Talk:Louis J. Sebille/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 19:37, 27 February 2011 (UTC)

I look forward to the review. I will write out my initial comments later this week. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 19:37, 27 February 2011 (UTC)
The article firstly links to 5 redirect pages (shown in the box on the right side of this page). The external links so far look fine. Lord Roem (talk) 19:39, 27 February 2011 (UTC)
Fixed the links. —Ed!(talk) 14:41, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Things to fix/resolve[edit]


  • Second to last sentence in last paragraph is a run-on.
Fixed--Iankap99 (talk) 22:15, 10 March 2011 (UTC)


  • "or MC", not needed.
Agreed, fixed--Iankap99 (talk) 22:16, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
  • Need a cite for "During that time he was described as an outstanding pilot and leader..."
Added citation--Iankap99 (talk) 22:32, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
  • Need a cite for "...but when those flights produced heavy casualties...they began flying medium-altitude missions"
Fixed --Iankap99 (talk) 22:33, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Korean War

  • Confused about placement of the '3,000 hours of flying time'. Maybe move that to after the WWII section? It sounds like he flew 3k hours in five days...
It clearly says over the course of his career--Iankap99 (talk) 22:34, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Medal of Honor action'

  • First sentence reads like a run-on.
  • Is 'Beachhead' capitalized?
No, fixed--Iankap99 (talk) 22:28, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
  • "passed under his nose" - cliche?
Sounded awkward, I fixed it--Iankap99 (talk) 22:24, 10 March 2011 (UTC)
  • "But only one of his bombs had released..." - merge to the sentence before. But sounds out of place here.
I didn't merge but it doesn't sound awkward anymore--Iankap99 (talk) 22:27, 10 March 2011 (UTC)


  • Oh my gosh that looks so pretty/awesome :-)
  • Maybe write how many of these were given posthumously. You only say the Medal of Honor was given to him after death.

MOA Citation

  • Not sure the information proceeding the actual citation message is needed. I'm talking about the Rank and and date, etc.


  • Rename Sources to Bibliography?
  • Maybe a more descriptive caption for the picture of Louis Sebille next to the plane.

Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 00:35, 28 February 2011 (UTC)

Have you been in contact with the submitter? I'll pick this up if he is AWOL.--Iankap99 (talk) 22:15, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Looks good! Promoted. Lord Roem (talk) 18:00, 11 March 2011 (UTC)