I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 04:06, 28 November 2012 (UTC)
Here are my issues with the article:
- I'd move the unassisted triple play sentence to the first para of the lead, since that's basically what he's known for in baseball and probably the only reason most know who he is.
- "1881, in Grand Haven" no comma needed there
- You can put in a couple he's in place of Ball in the article. Seems like every sentence uses Ball so this would make it flow a bit better.
- "a minor league baseball team that were members of the Southern League" Sounds a bit iffy, reword.
- "Ball had a relatively disappointing year, " I'd take that out; it can be determined by the stats. (besides, he never had a good offensive year, so it's not really relative of anything)
- "On a positive note, however, " Reword.
- "Ball was bought by the Cleveland Naps for approximately $5000." only that second ref is needed. The article actually does lean towards being overreferenced in a couple spots. That's not a bad thing of course, but at the same time we don't need the extra refs breaking up sentences. An extra example is "The player who was final out of that play, Jake Stahl, " It's noted in the unassisted triple play paragraph, so it doesn't need to be re-reffed.
- Adding his 1909 stats may be helpful. Other years could help too, but 1909 a bit more so since it was the triple play year.
- It might be helpful to look through the Sporting Life or Baseball Magazine archives to see if any extra personal info or anything can be added on Ball. That's available .
Normally I would suggest to split the early life and later life, but given that his pre-baseball career is the one sentence, it wouldn't make sense, so the personal life section is fine as is. I'll put the article on hold, and will pass it once everything is fixed. Wizardman 04:29, 28 November 2012 (UTC)
- Everything checks out now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 00:54, 29 November 2012 (UTC)