Talk:Schwester Selma

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Name[edit]

I assume she had a last name. Shouldn't the article be under her full name, with a redirect from "Schwester Selma" if that is how she was known? --Jms2000 20:22, 13 September 2006 (UTC)

She was known as "Schwester Selma", so I left the title that way per WP:COMMONNAME: Wikipedia does not necessarily use the subject's "official" name as an article title; it prefers to use the name that is most frequently used to refer to the subject in English-language reliable sources. I put her birth name in the lead and infobox per WP:MOS. Yoninah (talk) 22:19, 8 December 2013 (UTC)

GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Schwester Selma/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 12:55, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

  • I propose to take on this review. The article appears to be both well-written and interesting and I will study it in detail shortly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:55, 7 July 2015 (UTC)

First reading[edit]

  • The lead should be a summary of the main body of text and should not need to include references because the information should be referenced at its main appearance.
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • Following on from this, Selma's date of birth should be mentioned (and cited) in the "Early life and education" section.
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "Dr. Moshe Wallach, a German-Jewish doctor, came to Palestine in 1890 ..." - "came" is not really a suitable word as its use is normally limited to somewhere that is already being discussed, such as "Hamburg" in this instance.
  •  Done Edited. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "Several weeks later, Jerusalem was hit with a year-long ..." - "by" rather than "with".
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "... paraffin lamps were kindled in the operating room." - "kindled" does not sound right here, perhaps "provided light" would be better.
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "She received her first assistant after ten years at the hospital." - What does this mean? She had other nurses working under her before this didn't she?
  •  Done She had nurses and midwives working in the hospital, but they came and went. She did not have a personal assistant, like Dr. Wallach had her. But I removed the sentence to avoid ambiguity. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "In the wards, she cultivated a spirit of warm, personalized patient care that became the modus operandi for the hospital to this day." - This sentence has mixed tenses. You could substitute (or add) "and this is still the case" for "to this day".
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "The November 1947 United Nations Partition Plan for Palestine ..." - I am ignorant of the history of Israel; in this paragraph who is besieging what? Was she trying to return to her post at the hospital?
  •  Done Edited. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • "reminding her students "that there is nothing humiliating in our work"." - It would be better to put the "that" before the quotation marks.
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • The paragraphs in the final two sections are rather brief, and could perhaps be amalgamated. For example, "Awards and accolades" has 4 sentences and 3 paragraphs.
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
  • Looking back again at the lead, I see a reference to her being called the "Jewish Florence Nightingale" but that fact is not mentioned in the body of the text.
  •  Done Fixed. Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)
    • That's all for the moment. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:55, 7 July 2015 (UTC)
  • Thank you for the thorough review! Yoninah (talk) 19:20, 8 July 2015 (UTC)

GA criteria[edit]

  • The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout. I am happy with the alterations that have been made.
  • The article uses several reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
  • The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
  • The article is neutral.
  • The article is stable.
  • The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are all in the public domain.
  • Final assessment - I believe this article reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 12:46, 10 July 2015 (UTC)