Talk:Love Without Tragedy / Mother Mary/GA1

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 18:18, 30 March 2013 (UTC)

Lead and infobox
  • How about a "next", "previous" song field for the infobox?
  • Kuk Harrell is missing as a producer in the infobox.
  • "It was co-written by Rihanna with The-Dream and Carlos McKinney, who both produced the song." → "It was written by Rihanna with the song's producers The-Dream and Carlos McKinney."
  • "two-parter" → Not sure about the use of this. It's really just two songs blended to make one.
  • ""Love Without Tragedy" contains lyrics about love, and transitions into "Mother Mary", in which Rihanna makes a confession about a moment in her life which she regrets, possibly referring to Chris Brown." → This sentence needs some major work.
  • "and described it as the album's "centerpiece"." → Many reviewers used the exact same word?
Background and production
  • "more information will be made available tomorrow, Thursday, September 13". → Don't see why this needs to be quoted. They simply said more info will available the next day.
  • "vocals together with" → Remove "together", just a filler word that doesn't add anything.
  • The infobox is missing the studio where the song was actually recorded, her vocals at least. R Studios.
Composition
  • "The experiments with electronica by using Moog synths and "vaporous keyboards" as part of its instrumental." → Don't know what this sentence is saying. I think some words are missing here.
  • I think this section need to be more organized. Like, the first paragraph talks solely about "Love Without Tragedy" and then the second about "Mother Mary". I'll go on after this is done.
Critical reception
  • "English rock band The Police or Sting" → The reviewer couldn't make up their mind if it sounds like the English rock band The Police of the English rock band Sting? The later which isn't a rock band at all?
  • "Younie concurred with Dan Martin" → We shorten Younie's last name but not Martin's?
  • "Greg Kot for Chicago Tribune" → "Greg Kot for the Chicago Tribune"
  • "Message in a Bottle" is a song and should be shown that way. (there's no quotation marks)
  • "Esquire's Miles Raymer thought that Police would have been a better band if they would have had Rihanna as their lead singer instead of Sting on "Love Without Tragedy"" → First of all, it's The Police, and this makes it sound like "Love Without Tragedy" is a The Police song and they wish Rihanna was the singer instead of Sting.
  • "Nathan Slavick for DJ Booth was critical of the tracks theme. He wrote that "Love Without Tragedy / Mother Mary", along with "Stay" and "No Love Allowed", all discuss the topic of Rihanna being a non-controversial person who is struggling to find love in a "mad world", and further wrote that none of them are impressive." → "Nathan Slavick for DJ Booth was critical of the tracks theme, writing that "Love Without Tragedy / Mother Mary", along with "Stay" and "No Love Allowed", all discuss the topic of Rihanna being a non-controversial person who is struggling to find love in a "mad world". He further wrote that none of them are impressive."
Chart performance
  • Should just be moved to Charts; it isn't enough.
    Moved down  — AARONTALK 19:14, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
Live performance
  • Not enough for a separate section.
    It's fine to be like this. Lots of articles have one sentence for live performance and it doesn't fit in anywhere else here.  — AARONTALK
    No, it really isn't. See No Hay Igual for an example. It was included at the end of the lead with a source, since there isn't enough for a section.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 19:23, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
  • What does "Phresh Out the Runway" have to do with anything?
    Removed  — AARONTALK 19:14, 30 March 2013 (UTC)
Result
  • All issues solved! Passing the article! Great work you too!  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 20:31, 30 March 2013 (UTC)