Template:Did you know nominations/Arthur Barclay (American politician)
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The result was: promoted by MPJ-DK 11:52, 24 August 2016 (UTC)
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Arthur Barclay (American politician)[edit]
... that before being elected to the New Jersey General Assembly, 6-foot-8-inch (2.03 m) Arthur Barclay was captain of the basketball team that won the state Tournament of Champions as a teammate of future NBA player Dajuan Wagner?
- ALT1 ... that future New Jersey General Assemblyman, Arthur Barclay, won the state Tournament of Champions as basketball team captain, alongside future NBA player Dajuan Wagner?
- Reviewed: Grace's Little Belmont
Created by Alansohn (talk). Self-nominated at 19:34, 18 August 2016 (UTC).
Article creation date relative to filing date okay. Article length not okay: the "District 5" section does not belong here – since it has nothing to do with Barclay per se and since there is already a 5th Legislative District (New Jersey) article – and without it the article is only 1491 characters of readable prose.
- Hook interest and sourcing is okay, but hook length is too long at 231 characters.
- The article is missing some obvious biographical points (inclusion of which will fix the length issue). What position did he play in high school? In college? (Also, from a couple of the existing sources, he seems to have been something of a guiding influence on Wagner, and Wagner insisted that colleges recruit both of them; that could be included.) Was he a starter in college? What were some of his stats? If he only played three years, did he quit the team or was he not asked back? What year did he graduate from Memphis? Why did he decided to go into politics? How did he get on the Camden City Council, via winning a primary election for an open seat or what? (Often a politician's very first election is the one of most biographical interest.) What accomplishments did he have on the council? And so on.
- Will review other aspects of article when it is more fleshed out. Wasted Time R (talk) 16:47, 21 August 2016 (UTC)
- Wasted Time R, I've expanded the article to address your concerns. No objection to ALT1. Alansohn (talk) 03:54, 22 August 2016 (UTC)
Article length now not a problem (although I still think the "District 5" section is superfluous and a future maintenance burden). ALT1 hook well under 200 characters now. Article is much improved on basketball part and improved on politician part as well (although still some room for including something about motivation and accomplishments). Article sourcing and neutrality are still good and I haven't seen any indication of copyvio. No image involved. QPQ done although apparently that article changed enough that another review is needed. But this one is okay to go up. Wasted Time R (talk) 00:58, 23 August 2016 (UTC)
