Talk:Typhoon Pat (1985)

Typhoon Pat (1985) has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: May 20, 2014. (Reviewed version).

A fact from Typhoon Pat (1985) appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 13 June 2014 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that during Typhoon Pat (pictured), 95 Japanese fishing boats took refuge in North Korea?

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Typhoon Pat (1985)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 01:47, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hello User:Yellow Evan, I will be reviewing this article tonight for you. After a quick skim through, I must say that this is probably one of your best candidates for GA. Still, I did find some errors/things that need to be addressed:

"Originating from a monsoon trough towards the end of August" - Wikilink monsoon trough
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 01:55, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Pat first formed on August 24 several hundred kilometers east of the Philippines." - I think it's kind of odd how you say "several hundred kilometers" here, but throughout the article, the American system for units of measure is used first. It would be like if I had said on the 2002–03 Australian region cyclone season that Cyclone Graham formed several hundred miles of Port Hedland.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 01:55, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think you use "Pat" too many times in the lede. The first 7 sentences use the word "Pat". Alternate that words with things like "the storm", "the cyclone", "the typhoon", etc.
- Changed a few. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 01:55, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Later on August 26, a Hurricane Hunter aircraft reported winds of 45 mph (70 km/h) and " - Switch the order of units (i.e. km/h first, mph in parenthesis)
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 01:55, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Shortly after its peak, Pat moved ashore along the southern tip Kyushu" - You should probably include the date in here somewhere, because not only has the date not be mentioned since two sentences ago, but this is a new paragraph.
- Added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 01:55, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"While crossing the peninsula,[1] a peak rainfall total of 374 mm (14.7 in) was recorded in Ebino," - Which peninsula? Even the state of Florida is described as a peninsula :P
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 01:55, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"A peak hourly storm total of 107 mm (4.2 in) was measured at Gokaharadake on Nagasaki" - I'm a bit confused. Does this mean the highest 1-hour total?
- Yes. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
That should be it. After these issues are fixed/addressed, I will have no problem with passing thsi articles and listing it as a Good Article. Regards, --12george1 (talk) 01:47, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Whoa, that was quick! As I said earlier, I would have no problem with passing this article. Therefore, I am going to do that now. Congratulations, --12george1 (talk) 02:07, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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