Talk:Oops!... I Did It Again World Tour/GA2

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Rp0211 (talk) 23:03, 26 July 2010 (UTC)

New Review[edit]

After reading your comments, and Wikipedia:Reviewing good articles, I will create an on-hold list so that this article's problems can be fixed. Rp0211 (talk) 02:22, 27 July 2010 (UTC)

Because this article has fixed all of the problems that were seen during the review, the article has passed and is now good article status. I will update this article and make it a good article. Rp0211 (talk) 04:57, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


Opening

  • "the tour was announced on February 2000..." (should be "the tour was announced on February 22, 2000" to go with beginning sentence of "Background" section)
I replaced it with "In February 2000". I don't think the exact date is very important. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
Whichever one works, and has proper grammar.  Done Rp0211 (talk) 04:49, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "The setlist was composed by songs from her two studio albums." (name the albums)
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "...who used the PRISM system..." (needs to be wiki-linked)
I can't find a page for the PRISM system, since there's not an specific page for sound equipment with that name. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "All the equipment came from the United States." (needs "of" between "all" and "the"; makes it sound better)
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "The show consisted of four segments..." (needs to list all the segments)
The segments don't have names. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
But what were the segments? warrior4321 04:35, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
The segments don't have to have names. Each of the segments, however, should be described on what it is, and possibly how it shows it is different than the other segments. Rp0211 (talk) 04:41, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
Actually, this tour along with the BOMT Tour are probably the only Spears tours that don't really have themed segments. It's basically video interludes in between for costume changes. So I followed the example of other articles such as The Monster Ball Tour, that lists some highlights of the show. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:46, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
Alright, this part is  Done Rp0211 (talk) 04:49, 27 July 2010 (UTC)

Background

  • "The tour marked the first time Spears toured Europe." (needs reliable source)
The following source has a quote from her that says she never toured outside the United States. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
I must have missed that.  Done Rp0211 (talk) 04:50, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "...performing in front of them is going to be so exciting". (period needs to be in front of quote)
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "Tour sponsors from the 2000 leg of the ...Baby One More Time Tour, Got Milk? and Polaroid remained. (comma needed after "Polaroid")
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:52, 27 July 2010 (UTC)

Development

  • "...as well as seven songs from the supporting album." (name album)
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "Spears explained that " I've been singing the same material for so long now. It'll be nice to change it up a little bit". (Fix punctuation issues)
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "The sound equipment was provided by Showco who used the PRISM system, which adapted the show for each venue according to its height, width and the coverage required. The sound was mixed by Front of house engineer Monty Lee Wilkes on a combination of Yamaha PM4000 and PM3000 consoles, an unusual choice for Spears's shows. He used dbx 903 compressors for kick and snare drums. The compressors were also used on Spears's microphones, a Shure Beta 58A handheld and a Crown CM-311AE headset-mounted capsule." (needs reliable source)
It's the following source, so  Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "The act ended with Spears talking to the audience and sitting on a stool to perform "From The Bottom of My Broken Heart" with her guitarist Skip. After she left the stage, there was a video interlude hosted by *NSYNC in which contestants did different games in order to meet Spears. She appeared onstage to meet the chosen fan and then welcomed the audience into her bedroom. Wearing pajamas and slippers, she performed "Born to Make You Happy", which included a dance segment near the end. The next performance of "Lucky" featured a navy theme. She continued with "Sometimes", in which she wore an outfit similar to the one she wore in the music video of the song. At the end, she climbed the staircase and briefly spoke to the audience before moving into a performance of "Don't Let Me Be The Last To Know". A band interlude showcasing a mix of funk and progressive rock followed, and Spears reappeared to perform her cover of Sonny & Cher's "The Beat Goes On". During the performance, she was lifted into the air wearing a kimono that covered most of the stage. She continued with "Don't Go Knockin' On My Door" and her cover of The Rolling Stones's "(I Can't Get No) Satisfaction", which ended with a dance sequence set to the original version. Later there was a dance interlude in which the dancers showed their individual moves while their names appeared on the screens. Spears took the stage again in a conservative schoolgirl outfit to perform "...Baby One More Time". She ripped it off halfway through the song to reveal a top and miniskirt." (needs reliable source somewhere to be verifiable)
It's the following source, so  Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)
  • "... Baby One More Time" and "The Beat Goes On" (fix punctuation because it is in a quote)
 Done. Xwomanizerx (talk) 04:24, 27 July 2010 (UTC)

Oldest Review[edit]

After reading the article, I have decided to fail the article for a good article for several reasons.

First of all, the article is well-written in some spots, but mostly is poorly written. To be more specific, here are some of the many errors I noticed:

Opening (First paragraph)
  • "the tour was announced on February 2000..." (bad grammar)
  • "The setlist was composed by songs from her two studio albums." (does not name albums)
  • "...who used the PRISM system..." (needs to be wiki-linked)
  • "All the equipment came from the United States." (needs "of" between "all" and "the")
Opening (Second paragraph)
  • "The show consisted of four segments..." (needs to list all the segments)
  • "The Oops!...I Did It Again World Tour received positive reviews from critics, who praised Spears's energy onstage as well as the band." (not neutral point-of-view)

Second of all, the article did not contain a neutral point-of-view in some spots. An example:

  • "The Oops!...I Did It Again World Tour received positive reviews from critics, who praised Spears's energy onstage as well as the band."

Third of all, the article did not contain enough sources in several areas. Here are some examples:

  • The sound equipment was provided by Showco who used the PRISM system, which adapted the show for each venue according to its height, width and the coverage required.
  • The sound was mixed by Front of house engineer Monty Lee Wilkes on a combination of Yamaha PM4000 and PM3000 consoles, an unusual choice for Spears's shows. He used dbx 903 compressors for kick and snare drums.
  • The compressors were also used on Spears's microphones, a Shure Beta 58A handheld and a Crown CM-311AE headset-mounted capsule.

Therefore some major improvements need to be made before this article is considered good article status. To review, it did not meet the good article criteria because it was (1) poorly written, (2) did not contain a neutral point-of-view in some spots, and (3) did not have enough sources.

Rp0211 (talk) 23:40, 26 July 2010 (UTC)

I've never edited this article, nor am I involved in it in any way, but nonetheless I have some concerns.
Second of all, the article did not contain a neutral point-of-view in some spots. An example: The Oops!...I Did It Again World Tour received positive reviews from critics, who praised Spears's energy onstage as well as the band."
How is this biased?
and (3) did not have enough sources.
For the most part, the article looks well-referenced. You noted three examples, three examples can more than easily be found in 1 week (the average time an article is put on hold).
First of all, the article is well-written in some spots, but mostly is poorly written. To be more specific, here are some of the many errors I noticed:
Opening (First paragraph)
  • "the tour was announced on February 2000..." (bad grammar)
  • "The setlist was composed by songs from her two studio albums." (does not name albums)
  • "...who used the PRISM system..." (needs to be wiki-linked)
  • "All the equipment came from the United States." (needs "of" between "all" and "the")
Opening (Second paragraph)
  • "The show consisted of four segments..." (needs to list all the segments)
  • "The Oops!...I Did It Again World Tour received positive reviews from critics, who praised Spears's energy onstage as well as the band." (not neutral point-of-view)
These are very minute errors and can be in a few minutes. These could have been fixed if it had been put on hold. I don't think you understand or realize the importance of putting an article on hold. All of the errors you have listed could have been fixed in under a week. Therefore, the article should have been put on hold. If there were errors that required more than a week, or a lot of dedication or the editor was busy and unable to follow through with your requests, then you should fail the article. I hope you'll reconsider this GA, and give the editor a chance to fix their errors. warrior4321 23:58, 26 July 2010 (UTC)
I agree - the hold option should have been used. Please renominate at WP:GAN. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 00:20, 27 July 2010 (UTC)