Talk:Oswald Danes

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Reviewer: Bladeboy1889 (talk · contribs) 17:52, 9 July 2012 (UTC) Bladeboy1889 (talk) 17:52, 9 July 2012 (UTC)

Prose Generally good - I've made a few copy edits but there are some sentences that I think need reviewing:

  • "... when death is restored he takes one of the Torchwood team's enemies out in a murder-suicide." - I don't think a murder-suicide is a proper phrase. Can it be reworded along the lines of him sacrificing himself while killing one of the antagonists in the process?
    • Murder–suicide is something I've seen used in mainstream news. I'll wiki-link the term in the article.
      • Fair point - it's not a term I've ever heard before but if it's notable enough for it's own article... Bladeboy1889 (talk)
  • "...American Evangelical pundits and the Christ figure stock character." - that sounds a bit odd. Are US evangelists referred to as pundits? Also 'the christ figure' gives it a definite article position - a better phrase would be 'as a Christ like stock character.' perhaps?
    • Changed to evangelists and I've just amended the Jesus mention to say Jesus, whilst still linking to christ figure. The sources available stick to a comparison to "the" Jesus.
  • "Danes launches an ad hoc publicity stunt; video footage of him holding a baby girl causes Monroe's star to fall" - this is very vague and doesn't really show cause and effect.
  • "...Oswald takes down the Mother..." - takes down isn't a very grammatical phrase, it needs revising.
    • Amended
  • "...some questioned the morality of featuring such a character..." - who? This needs clarifying.
    • expanded

Image It's in the grey area of fair use but no different than most on Wikipedia. It needs a caption and alt text though.

Everything else on the GA criteria checks out. I'll put it on hold while someone takes a look at the above elements. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 12:28, 11 July 2012 (UTC)

Is anyone going to look at the issues above - time is ticking on. I'd rather not fail the article as it's very close to being GA - but it's heading towards a fail if no revisions are made in a reasonable time. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 08:51, 23 July 2012 (UTC)
I was on the cusp of failing this - rescued in time :) - I'll do the "GA paperwork" now. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 11:25, 25 July 2012 (UTC)