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Fourth paragraph, about "Traditional Buddhist ethics", needs rewriting to be understandable
It's hard to tell if the words at the start of the fourth paragraph are the beginning of a sentence or a title of a section, at least partly because of the confusing use of dashes and commas there; and as a result the paragraph is very confusing.
original fourth paragraph:
Traditional Buddhist ethics—while some schools, especially Western Buddhist ones, take more progressive stances regarding social issues—such as conservative views regarding abortion, homosexuality and human sexuality, may or may not be called into question as well.
I could suggest the following as a possible rewrite, but I have no idea if it's factual, just that it may be more easily understandable:
Traditional Buddhist ethics: while some schools of Buddhism, especially Western Buddhist ones, take more progressive stances regarding social issues (in contrast to conservative views regarding abortion, homosexuality and human sexuality), these issues may or may not be called into question as well by Secular Buddhism.
I won't make the above rewrite myself because I don't know if what it says is true or not.
I suppose it's possible, from looking at the original writing style of the paragraphs preceding the fourth one, that the paragraph might rather mean as follows, rewritten:
While some schools of Buddhism, especially Western Buddhist ones, take more progressive stances regarding social issues, traditional Buddhist ethics (such as conservative views regarding abortion, homosexuality and human sexuality) may or may not be called into question by Secular Buddhism as well.
But I also don't know if that statement as I've rewritten it is actually true or not.
The problem of not having good citations was clear as another editor became reluctant to make grammatical changes because they were concerned that they may be affirming the accuracy of the paragraph they wanted to clarify.
"take more progressive stances regarding social issues"
Loaded term. Progressive is an Orwellian euphemism for values (or really, anti-values, since they define themselves mostly in negation of traditional Western values rather than positively) that in 50 years have destroyed civilization throughout the West. Hardly seems like progress in the sense the term implies. Linear progress, sure, or the progress of someone falling down a mountain. But not the kind of progress the term intends to imply. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2601:243:C102:BCB0:B40B:5F1A:3DFF:DCF8 (talk) 09:23, 8 August 2017 (UTC)