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Topics to branch out into[edit]

Science biographies
Music/pop culture
True crime

Pelican Butte[edit]

Contrapoints sources[edit]

Life
  1. [3]
Work
  1. [4]
  2. [5]
  3. [6]
  4. [7]
  5. [8]
  6. [9]
  7. [10]
  8. [11]
  9. [12]
  10. [13]
  11. [14]
  12. [15]
  13. [16]
  14. [17]
  15. [18]
Videos

[See her YouTube]

Katia and Maurice Krafft[edit]

Career
  1. [19] (can revisit for legacy)
  2. [20]
Publications
  1. [21]
Death
  1. [22]
  2. [23]
  3. [24]
  4. [25]
  5. [26]
Commemoration
  1. [27]
  2. [28]
  3. [29]
  4. [30]

Willam Belli[edit]

Scholarly
  1. [31]
  2. [32]
  3. [33]
  4. [34]
  5. [35]
Drag Race
  1. [36]
  2. [37]
  3. [38]
  4. [39]
Book
  1. [40]
  2. [41]
Movies
  1. [42]
  2. [43]
  3. [44]
  4. [45]
  5. [46]
  6. Rotten Tomatoes
Music
  1. [47]
  2. [48]
  3. [49]
  4. [50]
  5. [51]
  6. [52]
  7. [53]
Activism
  1. [54]
  2. [55]
  3. [56]
Controversy
  1. [57]
Questionable Reliability
  1. [58]
  2. DWV
  3. [59]
  4. [60]
  5. [61]
  6. [62]
  7. [63]
  8. [64]
  9. [65]
  10. [66]

Sasha Velour Sources[edit]

Franklin Glacier Potential Sources[edit]

  1. [84]
  2. [85]
  3. [86]
  4. Latest Pleistocene and Holocene behaviour of Franklin Glacier, Mt. Waddington area, British Columbia Coast Mountains, Canada
  5. Dendroglaciological investigations of mid- to late-Holocene glacial activity in the Mt. Waddington area, British Columbia Coast Mountains, Canada
  6. [87]
  7. [88]

Laura Marling Potential Sources[edit]

(see Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Music) (see Wikipedia:Featured articles#Music_biographies)

General
  1. http://www.theguardian.com/music/2013/apr/28/laura-marling-interview-once-eagle
  2. http://www.nytimes.com/2011/09/04/arts/music/laura-marlings-british-folk-cd-creature-i-dont-know.html?pagewanted=all&_r=0
  3. http://www.theguardian.com/music/2008/oct/26/popandrock
  4. http://www.bbc.co.uk/music/reviews/n8mq
  5. http://www.stereogum.com/8107/new_mystery_jets_feat_laura_marling_video_young_lo/mp3/ (Young Love collab.)
  6. https://itunes.apple.com/us/music-video/young-love-feat.-laura-marling/id276086561 (Young Love collab.)
  7. http://www.lauramarling.com/discography/ - Personal website
  8. http://www.theguardian.com/music/2008/feb/04/popandrock.folk - Songwriting style
  9. https://www.youtube.com/watch?hl=en-GB&v=DwUbHy0TCsk&gl=GB - Busking video?
  10. http://www.npr.org/artists/93941444/laura-marling - ALL NPR articles on Marling.
  11. http://www.allmusic.com/artist/laura-marling-mn0002080238 - AllMusic
  12. http://www.theguardian.com/music/laura-marling - Guardian Index
  13. http://www.independent.co.uk/news/people/profiles/baby-blues-laura-marling-on-hits-heartache-and-that-tricky-21st-birthday-2362756.html - Independent, also mentions being kept out of club because under 21.
  14. http://pitchfork.com/artists/9602-laura-marling/ - All Pitchfork articles
  15. http://www.nme.com/news/beck--2/78428 (Work with Beck)
  16. http://www.brits.co.uk/artist/laura-marling - Brit Awards History
  17. http://www.telegraph.co.uk/culture/music/rockandpopfeatures/10331832/Mercury-Music-Prize-2013-Laura-Marling-interview.html
  18. http://www.opb.org/opbmusic/series/sessions/laura_marling/ - Artistry
  19. http://www.ribbonmusic.com/label/artists/laura-marling/ - Record Label website
  20. http://www.thecurrent.org/feature/2013/08/19/laura-marling-live - Internal links to album reviews.
  21. http://www.bbc.co.uk/music/artists/cd9713d6-6e5f-4143-9412-4d12b7bd47f2 - BBC source.
  22. http://www.daytrotter.com/#!/concert/laura-marling/20055210-37382615
  23. http://www.mtv.com/artists/laura-marling/ - ALL MTV articles.
  24. http://www.undertheradarmag.com/artists/laura_marling - All Under the Radar articles.
  25. http://www.clashmusic.com/features/laura-marling-and-johnny-marr-on-songwriting - Songwriting.
  26. http://books.google.com/books?id=1BNKzzDdRrMC&pg=PA54&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=RXDcU76xMsWzyATF8IHACQ&ved=0CDgQ6AEwBQ#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false
  27. http://books.google.com/books?id=SwjLZE8D894C&pg=PA23&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=RXDcU76xMsWzyATF8IHACQ&ved=0CEQQ6AEwCA#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false - Dharohar info.
  28. http://books.google.com/books?id=vzr_AgAAQBAJ&pg=PT208&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=CnHcU6vpLMWqyATh1oHYDA&ved=0CB8Q6AEwATgK#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false - Mumford relationships.
  29. http://books.google.com/books?id=VgtNg-Rozf8C&pg=PT77&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=CnHcU6vpLMWqyATh1oHYDA&ved=0CCgQ6AEwAzgK#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false - Praise from Adele.
  30. http://books.google.com/books?id=XdVIKbO7G80C&pg=PT531&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=CnHcU6vpLMWqyATh1oHYDA&ved=0CDYQ6AEwBjgK#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false - Brief mention.
Alas, I Cannot Swim
  1. http://books.google.com/books?id=HYUifI9rdsoC&pg=PA381&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=RXDcU76xMsWzyATF8IHACQ&ved=0CDIQ6AEwBA#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false - Explains political timing too.
  2. http://books.google.com/books?id=IkZox6XK6oAC&pg=PA110&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=CnHcU6vpLMWqyATh1oHYDA&ved=0CCQQ6AEwAjgK#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false
  3. http://books.google.com/books?id=ORWPH1xEkRgC&pg=PA56&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=CnHcU6vpLMWqyATh1oHYDA&ved=0CC4Q6AEwBDgK#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false - also talks about noah and the whale.


I Speak Because I Can
  1. http://www.nme.com/blogs/nme-blogs/laura-marling-i-speak-because-i-can-first-listen
  2. http://www.nme.com/photos/the-500-greatest-albums-of-all-time-300-201/324403/1/1#38
  3. http://books.google.com/books?id=EgHgDgiLzqMC&pg=RA12-PA38&dq=laura+marling+folk&hl=en&sa=X&ei=vnLcU_yPCI-tyATyzICYDA&ved=0CBwQ6AEwAA#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling%20folk&f=false
A Creature I Don't Know
  1. http://www.nytimes.com/2011/09/04/arts/music/laura-marlings-british-folk-cd-creature-i-dont-know.html?pagewanted=all&_r=0
  2. http://www.gigwise.com/news/64155/Laura-Marling-To-Release-New-Album-A-Creature-I-Dont-Know-In-September
  3. http://www.rte.ie/presspack/2010/12/25/rte-radio-1s-album-of-the-year-2010/
  4. http://www.daytrotter.com/#!/concert/laura-marling/20055210-37382615
  5. http://www.bowerypresents.com/event/267167-laura-marling-brooklyn/
  6. http://books.google.com/books?id=EgHgDgiLzqMC&pg=RA12-PA38&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=RXDcU76xMsWzyATF8IHACQ&ved=0CDwQ6AEwBg#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false
  7. http://books.google.com/books?id=en6jizvGCTgC&pg=PA90&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=RXDcU76xMsWzyATF8IHACQ&ved=0CEAQ6AEwBw#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false
  8. http://books.google.com/books?id=0wtKHa9tu6QC&pg=PA84&dq=laura+marling&hl=en&sa=X&ei=CnHcU6vpLMWqyATh1oHYDA&ved=0CBsQ6AEwADgK#v=onepage&q=laura%20marling&f=false
Once I Was an Eagle
  1. http://www.nme.com/news/laura-marling/66544
  2. http://www.digitalspy.co.uk/music/news/a464203/laura-marling-announces-new-album-once-i-was-an-eagle.html
  3. http://www.pastemagazine.com/articles/2013/04/listen-to-laura-marlings-new-single-master-hunter-4.html
  4. http://www.hitfix.com/immaculate-noise/david-bowie-disclosure-laura-marling-make-mercury-prize-short-list
  5. http://www.independent.co.uk/arts-entertainment/music/features/little-bird-flies-to-la-if-youve-been-wondering-where-laura-marling-has-been-pondering-8629361.html
  6. http://pitchfork.com/reviews/albums/18066-laura-marling-once-i-was-an-eagle/
  7. http://www.telegraph.co.uk/culture/music/rockandpopfeatures/10331832/Mercury-Music-Prize-2013-Laura-Marling-interview.html
  8. http://www.avclub.com/review/laura-marling-once-i-was-an-eagle-98187
  9. http://www.rollingstone.com/music/lists/50-best-albums-of-2013-20131202/laura-marling-once-i-was-an-eagle-19691231
  10. http://www.wnyc.org/story/296298-laura-marling-4/ - Themes and subjects
  11. http://radio.com/2014/05/05/turn-season-1-music-laura-marling-bonny-portmore/ - Music for Turn.
  12. http://www.mtvhive.com/2013/05/30/laura-marling-once-i-was-an-eagle/
  13. http://www.pastemagazine.com/articles/2013/05/laura-marling-once-i-was-an-eagle.html
New
  1. http://www.stereogum.com/1664443/watch-laura-marling-play-new-song-born-to-love-cover-townes-van-zandt/news/
Older Stuff

Boring Lava Field[edit]

Geography
  1. [89]
  2. [90]
History
  1. [91]
  2. [92]
  3. [93]
  4. [94]
Geology
  1. Add more from Trimble once other sources are used!
  2. [95]
  3. [96]
  4. [97]
  5. [98]
  6. [99]
  7. [100]
  8. [101]
  9. [102]
  10. [103]
  11. [104]
  12. [105]
  13. [106]
  14. [107]
  15. [108]
  16. [109]
  17. [110]
  18. [111]
  19. [112]
  20. [113]
  21. [114]
  22. [115]
  23. [116]
  24. [117]
  25. [118]
  26. [119]
  27. [120]
  28. [121]
  29. [122]
  30. [123]
  31. [124]
  32. [125]
  33. [126]
  34. [127]
  35. [128]
  36. [129]
  37. [130]
  38. [131]
  39. [132]
  40. [133]
  41. [134]
  42. [135]
  43. [136]
  44. [137]
  45. Conrey, R.M., Uto, K., Uchiumi, S., Beeson, M.H., Madin,

I.P., Tolan, T.L., and Swanson, D.A., 1996, Potassium-Argon ages of Boring Lava, northwest Oregon and southwest Washington: Isochron/West, no. 63, p. 3-9.

  1. Volcanoes to Vineyards
Ecology
  1. [138]
Recreation
  1. [139]
  2. [140]
  3. [141]
  4. [142]

Three Sisters[edit]

  • Magmatic activity beneath the quiescent Three Sisters volcanic center, central Oregon Cascade Range, USA [143]
  • Continuing inflation at Three Sisters volcanic center, central Oregon Cascade Range, USA, from GPS, leveling, and InSAR observations [144]
  • Time-dependent changes in volcanic inflation rate near Three Sisters, Oregon, revealed by InSAR [145]
  • Volcano geodesy in the Cascade arc, USA [146]
  • Quaternary Magmatism in the Cascades: Geologic Perspectives, Issue 1744 [147]
  • WE Scott "Holocene rhyodacite eruptions on south sister"... 1987
  • Notes: "Mount Multnomah" mention
  • Prominence and height stuff should probably be briefly mentioned in the text
  • Climbing and recreation needs some copyediting, and perhaps rearrangement.
  • Glaciers of North Sister - Harris book
  • Comb through references - make sure you're being comprehensive and that they're all reliable per RS

Goat Rocks[edit]

Still useful for geology: [148], [149], [150], [151], Fire Mountains book, [152] Recreation: [153]

  1. https://books.google.com/books?id=XUggas8bwMIC&pg=PA132&lpg=PA132&dq=goat+rocks+usgs&source=bl&ots=5AkyKqaf8y&sig=rAOexzTOz4OdpscEqhsPlTzLhGk&hl=en&sa=X&ei=azhaVb_oB4yWygTGhoC4Ag&ved=0CFYQ6AEwCv=onepage&q=goat%20rocks%20usgs&f=false
  2. http://volcanoes.usgs.gov/volcanoes/st_helens/
  3. http://volcanoes.usgs.gov/about/pglossary/hummocks_more.php
  4. http://volcanoes.usgs.gov/observatories/cvo/Historical/LewisClark/Info/summary_mount_st_helens.shtml
  5. http://www.fs.usda.gov/recarea/giffordpinchot/recarea/?recid=79414 (Note: down when first accessed, 5/18)
  6. http://www.fs.usda.gov/detail/giffordpinchot/specialplaces/?cid=fsbdev3_004987 ( Also down when first accessed)
  7. https://books.google.com/books?id=X9LHyAcg0bgC&pg=PA347&dq=goat+rocks&hl=en&sa=X&ei=ojlaVYWPA4WFyQStsYHIBA&ved=0CCMQ6AEwAQ#v=onepage&q=goat%20rocks&f=false
  8. https://books.google.com/books?id=eyDRib-FJh4C&pg=PA161&dq=goat+rocks+volcano&hl=en&sa=X&ei=0zlaVZ6YGY-MyATJzYGAAQ&ved=0CB0Q6AEwAA#v=onepage&q=goat%20rocks%20volcano&f=false
  9. https://books.google.com/books?id=HcfOaXOMRbcC&pg=PA1063&dq=goat+rocks+volcano&hl=en&sa=X&ei=0zlaVZ6YGY-MyATJzYGAAQ&ved=0CDEQ6AEwAw#v=onepage&q=goat%20rocks%20volcano&f=false
  10. https://books.google.com/books?id=KSAJFBED0w4C&pg=PA12&dq=goat+rocks+volcano&hl=en&sa=X&ei=0zlaVZ6YGY-MyATJzYGAAQ&ved=0CDwQ6AEwBQ#v=onepage&q=goat%20rocks%20volcano&f=false
  11. TREE-RING EVIDENCE FOR 1842-1843 ERUPTIVE ACTIVITY AT THE GOAT ROCKS DOME, MOUNT-ST-HELENS, WASHINGTON [154] (Web of Science)
  12. http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/wol1/doi/10.1029/JB095iB12p19465/abstract
  13. http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/wol1/doi/10.1029/JB092iB06p04867/abstract
  14. http://www.osti.gov/scitech/biblio/5191174

Game plan: Using Calabozos as a guide...

1. Geography, geology 2. Wilderness, climbing, recreation 3. Potential activity in its vicinity? (probably not, but check sources to make sure) 4. Glaciation 5. Eruptive history - use [155] 5. Fix that picture / Organize images. 6. Fix converts - m-->ft. 7. Copyedit! Prose is a minor catastrophe.


Three Sisters Work[edit]

  • Flora and fauna
  • Wilderness
  • Expand geology for each cone
  • Copyedit
  • General geology of the area
  • Reference cleanup
  1. http://books.google.com/books?id=6aron6s1NSMC&pg=PA35&dq=three+sisters+volcano&hl=en&sa=X&ei=ttLuU5X9H8KbyATRp4LIDw&ved=0CBwQ6AEwAA#v=onepage&q=three%20sisters%20volcano&f=false


Mount Meager comments[edit]

Some initial comments
  • Scientists have argued that Mount Meager, made of altered volcanic rock which breaks apart easily, is the most unstable mountain massif in Canada[26] and may also be its most active landslide area.[55] - Who are these scientists? Can you be a bit more specific, or is this generally agreed-upon?
  • Melting snow and ice, intense rainfall or the breakout of a summit crater lake are all potential causes - This can be easily reworded into active voice.
  • Because Mount Meager is capable of producing large landslides, Meager Creek valley is probably the most dangerous valley in the Canadian Cordillera. - Seems like a strong statement, one that would require a citation.
  • As Pemberton continues to grow it will eventually get pushed into the surrounding mountains, causing a major hazard to people living there.[57] - Second half would be better as "creating a major hazard for [...]".
  • Mount Meager is a major volcanic hazard capable - Should probably avoid passive voice here.
  • If Meager were to erupt, relief efforts would probably be orchestrated. - I am positive relief efforts would be orchestrated; this sentence confuses me.
  • Although Mount Meager is a potentially active volcano, as of 2003 there was no evidence of an imminent eruption. - Seems a bit dated; any more recent examinations for activity?

Voight comments[edit]

  • After spending one year studying at Cornell University, Voight received his Ph.D. in geology from Columbia University in 1965, studying under Fred Donath.[8] - Sounds like he received his PhD. in one year. Confusing.
  • During his career, Voight also served as a guest professor at the Delft University of Technology - Overuse of served. Different verb.
  • Voight has conducted volcanological research and managed the monitoring of active volcanoes. - Not necessary.
  • of his seminal publication on avalanches - Feel like this could be phrased better. Should omit the adjective as the next sentence explains its importance.
  • In a report to USGS geologists working at St. Helens, - A bit wordy. Could be more terse here.
  • Shortly after, Voight left the mountain and returned to teaching classes. - Need to double check he's teaching at PSU and mention that.
  • Probably need a brief description of St. Helens eruption.
  • Overuse of verb earn.
  • After Mount St. Helens, Voight also responded to volcanic hazards from other active volcanoes, including Nevado del Ruiz in Colombia and Mount Merapi in Indonesia.[18] - Since I've gone into descriptions of visits to other volcanoes, need to reword this sentence into something more general about other assignments.
  • Staying there without tent, food, or a first aid kit, - Could be phrased more eloquently.
  • By March 1986, he realized the movement originated from the creep, or gradual shifting, of one of the volcano's glaciers.[11] - abrupt end. Need something to wrap up section.
  • When Voight began research at Merapi in 1988, - Be careful if I tweak the other sentence so that this beginning still makes sense.
  • It was omitted in the Smithsonian Institution's 1981 publication Volcanoes of the World, despite hosting close to a million people on its slopes as of 1996. Voight set up meters to record movement within the volcano, and educated local scientists on volcanic monitoring.[20 - Very wordy and long.
  • Link "guerrilla forces".
  • After reviewing deformation data from the day before the eruption, he discovered - Remention Voight here.
  • asked Voight to evaluate the potential - Evaluate not the best word choice here.
  • People evacuated the city of Plymouth - Reads oddly. Maybe better in passive voice.
  • In 1984, the Institution of Civil Engineers awarded him the George Stevenson Medal,[6] recognizing his article - Name of article?
  • For his work helping monitor - More specific than "work", please.
  • United States National Committee on Rock Mechanics for his original work. - Replace work.
  • For "his research, teaching and consulting work", the Engineering Geology Division of The Geological Society of America presented him with the 2010 Distinguished Practice Award.[22] - Their, not the.

Voight[edit]

Barry Voight Potential Sources

Still can use newsletter to flesh article out. Need to mention books, expand on work at St. Helens, and mention international renown. Work at Ruiz. Work at Galeras. Report on Armero. Tilling on predictions. Additional stuff on Merapi. Rockslides and Avalanches. - title of 1970 two-volume classic.

  1. http://www3.geosc.psu.edu/people/faculty/personalpages/bvoight/index.html
  2. http://www3.geosc.psu.edu/people/faculty/personalpages/bvoight/index.html
  3. http://news.psu.edu/story/141688/2009/10/14/research/scientists-work-will-allow-better-prediction-volcanic-events
  4. http://pubs.usgs.gov/pinatubo/corn/index.html
  5. http://pubs.usgs.gov/pp/1345/report.pdf
  6. http://pubs.er.usgs.gov/publication/ofr84624
  7. http://pubs.usgs.gov/of/2000/ofr-00-0469/ofr-00-0469.html - Slight mention
  8. http://pubs.usgs.gov/of/1996/0677/pdf/of1996-0677text.pdf - Glicken report
  9. http://volcanoes.usgs.gov/publications/pdf/bib07.pdf - Still publishing as of 2007
  10. http://books.google.com/books?id=YWK1AAAAQBAJ&pg=PA129&dq=barry+voight+volcanologist&hl=en&sa=X&ei=F-POU4zOIIucyASGqILoCA&ved=0CEAQ6AEwBg#v=onepage&q=barry%20voight%20volcanologist&f=false
  11. http://rock.geosociety.org/egd/newsletters/2010/2010_Jan.pdf
  12. http://www.nytimes.com/2009/12/21/nyregion/21towns.html?_r=0
  13. http://www.npr.org/templates/story/story.php?storyId=122488758
  14. Volcano Cowboys (ie. [156])
  15. http://sese.asu.edu/news/sese-volcanology-professor-wins-international-award - Minor but potential
  16. http://books.google.com/books?id=DOx4Wy4sh-QC&dq=barry+voight+volcanologist&source=gbs_navlinks_s - Wrote a book.
  17. https://www.google.com/search?tbo=p&tbm=bks&q=inauthor:%22Barry+Voight%22&gws_rd=ssl - More books!
  18. http://books.google.com/books?id=chSe29M0EzAC&pg=PA451&dq=barry+voight+volcanologist&hl=en&sa=X&ei=ajXPU7exKYyeyATYyYC4Bw&ved=0CBsQ6AEwADgK#v=onepage&q=barry%20voight%20volcanologist&f=false - Comments about Nevado del Ruiz.
  19. http://books.google.com/books?id=SL7jhYpnaswC&pg=PT16&dq=barry+voight+volcanologist&hl=en&sa=X&ei=6DXPU4PvMNGKyASY04AQ&ved=0CEMQ6AEwBzgK#v=onepage&q=barry%20voight%20volcanologist&f=false - Brief mention of avalanche expertise
  20. http://adsabs.harvard.edu/abs/1990JVGR...44..349V
  21. http://books.google.com/books?id=oRgF3SQI8DoC&pg=PR11&lpg=PR11&dq=barry+voight+nevado+del+ruiz&source=bl&ots=XGqgE5zSxr&sig=-l-EhIZ9M7_moj32ZOZpvdS53EI&hl=en&sa=X&ei=tt7SU9CmK8qryASWmIEY&ved=0CFwQ6AEwDg#v=onepage&q=barry%20voight&f=false
  22. http://news.psu.edu/story/141481/1990/03/01/research/interest-public-safety

Glicken problematic sentences[edit]

On May 18, after working six days straight,[1] Glicken was scheduled to observe the volcano, however, he was absent as he had an interview concerning his doctoral dissertation for the University of California, Santa Barbara with his professor Richard V. Fisher in Mammoth, California.[7][8] - Awkward and probably too long.

  • After a magnitude 5.1 earthquake centered directly below the north slope triggered that part of the volcano to slide at 8:32 a.m.,[11] Mount St. Helens erupted laterally - second half is a bit awkward.
  • After the eruption, Glicken joined Air Force Reserve Rescue Squadron officials in a helicopter searching for Johnston.[13] Despite exhaustive searching with three separate crews over a span of nearly six hours, Glicken found no trace.[14] After the search proved fruitless, Glicken became so distraught that he refused to accept Johnston's death and returned to St. Helens to look for him.[4] - Whole paragraph needs a ce.
  • USGS Survey scientists decided over the summer to establish the David A. Johnston Cascades Volcano Observatory (CVO).[15] - Needs to be integrated into following paragraph.
  • Need to resolve awkward CVO explanation in said paragraph.
  • Through extensive, meticulous work, they pieced together the debris, which consisted of pieces ranging from 100 yards (91 m) in width to mere fragments, then they traced the origins of each piece along with their means of movement during the eruption.[18] - Which consisted part doesn't fit well
  • After his dissertation was published in shorter articles throughout various outlets in the 1980s,[20] Glicken quickly earned recognition as the first geologist to explain the creation of hummock fields near tall volcanoes.[19] - Probably should clarify various outlets.
  • Paragraph after that: Maybe too many complex sentences.
  • In total, 43 people[nb 1] including press who had been watching the volcanologists[32] died in the incident, and the volcano burned down 390 houses,[31] the remains of the flow extending 2.5 miles (4 km) in length.[29] - Bit wordy.

Round Two:

  • He researched Mount St. Helens in the United States before and after its famous 1980 eruption, and notably blamed himself for the death of fellow volcanologist David A. Johnston, who had switched shifts with Glicken so that he could attend an interview. - Unclear whether Johnston died in the eruption

Sadie passive voice[edit]

  • With Arthur Edeson serving as cinematographer, it was shot around Central Park in areas like casinos and nightclubs.
  • Today, it is unclear if a print of Subway Sadie has survived.
  • Salesgirl Sadie Herman (Dorothy Mackaill), who is employed in a New York fur store,
  • Herb and Sadie are soon engaged to be married
  • which informs her that he is in the hospital as the result of an accident.
  • Herb revealing that the president of the subway company is his father.[1][2]
  • Subway Sadie was directed by Alfred Santell,[2]
  • It is a silent film that was shot in black-and-white.[4] - Double passive voice.
  • The actors who would star in the film were selected by Santell and Al Rockett, the film's producer and production manager.
  • Jack Mulhall was cast in the lead as Herb McCarthy.
  • Dorothy Mackaill, who was chosen to play female lead Sadie Hermann,
  • A nightclub scene was also shot in New York.[12]
  • The finished product was seven reels long,
  • writing that it was an "an amusing photoplay".
  • Although the review felt the ending was unsurprising, it was "nevertheless pleasing".[15] - Double passive voice.
  • The Evening Independent praised the film, opining it was "one of the cleverest and most interesting pictures that has been here this season".[16]
  • The New York American review was similarly positive,
  • In the New York World, the film was described
  • The pairing of Mulhall and Mackaill was described as "such a perfect team" that it was planned to have them star in many further films.[7] - Double passive voice.
  • The final film they appeared in together was the 1933 drama Curtain at Eight.[28]
  • Subway Sadie was screened as late as January 12, 1928.[29]
  • As of November 2007, it is unclear whether a print of the film exists;

Meager Review[edit]

First Set: June 15

General
  • Per the MOS titles of sections should not repeat words already used; they should be unique. This is a trifling comment and it doesn't need to necessarily change because I'm not sure how FAC usually deals with this.
Prose
  • The precipitation is among the heaviest in North America, feeding lush forests on the mountains' flanks. - "The precipitation" seems a little disjointed. May be better as "this precipitation". I don't like the repetition of heavy either. Needs a little tweaking.
  • However, there is evidence the Silverthrone and Franklin Glacier complexes are related to Cascadia subduction. - This is pure jargon. Needs explanation of "Cascadia subduction". The rest of the paragraph just seems to ramble a bit. Perhaps it would help if you explained what you meant here in the comments.
  • This is a 1,094 km (680 mi) long fault zone - I think there needs to be a hyphen in here somewhere...
  • When the plate finally slips, the 500 years of stored energy are released in a massive earthquake. - This needs to be rephrased; it isn't the years that get released.
  • The "Local geography" section's first paragraph is extremely choppy. Try to combine some sentences for flow.
  • More than 10 streams drain meltwater from Mount Meager, including Capricorn Creek, Job Creek, No Good Creek, Angel Creek, Devastation Creek, Canyon Creek and Affliction Creek.[25] - I think it would be more useful to name the specific streams in a footnote. See footnote 3 in 2005 Qeshm earthquake for what I mean. Feel free to copy the method of footnotes there too if you want.
  • This includes Mount Rainier (500,000 years old),[27] Lassen Peak (25,000 years old),[15] Mount Jefferson (290,000 years old),[15] Mount St. Helens (50,000 years old)[15] and many more.[26] - No need to mention the many more. Includes indicates only selected volcanoes anyway.
  • "the local name, Cathedral, was duplicated elsewhere, so the mountain was renamed Meager after the creek of that name which lies to the south of it". - Where exactly does this quote come from? It should be directly cited because it's a quotation and references for quotes should never be ambiguous.
  • It was crushed, removed, and stored close to the village of Pemberton. Later the bridge that was used to access the pumice deposit was washed out and mining operations were not renewed. - Previously you'd been omitting the serial comma; for consistency, it's fine to omit it here.

Second Set:

General
  • Lead could probably be a little longer.


To Do[edit]

Category:Unassessed Solar System articles Category:Unassessed WikiProject Volcanoes articles Category:Unassessed WikiProject Earthquakes articles Look at 1979 Imperial Valley earthquake

Reviews[edit]

Widney[edit]

Joseph P. Widney during his tenure as President of USC

Joseph Pomeroy Widney, M.D. D.D. LL.D (December 26, 1841 – July 4, 1938) was an American doctor, educator, historian, and religious leader. He was one of the earliest visionaries of southern California as a garden and of Los Angeles as a metropolis.

The American Civil War brought him into medicine, and his brothers brought him to California where he received his medical degree. He saw southern California as a potential "Garden of Eden." In Los Angeles he helped found the Los Angeles Medical Society. He was a prominent backer of the new University of Southern California, becoming its second President and founding Dean of its School of Medicine. The Los Angeles Public Library was one of his major interests.

His real estate interests in California flourished, and he was an early environmentalist as well as promoter of the new metropolis. He believed profoundly in the growth of Los Angeles into a metropolis with a seaport, and using water from beyond the local mountains circling the small town, even to recreating Lake Cahuilla.

His religious beliefs led him to be a founder of the Church of the Nazarene in Los Angeles, as well as a Methodist pastor.

He published many books, principally on his views about California and its history, but only his Race Life of the Aryan Peoples was commercially published.

Really Old Stuff
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