Decent start, but I'd like to see some more info. Look through it again and try to smoothe out some of the edges; rewrite some sentences, combine others. This site has some good Mexican info, but it's in Spanish. Were there any tropical storm warnings? Is there a reason for its erratic path (or is it only due to Flossie)? Does NCDC have anything from Texas? Hurricanehink (talk) 04:01, 27 November 2006 (UTC)
"As Gabrielle was impacting the east coast of Mexico, Hurricane Flossie in the Eastern Pacific was battering the Baja Peninsula" - the "as" is ambiguous. Does it mean "because"? "as a result of"? "Since"? It's not an ideal sentence starter. Also, could you use a less dramatic word than "battering"? It just makes me hungry and think of waffles.
Should I change it to "Hurricane Flossie in the Eastern Pacific was battering the Waffle House"?--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 17 August 2012 (UTC)
"totaling to at least 19.44 inches (494 mm). " - why the "at least"? HPC says that was the peak. I think you should also say "peaking" instead of "totaling to". You should mention the HPC peak in the impact section too.
Because there are reports of rainfall totals higher than that.--12george1 (talk) 16:36, 17 August 2012 (UTC)
"From the outset, its motion was hampered by that of Hurricane Flossie off the Pacific coast of Mexico" - poor start to a paragraph. You should say "the cyclone's" or something instead of "its". Also, was the motion really "hampered"? That sounds like a negative thing.