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Doc James- This is a list of all my sources. I am a graduate student assigned to help edit this page. How are they not primary or appropriate medical information? They are either from the Lancet, WHO, or CDC.

1. Kuczmarski, Robert, Cynthia Ogden, Shumei Guo, Laurence Grummer Strawn, Katherine Flegal, Zuguo Mei, Rong Wei, Lester Curtin, Alex Roche, and Clifford Johnson. 2002. 2000 CDC growth charts for the united states: Methods and development. Vital and Health Statistics.Series 11, Data from the National Health Survey(246): 1-190. 2. WHO | development of a WHO growth reference for school-aged children and adolescents [cited 12/10/2011 2011]. Available from http://www.who.int/bulletin/volumes/85/9/07-043497/en/index.html (accessed 12/10/2011). 3. Borghi, E., M. de Onis, C. Garza, J. Van den Broeck, E. A. Frongillo, L. Grummer-Strawn, S. Van Buuren, et al. 2006; 2005. Construction of the world health organization child growth standards: Selection of methods for attained growth curves Statistics in Medicine 25 (2): 247 <last_page> 265. 4. Obesity and overweight for professionals: Childhood: Basics | DNPAO | CDC [cited 11/26/2011 2011]. Available from http://www.cdc.gov/obesity/childhood/basics.html (accessed 11/26/2011). 5. WHO | BMI-for-age (5-19 years) [cited 12/10/2011 2011]. Available from http://www.who.int/growthref/who2007_bmi_for_age/en/index.html (accessed 12/10/2011). 6. Orsi, C. M., D. E. Hale, and J. L. Lynch. 2010. Pediatric obesity epidemiology Current Opinion in Endocrinology, Diabetes, and Obesity (Dec 13), www.refworks.com. 7. Arch pediatr adolesc med -- changes in state-specific childhood obesity and overweight prevalence in the united states from 2003 to 2007, july 2010, singh et al. 164 (7): 598 [cited 11/30/2011 2011]. Available from http://archpedi.ama-assn.org/cgi/content/full/164/7/598 (accessed 11/30/2011). 8. Ogden, C. L. 2010. Obesity and socioeconomic status in children and adolescents: United states, 2005-2008. 9. Han, J. C., D. A. Lawlor, and S. Y. Kimm. 2010. Childhood obesity Lancet 375 (9727) (May 15): 1737-48. 10. WHO | childhood overweight and obesity [cited 11/28/2011 2011]. Available from http://www.who.int/dietphysicalactivity/childhood/en/ (accessed 11/28/2011). 11. de Onis, M., M. Blossner, and E. Borghi. 2010. Global prevalence and trends of overweight and obesity among preschool children The American Journal of Clinical Nutrition 92 (5) (Nov): 1257-64.

There are a few issues[edit]

  1. the content is not formatted correctly and there are no Wiki links (not that important but still)
  2. the text is too technical for example take this sentence "worldwide prevalence of childhood overweight and obesity increased from 4.2% (95% CI: 3.2%, 5.2%) in 1990 to 6.7% (95% CI: 5.6%, 7.7%) in 2010." We do not need the CIs. And this " Cross-sectional surveys from 144 countries were used and overweight and obesity were defined as preschool children with values >3SDs from the mean." greater than three standard deviations from the mean. Come on this is a general encyclopedia.
  3. third issues and the most significant one this line "worldwide prevalence of childhood overweight and obesity increased from 4.2% (95% CI: 3.2%, 5.2%) in 1990 to 6.7% (95% CI: 5.6%, 7.7%) in 2010." is exactly the same as this line "worldwide prevalence of childhood overweight and obesity increased from 4.2% (95% CI: 3.2%, 5.2%) in 1990 to 6.7% (95% CI: 5.6%, 7.7%) in 2010." which is found in this paper http://www.ajcn.org/content/92/5/1257.full There is much that is too closely paraphased / copy and pasted.
  4. This line of text is repeated 9 times "A 2010 NCHS Data Brief published by the CDC found interesting trends in prevalence of childhood obesity." [1]

Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 00:06, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

BTW welcome to Wikipedia[edit]

What I would suggest before getting involved with writing large amount of text is taking a look at our other high quality articles such as dengue fever. gout, or obesity. What we are trying to do is summarize knowledge and put it in a more generally accessible form. Ie remove some of the technical stuff and just present the facts. We be happy to discuss thing via skype if you wish further details. BTW what class are you with? I am involved with the WP:Global Education Program and would be happy to provide some instruction to your group. Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 00:10, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

BTW if you wish to leave me a message you need to do so on my talk page :-) Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 00:17, 17 December 2011 (UTC)
Also I have moved your content here and here Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 00:23, 17 December 2011 (UTC)
Learning how to edit Wikipedia takes some time. Have you had any formal instruction? Are there a group of you at Yale doing this? I have a friend who is teaching there by the name of Richard Lehman who is interested in getting more involved with Wikipedia. Have you had any contact with him?Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 02:57, 17 December 2011 (UTC)