Talk:PS22 Chorus

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Okay, I'm not going to remove the unreviewed tag, but I will say that you need to eliminate the section about the director with all the biographical stuff, and focus on making the article more chronological. Start with a history section, of something about formation. Then move on to media appearances and so forth. Right now this article is just a mess of facts. Wikilost (talk) 06:29, 18 October 2009 (UTC)

Oh, and remove anything that is a "reference" from the blogspot website. Some random blog is not a reliable source. Right now, this page looks a lot like an attempt at self promotion. Remove the links to the blogspot and any content that cannot be verified by an outside source: WP:RS. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Wikilost (talkcontribs) 06:32, 18 October 2009 (UTC)
Thanks. Seems like there's a lot of work for me to be done, since most information is of course pulled directly from the blog. Would direct video-links be permitted as references? (e.g. about the chorus performing with Crowded House or at Madison Square garden for Stevie Nicks) Zendrig (talk) 12:04, 18 October 2009 (UTC)
Okay, I incorporated many pieces of information in a newly introduced "History" paragraph. I also got rid of any claims, that were unsupported by any linked 3rd party articles or media files. The background information on the chorus teacher was removed altogether. Zendrig (talk) 15:21, 18 October 2009 (UTC)