in the first place. So I'm not really sure what to do now. Difluoroethene (talk) 19:38, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
      • Actually, its different from what I said. Originally, you just had a Romanian source, and I suggested Google Translate. What Aircorn is saying, and it makes sense to me, is that you include the Romanian source and add a note below the reference that translates the sentence that is specific to the article. SOXROX (talk) 20:04, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
        • I would expect to be taken to the source when clicking on a link. Other articles have the language in brackets within the reference. You could link to both maybe with a note saying google translation. Even better would be to find an English source. AIRcorn (talk) 10:20, 5 October 2011 (UTC)
  • Reference 7 doesn't support the sentence it is sourcing.
    • Scroll down a bit further; the page has several news stories about it, the top one isn't about Sharkey's move, but one of the ones below is. Difluoroethene (talk) 19:30, 4 October 2011 (UTC)
  • Reference 5 I don't know what to make of this with the information given. It appears to be the very definition of a Primary source. It appears to be hosted on a reliable website though so maybe it is alright.
    • That source is a legal document filed with the FEC, making it official. I don't think there's a problem with using it as a source in this context. Difluoroethene (talk) 18:41, 2 October 2011 (UTC)
      • I guess my concern was about it being legit. Maybe some more information about it could be included and about where it is hosted. AIRcorn (talk) 10:20, 5 October 2011 (UTC)
  • Reference 23 is dead and I could not find it on the wayback.
    • Deadlink removed. It really wasn't that important of a detail to include, anyway, so the article didn't lose anything worthwhile. Difluoroethene (talk) 19:38, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

Other comments:

There might be issues of WP:UNDUE with the large legal troubles section. The prose in that section is also disjointed with a mention of the 16 year-old girls in the first paragraph and then details about one of them (which one?) in the last. Don't quite get the quote to start the beliefs section. The focus is a bit off in some places; his wife getting fired for being a pagan, then-42-year-old/19-year-old then-wife. It also mentions actor and director in the lead, but nowhere else. AIRcorn (talk) 04:03, 30 September 2011 (UTC)

    • Regarding the quote in the beliefs section, it's included to shed a bit of sunlight (so to speak) on the subject's hawkish views on terrorism. Do you think there might be a better way of illustrating the same point? Difluoroethene (talk) 18:41, 2 October 2011 (UTC)
      • Maybe needs to be in put better context or with a better explanation underneath. Could also move it further down so that it is not the first thing read. Some editors use {{quotebox}} to good effect. AIRcorn (talk) 10:20, 5 October 2011 (UTC)

Ktlynch comments[edit]

While this article has some strong points, and doesn't breach the BLP policy, I feel it is somewhat lacking from the the GA standard. The lead is too short, the the sources are inadqueate. Many are primary sources, and some of the article reads like a manifesto for subject. Many sources are not mainstream publications. Quotation from sources tends to selectively pick nuggets from the subject without the criticism there included from the journalists. Maybe a wikiproject can help develop this article more Best, --Ktlynch (talk) 14:20, 16 October 2011 (UTC)

Hekerui comment[edit]

As Ktlynch wrote, the lead does not properly summarize the article and I wonder how we know that The Marshalltown Chronicle is a reliable source. The citations of websites lacks accessdates. I think the the flow of the prose needs work and the article is lacking in biographical detail. Hekerui (talk) 14:54, 21 October 2011 (UTC)

Multiple editors have noted that this article needs some work before GA status, and I agree after a look though, so I'm closing this as failed. Sending this for a peer review may be a better option than here for now. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:28, 25 October 2011 (UTC)