Talk:Sesame Workshop/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 03:39, 8 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 03:39, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: History "In 1968, Joan Ganz Cooney and Lloyd Morrisett, came up with the idea … hired a staff of producers and writers." (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 1.1: Background "In 1968, Joan Ganz Cooney and Lloyd Morrisett, came up with the idea to form an organization to oversee the production of Sesame Street, which would, through the medium of television, help prepare children, especially those from low-income families, for school." (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Fixed, hopefully to your satisfaction. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:45, 8 February 2014 (UTC) Major Point 1.2: Founding "They spent two years researching, developing, and raising money for the new show. Cooney was named as the Workshop's first executive director, which was called "one of the most important television developments of the decade".[1]" & "Sesame Street premiered on PBS in November 1969, and the Workshop was formally incorporated shortly after, in 1970. Gerald S. Lesser and Edward L. Palmer were hired to conduct research for the show; they were responsible for developing a system of planning, production, and evaluation, and the interaction between television producers and educators, later called the "CTW model". They also hired a staff of producers and writers." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2: Early years "After the initial success of Sesame Street, they began to plan for its continued survival, which included procuring additional sources of funding and creating other TV shows. They expanded into other areas, including unsuccessful ventures into adult programs, international co-productions, licensing arrangements, and outreach programs to preschools. The 1980s was a challenging period for the Workshop; difficulty finding audiences for their other productions and a series of bad investments hurt them until licensing agreements stabilized their revenues by 1985." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 3: Later years "Cooney stepped down as CEO in 1990; David Britt was named as her replacement. In 2000, the CTW changed its name to Sesame Workshop, to better reflect its entry into non-television and interactive media, and Gary E. Knell became CEO. H. Melvin Ming replaced Knell in 2011." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 4: Funding sources "" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 4.1: Publishing "" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 4.2: Music "" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 4.3: International co-productions "" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Major Point 4.4: Interactive media "" (not a concise summary of the corresponding section in the body) Added new paragraph as per your request. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:45, 8 February 2014 (UTC) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: History "In 1968, Joan Ganz Cooney and Lloyd Morrisett, came up with the idea … hired a staff of producers and writers." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 1.1: Background "In 1968, Joan Ganz Cooney and Lloyd Morrisett, came up with the idea to form an organization to oversee the production of Sesame Street, which would, through the medium of television, help prepare children, especially those from low-income families, for school." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 1.2: Founding "They spent two years researching, developing, and raising money for the new show. Cooney was named as the Workshop's first executive director, which was called "one of the most important television developments of the decade".[1]" & "Sesame Street premiered on PBS in November 1969, and the Workshop was formally incorporated shortly after, in 1970. Gerald S. Lesser and Edward L. Palmer were hired to conduct research for the show; they were responsible for developing a system of planning, production, and evaluation, and the interaction between television producers and educators, later called the "CTW model". They also hired a staff of producers and writers." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Early years "After the initial success of Sesame Street, they began to plan for its continued survival, which included procuring additional sources of funding and creating other TV shows. They expanded into other areas, including unsuccessful ventures into adult programs, international co-productions, licensing arrangements, and outreach programs to preschools. The 1980s was a challenging period for the Workshop; difficulty finding audiences for their other productions and a series of bad investments hurt them until licensing agreements stabilized their revenues by 1985." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Later years "Cooney stepped down as CEO in 1990; David Britt was named as her replacement. In 2000, the CTW changed its name to Sesame Workshop, to better reflect its entry into non-television and interactive media, and Gary E. Knell became CEO. H. Melvin Ming replaced Knell in 2011." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4: Funding sources "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4.1: Publishing "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4.2: Music "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4.3: International co-productions "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4.4: Interactive media "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Fixed as per above. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:45, 8 February 2014 (UTC) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done Sesame Workshop (SW, or "the Workshop"), formerly known as the Children's Television Workshop (CTW), is a worldwide American non-profit organization behind the production of several educational children's programs, including its first and most well-known, Sesame Street, that have run on public broadcasting around the world (including PBS in the United States). Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER) Fix "In 2011, Knell left the SW to become the chief executive at NPR; H. Melvin Ming was named as his replacement. Ming had been chief financial officer since 1999 and its chief operating officer since 2002.[65]" in the Reception section. I think you mean "Later years". I combined the last two paragraphs; I hope that's what you're asking me to do. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:45, 8 February 2014 (UTC) Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO):  Done Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER):  Done Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL):  Done Check for Links to sister projects:  Done Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
Done Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with the other FAs – Format of Sesame Street, History of Sesame Street, Sesame Street & Sesame Street research)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

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Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done (Thorough check on Google in parallel with criteria 2. Cross-checked with the other FAs – Format of Sesame Street, History of Sesame Street, Sesame Street & Sesame Street research) Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

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Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (NFC with a valid FUR) (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license) (PD) (Creative Commons Attribution 2.0 Generic license)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Check for copyright status:  Done Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  Done Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  Done 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  Done Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done

I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article:

• I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview and to give relative emphasis.
• The lead says "In 1968, Joan Ganz Cooney and Lloyd Morrisett, came up with the idea to form an organization to oversee the production … " while the Background section in the History says "In the summer of 1967, Cooney took a leave … reported her findings … and proposed the creation of a company that oversaw its production, which eventually became known as the Children's Television Workshop (CTW).[7]" (1a issue: is it 1967 or 68?)

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Christine, please feel free to strike out any recommendation from this review which you think will not help in improving the article, which is our main aim here. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 10:08, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for your kind words. I believe that I've addressed all your concerns; please tell me if I've overlooked anything. And thanks for the review! Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 18:45, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks --Seabuckthorn ♥ 20:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 20:23, 8 February 2014 (UTC)