Talk:Phthorimaea operculella

From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
Jump to navigation Jump to search

Peer review[edit]

Hello, overall the article is well-written and well organized. My changes were mainly adding in links to other articles, fixing grammar errors, and rewording sentences. The information here is great, but I would recommend more variety in the transitions you use because there were some sections that had repetitive word choice.

Slzeng (talk) 19:44, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi, Shreenidhi here! I moved the photos of the larval and pupal stages to the life-cycle section from the lead of the article. I mainly made grammatical fixes, and changed tense to ensure consistency. There was a sentence that seemed contradictory, which I fixed with information from the citation. I also added a couple of hyperlinks. Overall, this is a good article, and can surely improve with further polishing. Shreenidhipm (talk) 01:13, 1 November 2017 (UTC)

Great job on the article! I mainly just changed some sentence structures and fixed some grammatical errors. In the last sentence on the larvae section you may want to rephrase the sentence or state what the larvae walks faster than. CR.Tracy (talk) 22:37, 30 November 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review for Class[edit]

Overall, I thought that you did a great job and that you provided a lot of detailed information! There were some sentences that were phrased a bit strangely and were run-on, so I provide suggestions on editing those. I also suggest some places where you could add some more information/detail, which would help provide some context for the reader. For example, I suggest adding some more description about the part about warmer climate in the habitat section, the part about experiments in the oviposition section, and adding examples of the chemical factors in the host plant selection part. Also just saying “experiments” or “studies” can be vague, so maybe you could mention some specific studies that show that claim or some specific researchers that have studied this? It would allow the reader to have more detailed information and know that this information is coming from a reliable source. Also, overall, I think that you could consider adding some more information about habitat and mating, so that there is more balanced coverage between the different sections. RV2014 (talk) 04:11, 1 November 2017 (UTC)