Talk:Louis II of Hungary

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Article in need of an overhaul[edit]

Preface: I've never written on a talk page before, since this is the first article that I've found that's clearly in need of improvement, while not knowing enough about Hungarian history to correct it. I thought I'd post here before tagging. This article contains many statements without adequate citation, and many of them proclaim judgments or are otherwise subject to opinion.

For example: "This event hastened the fall of Hungary." Under Reign, par 3, sen 3. Major statement without citation. "Hungary was in a state of near anarchy under the magnates' rule in 1520...." all of par 4. There are no cites, for 1) Finances in shambles 2) Borrowing 1/3 national income 3) Border guard status 4) Why revenue increases were "stifled" For Par 5, nothing is cited. "Louis failed to coordinate and gather his forces" according to whom? "At the same time, Hungary was unable to get assistance from other European states, which Louis had hoped for." No mention or citation of embassies he launched, who did he expect to get help from? etc etc Par 6 "Louis made a tactical error when he tried to stop the Ottoman army in an open field battle with a medieval army, insufficient firearms, and obsolete tactics." Opinion without citation. There is a citation from the Battle of Mohacs page for "The Battle of Mohacs: The Fall of the Hungarian Empire, by Richard H. Berg, published in Against the Odds, Volume 3, Number 1, September 2004" with reference to the obsolescence of the army deployed at Mohacs, but no description of tactical error. Ncfoley (talk) 04:42, 29 August 2014 (UTC)