- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Rcsprinter123 (state) @ 22:24, 12 February 2014 (UTC)
Leslie Garland Bolling
Moved to mainspace by SBaker43 (talk). Self nominated at 23:59, 27 January 2014 (UTC).
On hold, pending some issues with paraphrasing and sourcing All issues resolved:
- New enough – nominated less than an hour after being moved from userspace.
- Long enough – 4680 characters (789 words) "readable prose".
- Mostly within policy – neutral and cites sources with at least one inline citation per paragraph except the third paragraph of the "Early life" section.
- Although the article appears to be mostly free of copyright and close paraphrasing, there are three places that need immediate attention:
- The most serious is the last paragraph of the "Artistic work" section where "both alain locke and james a porter included bolling in their published surveys of african american art in his 1940 book design and figure carving e j tangerman discussed bolling at length and included illustrations of ten of his works as examples of american folk carving" is a word-for-word duplicate of "http://www.lva.virginia.gov/exhibits/bolling/recognition.asp". See the report for more details. I have temporarily commented out the phrases in the article.
- The slightly less serious matter is the wording of the last section, "List of sculptures", which has close paraphrasing of two sources; the article uses the words "In 2006 the Library of Virginia could locate only 30 of his sculptures". which compare closely to the words used in the cited source "http://www.lva.virginia.gov/news/newsltr/issue174.pdf" - "So far the Library has located 30 Bolling wood sculptures". It could be rephrased like this: "In 2006, the Library of Virginia was able to account for just 30 of his wood sculptures"? Changed as suggested.
- Then there is the list of carvings which could use alternative wording to avoid matching the list in the ninth paragraph of "http://www.nathanielturner.com/lesliegarlandbollingsandralwest.htm". The comparison below shows the Wikipedia article words first and then the words from NathanielTurner.com:
- Parson-on-Sunday preaching from the pulpit → "Parson-on-Sunday" (preacher in the pulpit)
- Aunt Monday washing clothes on wash-day Monday → "Aunt Monday" (washing clothes)
- Sister Tuesday ironing clothes → "Sister Tuesday" (ironing)
- Mama-on-Wednesday mending wear and tear → "Mama-on-Wednesday" (mending)
- Gossip-on-Thursday visiting neighbors over the back fence on the servant's day off → "Gossip-on-Thursday" (visiting over the back fence)
- Cousin-on-Friday scrubbing the floor → "Cousin-on-Friday" (scrubbing the floor)
- Cooking-on-Saturday is a turkey going in the oven for Sunday dinner → "Cooking-on-Saturday", with a turkey going in the oven
- Save America is a rare political statement by him about democracy from 1941 → a rare political statement for democracy in "Save America" (1941)
- The hook has 154 characters, and is interesting, neutral and present in the article.
- The hook does not have an associated citation in the article, although one could be selected from the citations already used.
- ALT1 and ALT2 are 119 and 137 characters respectively and supported by citations but they are not as interesting as the hook or ALT3.
- ALT3 is 155 characters and is as interesting as the hook. It has the added advantage of two reliable citations. I would suggest a possible rephrasing - move the words "for black youth" from the end of the sentence to just after the words "art center".
- I think the wording of the hook could be improved by using fewer words but highlighting the reason why it was an unusual event:
- ALT4... that in 1935 the segregated Richmond Academy of Arts produced a one-man show of carvings by African-American sculptor Leslie Garland Bolling?
- QPQ not necessary.
Put on hold until issues resolved. Overall an interesting and well written article, for which I would support ALT4, followed by the original hook or ALT3. Green Giant (edits) (talk) 17:43, 9 February 2014 (UTC)
- @SBaker43: Thank you for the changes. I have added the same citations for the hook as the following sentence. I'm in favour of ALT4, but I will leave the choice up to User:SBaker43. Good to go otherwise. Green Giant (edits) (talk) 16:29, 10 February 2014 (UTC)
- ALT4 is more concise; thanks for the suggestion. Go with it. SBaker43 (talk) 08:00, 11 February 2014 (UTC)