Talk:Sheila Heaney

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Sheila Heaney/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:00, 9 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 10:00, 9 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It's good to see a bio for a female military leader at GA. Generally looks good, just minor nitpicks. Lead

  • was honoured with an appointment?
I changed it to just "and was appointed..."
  • As part of her role... probably need to clarify what role, since two were mentioned in previous sentence.

Early life

  • Anne Summers: suggest "Anne née Summers"
  • Suggest linking Cornwall and Lake District

Auxiliary Territorial Service

  • Any idea of her duties at the Salisbury Plain District Group?
No idea unfortunately, there aren't many hits for the term outside her biography. I presume it must have been an ATS detachment that supported British Army training on the plain. I've linked Salisbury_Plain#Military_use to help the reader.
  • second subaltern: is it possible to provide a conventional rank equivalent, as you did for company assistant or if it was the same as the original rank, specify that?
New name for the same rank, clarified
  • and was awarded the War Medal 1939–1945...: strictly speaking, this and the GSM are campaign medals, and the way this is presently worded implies she was singled out for these. All military personnel serving will have earned these depending on where they served. It may be better to refer to her being entitled to these rather than being awarded them.
Agreed, done
  • 3 months suggest "three months"

Women's Royal Army Corps

  • rank of subaltern: rank equivalent?
  • with seniority from 2 September 1941
Done, though I note the Gazette has used both "with seniority of.." and "from...", it currently (and in the issue cited here) uses the plain "with seniority DAY MONTH YEAR", though that is not grammatical
  • with seniority from 2 September 1945
  • on 2 September was promoted to the permanent rank of major.: suggest "on 2 September her rank of major was made permanent."
  • with an appointment as a Member of the Order of the British Empire
Went with "she was appointed..."

Later life

  • link Edinburgh
  • Scotland from Spring 1977: shouldn't Spring be lower case?
  • Her date of death isn't explicitly cited.
  • To head off the possible query from the reader, if the sources permit it perhaps explicitly state she never married/had children?
DNB states never married, added

Other stuff

  • As a general comment, I suggest linking all ranks on first mention.
  • In the infobox, the wrong dash style is used in the "Years of Service" field. Ditto for the year range in the image caption. Also suggest adding that she was commander of the WRAC, there should be a field for it in that infobox template.
I'm always confused by dashes but replaced them with unspaced en-dashes which I think is the right form
  • Image tags check out OK.
  • No inappropriate dupe links

That's it for me. Will check back in a few days if not pinged before then. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 11:01, 10 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review Zawed. I've made a start and will address the final comments as soon as possible - Dumelow (talk) 19:33, 10 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hi Zawed, I think I've addressed everything now, cheers - Dumelow (talk) 06:34, 11 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Great work, I am passing this as a GA as I believe that the article meets the relevant criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:04, 11 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]